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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Sun Will Never Know"Song lyrics with music attached
23 total reviews
Comment from GregoryCody
Stay with me and the sun will never know. WOW. This again has great alliteration and assonance. I know its "light and sweet" but no, this is deep and beautiful. It really is. Another six worthy. I'm so glad it won the contest. I can see why. I mean really, your words are perfectly chosen and your rhythm is top notch. Flows amazingly. You found a new fan!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Stay with me and the sun will never know. WOW. This again has great alliteration and assonance. I know its "light and sweet" but no, this is deep and beautiful. It really is. Another six worthy. I'm so glad it won the contest. I can see why. I mean really, your words are perfectly chosen and your rhythm is top notch. Flows amazingly. You found a new fan!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This goes way back. A song from back in the day. I was surprised it won honestly. But, simple and honest is advice I give pretty often so, I guess I followed it for once. ha! Really do appreciate the great review. Much thanks, mikey
Comment from amahra
I see why you won; that was amazing. I loved the art work you chose for this writing. I loved the repeated words and the writing itself was very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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I see why you won; that was amazing. I loved the art work you chose for this writing. I loved the repeated words and the writing itself was very well done.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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What lovely compliments. You are so kind to say so. I was very surprised and happy. Thank you so very much! mikey
Comment from Gungalo
fly above the sleeping sea
a moment past infinity
stay with me and the sun will never know
Congratulations on taking the top prize with this one Mike. Such a winner it is.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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fly above the sleeping sea
a moment past infinity
stay with me and the sun will never know
Congratulations on taking the top prize with this one Mike. Such a winner it is.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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I was quite surprised as I don't usually do well in these things. So pleased that you liked it and really delighted with the win. Thank you so very much, mikey
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Smiling at you.
Comment from JonnyRhymes
This is a great romance poem with powerful nature-themed imagery which helps convey the message poetically and creatively. I enjoyed this - well done!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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This is a great romance poem with powerful nature-themed imagery which helps convey the message poetically and creatively. I enjoyed this - well done!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Cool. Glad you liked it. A little pop kind of song from back in my more tender days. ha! Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from amanda98653
haha. I am so happy that you won (voted for u yesterday) yipee!
"Sky around the time we share"
The sky represents infinity, immortality, and transcendence..unconditional love exists for eternity
I love all the alliterations:
"through the clouds a silent stare"
(it's a sibilance, to be precise)
gentle and sweet
my fav lines:
"the clouds won't see what our minds perceive
the stars won't show what our hearts believe"
Hugs,
Amanda
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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haha. I am so happy that you won (voted for u yesterday) yipee!
"Sky around the time we share"
The sky represents infinity, immortality, and transcendence..unconditional love exists for eternity
I love all the alliterations:
"through the clouds a silent stare"
(it's a sibilance, to be precise)
gentle and sweet
my fav lines:
"the clouds won't see what our minds perceive
the stars won't show what our hearts believe"
Hugs,
Amanda
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much my friend. I was about your age when I wrote this. But, don't tell them. Ha! I thank you so kindly for voting for this. It really is a big thrill to win something. Maybe I will post the music one day. The stars look wonderful. So happy. Big smiles!! mikey
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hhahaha. i get that!!!lol
it's so sweet though:)
you're welcome
Amanda
Comment from teafor2
michaelcahill--Straight forward preface, personified title,
graphic artwork and love theme complement scribe's/speaker's
pleas for his love interest to indulge in a tryst. Speaker
is adamant and persistent, constantly insisting that no
matter what the two of them decide to do, "The Sun Will
Never Know." Excellent begging nuances/techniques employed
by poet. Congrats on winning the competition. teafor2
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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michaelcahill--Straight forward preface, personified title,
graphic artwork and love theme complement scribe's/speaker's
pleas for his love interest to indulge in a tryst. Speaker
is adamant and persistent, constantly insisting that no
matter what the two of them decide to do, "The Sun Will
Never Know." Excellent begging nuances/techniques employed
by poet. Congrats on winning the competition. teafor2
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Lovely comments so very appreciated. I was most surprised. I thank you kindly. warm regards, mikey
Comment from denhagan
This is a nice romantic love poem, written in the free verse style with good rhythm and some rhyming throughout the poem. Beautiful picture.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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This is a nice romantic love poem, written in the free verse style with good rhythm and some rhyming throughout the poem. Beautiful picture.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Glad you liked it. Thank you for the nice compliments and fine review. Most appreciated. mikey
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You're welcome Mikey,
Dennis
Comment from Jackarrie
A very different love poem having the Sun, moon, stars, rain, sea, thunder as witnesses to you love making. Well written, a nice flow to it. Good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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A very different love poem having the Sun, moon, stars, rain, sea, thunder as witnesses to you love making. Well written, a nice flow to it. Good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Appreciate the kind words. Thank you most kindly.
Comment from mfowler
Your beautiful imagery is imbued with both light and a whole lot of sweetness. I wish you the best in the contest. Your final stanza is just lovely.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Your beautiful imagery is imbued with both light and a whole lot of sweetness. I wish you the best in the contest. Your final stanza is just lovely.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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So very appreciated. Wow. What a great complimentary review. Win or lose I shall take these words as my prize. Thank you very much.
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I'm glad you are so pleased with my words. You desrve them. My entry in the contest is just silly and frivolous.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was lovely, lyrical and reads like a beautiful song.
I loved the repetition of the line, "and the sun will never know". This gave it a secretive, seductive feel, one that I found quite enchanting.
You've done a very nice job with the writing of this....
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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This was lovely, lyrical and reads like a beautiful song.
I loved the repetition of the line, "and the sun will never know". This gave it a secretive, seductive feel, one that I found quite enchanting.
You've done a very nice job with the writing of this....
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Wow. What a complimentary review. So very much appreciated. Thank you most kindly. Smiles!
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It was my pleasure!