5-7-5 (Man Cold)
A little wifely humor56 total reviews
Comment from livelylinda
simplyteresa: Oh, I could go on and on with this subject matter. . .but, we both already agree on "man cold" problems. It made me smile and chuckle and nod my head emphatically. Good write, here and a fantastic picture to enhance. livelylinda
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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simplyteresa: Oh, I could go on and on with this subject matter. . .but, we both already agree on "man cold" problems. It made me smile and chuckle and nod my head emphatically. Good write, here and a fantastic picture to enhance. livelylinda
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you so very much your feedback made me smile. I really appreciate your kind words and review.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha...when I got the flu and hubby did too he lay there hoarsely whispering ....I'm dying.....I still got up and fed the kids etc. I feel your pain. Great poem. He my husband is great though when I'm throwing up he'll put a cool cloth on my forehead.....
God bless
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Ha ha ha...when I got the flu and hubby did too he lay there hoarsely whispering ....I'm dying.....I still got up and fed the kids etc. I feel your pain. Great poem. He my husband is great though when I'm throwing up he'll put a cool cloth on my forehead.....
God bless
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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:) You are lucky to have one that will tend to you when you are sick. I'm in a house full of men (boys if you ask me), I buy lots of Lysol this time of year. :)
Thank you so much for the great feedback and wonderful review :)
Teresa
Comment from Eternal Muse
A very funny 5-7-5. I love those - no limit to imagination, and all wrapped in this short Japanese format. "Brevity that excludes extraneous", said Basho about these forms.
I laughed at this; as often people think they are dying, but it is a simple cold. I guess, having high temperature makes them prone to delusions (lol).
A very amusing write.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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A very funny 5-7-5. I love those - no limit to imagination, and all wrapped in this short Japanese format. "Brevity that excludes extraneous", said Basho about these forms.
I laughed at this; as often people think they are dying, but it is a simple cold. I guess, having high temperature makes them prone to delusions (lol).
A very amusing write.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much, I very happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for the wonderful feedback and great review :)
Teresa
Comment from KG Writes
simplyteresa Okay you made me laugh. I'm still laughing. As well your picture is awesome. Very best of luck in the contest. Great job. KG Writes
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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simplyteresa Okay you made me laugh. I'm still laughing. As well your picture is awesome. Very best of luck in the contest. Great job. KG Writes
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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:) So glad to hear you got a laugh from this one. Writing humor is a bit out of the box for me but I wanted to give it a try.
Thank you so much for this great review.
Teresa
Comment from dmt1967
Yes it is man's flu time again lol get out the violins and sympathy face lol great poem liked the picture good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Yes it is man's flu time again lol get out the violins and sympathy face lol great poem liked the picture good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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:) I plan going by Sam's Club for the bulk Lysol, I live in a house full of men (boys). This was fun to write and did get a laugh from my hubby.
Thanks so much for the great feedback and review. :)
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from visionary1234
oh yeah, poor guys, they all think they're going to DIE and demand huge amounts of sympathy and, unfortunately, up close & personal HUGS (IKKY!) You've got it all here in your 5-7-5! :)S
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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oh yeah, poor guys, they all think they're going to DIE and demand huge amounts of sympathy and, unfortunately, up close & personal HUGS (IKKY!) You've got it all here in your 5-7-5! :)S
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Indeed!! Thank you so much for the great feedback, you made me smile.
I really appreciate your kind review.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from Matoshka
Oh, I loved your picture and your words. I have noticed that when a man get sick, he is still a little boy, and for them it is the end of the world, if its us, we still have to take care of everything. LOL I so loved this one, Blessings and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Oh, I loved your picture and your words. I have noticed that when a man get sick, he is still a little boy, and for them it is the end of the world, if its us, we still have to take care of everything. LOL I so loved this one, Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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:) Indeed, men needs lots of TLC. Thank you so much for the wonderful feedback and review.
Smiles,
Teresa
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So welcome, Teresa, I enjoyed it. LOL Blessings
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Teresa,
If it was your intention to write a funny 5/7/5 poem you have accomplished that. My late husband was like the man you describe here. If I had a cold he was sure he had pneumonia! Love this poem and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Hi Teresa,
If it was your intention to write a funny 5/7/5 poem you have accomplished that. My late husband was like the man you describe here. If I had a cold he was sure he had pneumonia! Love this poem and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Chey, :) thank you. This was a fun little one to write and my husband did get a good (out loud) laugh so I was pleased. We work together, but somehow I have used very few sick days, he has used tons, hehe.
Thank you for the great feedback I always enjoy your reviews.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from christopherjl
Hi there, this is hilarious (and so true in many cases, isn't it?). In any case, I like the rhyme between the first and second lines... because of that though I feel the last line is hanging out there a bit awkward. I'm not sure if that's why... hmmm... I'll ponder this a bit more, if I can add clarity I will come back. Either way, great topic for a poem!!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Hi there, this is hilarious (and so true in many cases, isn't it?). In any case, I like the rhyme between the first and second lines... because of that though I feel the last line is hanging out there a bit awkward. I'm not sure if that's why... hmmm... I'll ponder this a bit more, if I can add clarity I will come back. Either way, great topic for a poem!!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback, I always sincerely appreciate insight from others. I'm here to polish my writing and meet new like minded "word nerds" :)
Thank you for the kind words and wonderful review.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from Mandi68
Your poem made me smile :-)
Recently my 17yr old son has had a cold or "Man Flu" as he called it. He told me it was a real ailment and I definitely should look it up in a dictionary, to which I replied, It must have been a man who put it there then! :-) xxx
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Your poem made me smile :-)
Recently my 17yr old son has had a cold or "Man Flu" as he called it. He told me it was a real ailment and I definitely should look it up in a dictionary, to which I replied, It must have been a man who put it there then! :-) xxx
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Enjoyed your feedback and am so glad it made you smile. I'm in a house full of men so I'll be breaking out the Lysol :)
Thank you for the wonderful review.
Smiles,
Teresa