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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Sparrow's Song"Song lyrics with music attached
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Comment from krys123
Thank you Michael for sharing this with your fans, myself and other readers/writers. Your Palm is very good in many ways however some of the context and concept by should I say the topic varies in a way that it shoots in so many directions. If I take each first the way it is, it's a separate topic which is very good, then you mean that means you have many topics in one poem. I like that. The rhyming is done very well and neither of the rhymes are strained, labor or forced. The rhythm is done so well in this poem that it makes it very easy for me to read your poem. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thank you Michael for sharing this with your fans, myself and other readers/writers. Your Palm is very good in many ways however some of the context and concept by should I say the topic varies in a way that it shoots in so many directions. If I take each first the way it is, it's a separate topic which is very good, then you mean that means you have many topics in one poem. I like that. The rhyming is done very well and neither of the rhymes are strained, labor or forced. The rhythm is done so well in this poem that it makes it very easy for me to read your poem. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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glad you liked this. it helps to have the music with it. but I liked the words so I thought I would post them. wonderful and thoughtful review. very appreciated. mike
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You're so welcome Mike and yes if it would be put to music I can really like it.
Comment from Cookie333
You know what Mike? With all the writing I have done and all the music I have listened to- I have never put the two together and written a song. I often have a tune in mind while I'm writing, I don't know why... You have inspired me.
Thank you my friend
Karen
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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You know what Mike? With all the writing I have done and all the music I have listened to- I have never put the two together and written a song. I often have a tune in mind while I'm writing, I don't know why... You have inspired me.
Thank you my friend
Karen
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Oh how true that is. I often am practically singing some of your pieces. I had an experience like this. I have this really involved story about Trednogs which are creatures that communicate only by song. it never occurred to me that I could write the songs or even what they might sound like. my friend played me and Enya song and said "I think this might be what your Trednogs would sound like." I almost cried. I just never made that connection in my mind even though both things were in there in such an active way. My God! I am a writer and a musician. How could I miss that connection. I know you could write some great songs. Go for it! mikey
Comment from pattipac
Enjoyed reading your poem about a struggling person, who wishes to be set free from his boring surroundings,as he notices a lone sparrow who chose to stay behind to endure the chill of winter.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Enjoyed reading your poem about a struggling person, who wishes to be set free from his boring surroundings,as he notices a lone sparrow who chose to stay behind to endure the chill of winter.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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very insightful and right on the money. one of my songs. one that I actually like. glad you liked it too. thank you, mike
Comment from steevie
Mike, another terrific poem from your pen.
Many junctures in life require help from not just ourselves, but from those of others. Even the tiniest of us, like the sparrow, need a helping hand. Your song lyrics bore this out so very well.
Bravo on a great write, my friend
steve
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Mike, another terrific poem from your pen.
Many junctures in life require help from not just ourselves, but from those of others. Even the tiniest of us, like the sparrow, need a helping hand. Your song lyrics bore this out so very well.
Bravo on a great write, my friend
steve
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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glad you liked this one. one of my few songs that I actually like myself. thank you kindly. mike
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You're very welcome, Mike.
Have you written other songs?
steve
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yeah. lots. not recorded up to current standards though. so, just kind of sitting on a shelf. not sure what to do with them. not very technically inclined. they used to have to plug everything in for me. hahaha,
Comment from CR Delport
A sit gets to summer now I love listening to the songs of birds early in the morning. They always sound so happy to be alive and inspires me to be more thankful for everything I have and stop dreading that which I dont. Another great poem.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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A sit gets to summer now I love listening to the songs of birds early in the morning. They always sound so happy to be alive and inspires me to be more thankful for everything I have and stop dreading that which I dont. Another great poem.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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thank you so much. this is one of my songs. actually a favorite of mine. happy you enjoyed it. I used to have a bird store. pretty much bird crazy. have had most of them from cranes to macaws. mike
Comment from FrannyG
Yes, fitting the music is important for song lyrics!. This has some lovely lines, Mike. I love 'waiting for a breeze/ borrowed from the trees', and the first verse is just beautiful. Very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Yes, fitting the music is important for song lyrics!. This has some lovely lines, Mike. I love 'waiting for a breeze/ borrowed from the trees', and the first verse is just beautiful. Very well done.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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thank you so much. I forget that my songs have words to them sometimes. some don't stand without the music. but some do. I am happy you liked this one. one of my favorites. mike
Comment from Sankey
Nice poem. Can't remember seeing sparrows around much these days. Mainly the noisy Mynah birds and Bamagpies and pigeons etc. We do get the odd couple of Galah's with the white tops of their heads pink and grey in other places.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Nice poem. Can't remember seeing sparrows around much these days. Mainly the noisy Mynah birds and Bamagpies and pigeons etc. We do get the odd couple of Galah's with the white tops of their heads pink and grey in other places.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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oh my! A Galah or Rose Breasted as we call them goes for three thousand dollars over here and your noisy Mynah birds about a thousand a piece. hahaha. if I ever visit I will be chasing them all over the country side!! I shall bring all the Sparrows you could ever want. the words are a pretty nice song actually. mike
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Was it you I was gonna do the picture show of the White Cockatoo with the broken wing in the cage and She had a male friend come along and they mad some babies together? I know I have your e-mail so I will work on it.
Comment from country ranch writer
feeling and knowing what you are going to go ahead and do is going to cause you regret in the end but you feel you must flee from the realm of reality into the unknown the bird will see you on your way
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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feeling and knowing what you are going to go ahead and do is going to cause you regret in the end but you feel you must flee from the realm of reality into the unknown the bird will see you on your way
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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so very true. but, it is no better where he might be going probably. thoughtful review as always. thank you kindly. mike
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welcome