Leander
poem204 total reviews
Comment from Ogden
Why was I not very surprised that the resistant little model is your grandson?
I have two hopes, that he wasn't typecast and that you won the contest.
Thanks for the warmth!
Ogden
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Why was I not very surprised that the resistant little model is your grandson?
I have two hopes, that he wasn't typecast and that you won the contest.
Thanks for the warmth!
Ogden
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
Comment from Laidy
This was funny to me. I liked the story in a poem. I like how he ended up tucked in at night. Really sometimes it's an attitudes perspective. Waking up on the wrong side of the bed. I loved the poem.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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This was funny to me. I liked the story in a poem. I like how he ended up tucked in at night. Really sometimes it's an attitudes perspective. Waking up on the wrong side of the bed. I loved the poem.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Laidy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Absolutely delightful story poem, Brooke. You made me fall in love with your grandson all over again with your poem and his perfect adorable photo. Good luck in the contest with Lee.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Absolutely delightful story poem, Brooke. You made me fall in love with your grandson all over again with your poem and his perfect adorable photo. Good luck in the contest with Lee.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Karyn, so glad you enjoyed this story poem. Thanks so much for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from arvi
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Very well-written. Yes, starlight is the limit and how fast they reach the limit! I like the imagination - just beautiful.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Very well-written. Yes, starlight is the limit and how fast they reach the limit! I like the imagination - just beautiful.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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arvi, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your encouraging comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke,
What a great picture! It sure looks like little Sawyer has some evil in his eye. I was thinking he'd just eaten something that didn't taste too good... peas or squash, perhaps? or a pickle? or something that would screw up my face... olives!
This is a great poem for kids... could be a picture book.
You know, if you put a deck of cards in his hands, he could be the dealer at the poker table on board a Mississippi steamboat back in Huckleberry Finn's day. He's watching them, suspecting a cheater.
I love your ending,
"and so she fluffed her villain's bed
and tucked Leander in it."
This is a great spot for terrible two's. But you know what? Then comes the tragic three's and fearsome four's! Thank Heaven for Preschool!
Nice 8/7/8/7 rhythm to your lines. Great rhymes.
Excellent!
Nicely penned!
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Hi Brooke,
What a great picture! It sure looks like little Sawyer has some evil in his eye. I was thinking he'd just eaten something that didn't taste too good... peas or squash, perhaps? or a pickle? or something that would screw up my face... olives!
This is a great poem for kids... could be a picture book.
You know, if you put a deck of cards in his hands, he could be the dealer at the poker table on board a Mississippi steamboat back in Huckleberry Finn's day. He's watching them, suspecting a cheater.
I love your ending,
"and so she fluffed her villain's bed
and tucked Leander in it."
This is a great spot for terrible two's. But you know what? Then comes the tragic three's and fearsome four's! Thank Heaven for Preschool!
Nice 8/7/8/7 rhythm to your lines. Great rhymes.
Excellent!
Nicely penned!
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Kimbob, thank you so very much. Sawyer is going through his fussy eater period where he rejects many many foods and then throws them at mommy. LOL Actually, for some odd reason, he loves pickles. Go figure. :-) I just love his evil eye, villainous expression in this photo. I so appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Cedar
This is a wonderful poem Brooke. That Leander was a
real meany for sure. And that picture of Sawyer made me
laugh, especially after I read your poem. Take care and have a good day. Bill
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful poem Brooke. That Leander was a
real meany for sure. And that picture of Sawyer made me
laugh, especially after I read your poem. Take care and have a good day. Bill
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, Bill :-) Brooke
Comment from Debra White
Brilliant!
I just loved this one Brooke - I was laughing at the photo before I even got to your funny funny poem.
Wonderful in every way (stanza 4 my favourite!)
Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Brilliant!
I just loved this one Brooke - I was laughing at the photo before I even got to your funny funny poem.
Wonderful in every way (stanza 4 my favourite!)
Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Debra, thank you so very much for your encouraging comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Janelle
I didn't ever think I would see a picture of Sawyer frowning! I assume that Leander is the name of his frown and so obviously Leander's naughtiness is quite infrequent for Sawyer always seem to be too busy being a smiling, little cherub! Liked this whimsical poem Brooke, thanks for sharing. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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I didn't ever think I would see a picture of Sawyer frowning! I assume that Leander is the name of his frown and so obviously Leander's naughtiness is quite infrequent for Sawyer always seem to be too busy being a smiling, little cherub! Liked this whimsical poem Brooke, thanks for sharing. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Jan, thank you so much. Sawyer is having a bit of a "naughty" phase at mealtimes. He is quite the fussy eater of late and throws his food at Mommy. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Sanku
What an expression!Miranda ,no doubt is an excellent camera person.And sawyer is so cute with his angry frown (but it cant be easy for his mother )
What a legendary evil boy Leander is turning out to be. to steal all the nice things from the world .His mother did the right thing .hope one day you will make him feel sorry and convert him to a good boy.with a master wordsmith like you the poem is superb with a delightful rhythm and beat ( i am reminded of a nursery rhyme of a boy who never shut the door(cant remember his name)I loved it
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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What an expression!Miranda ,no doubt is an excellent camera person.And sawyer is so cute with his angry frown (but it cant be easy for his mother )
What a legendary evil boy Leander is turning out to be. to steal all the nice things from the world .His mother did the right thing .hope one day you will make him feel sorry and convert him to a good boy.with a master wordsmith like you the poem is superb with a delightful rhythm and beat ( i am reminded of a nursery rhyme of a boy who never shut the door(cant remember his name)I loved it
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much, Sanku :-) Miranda is a wonderful photographer. I so appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from FrannyG
This is a delightful poem. Cute name for a baby villain. Just a couple of comments: I was fully expecting to read 'bones' in the second stanza to rhyme with 'stones'. Why didn't you use it? And in verse five, why not say 'before the birds could hatch them' which then makes a full rhyme with 'snatch them'. Small points, I know and they are only suggestions. See what you think. But a really good poem.
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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This is a delightful poem. Cute name for a baby villain. Just a couple of comments: I was fully expecting to read 'bones' in the second stanza to rhyme with 'stones'. Why didn't you use it? And in verse five, why not say 'before the birds could hatch them' which then makes a full rhyme with 'snatch them'. Small points, I know and they are only suggestions. See what you think. But a really good poem.
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thank you for reviewing, Franny. My rhyme scheme is abcb, and the stones word ends a non-rhyming line in that stanza. Also, I had nothing to say about bones, and I don't just include words for the sake of creating rhymes. The snatch them line was just a matter of personal preference. Brooke