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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Smoke At the Wind's Mercy"Song lyrics with music attached
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Comment from Sankey
Can't see any faults in this one. As usual for you, complex again. I am sure there is a philosophy in the back of this somewhere and I would be glad if you would share. Thanks anyway
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Can't see any faults in this one. As usual for you, complex again. I am sure there is a philosophy in the back of this somewhere and I would be glad if you would share. Thanks anyway
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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I think the smoke is just the world of responsibilities and burdens we are sometimes stuck with that kind of surround us. things we wish would just blow away and make our life easier. I love trains because they are things that can take us away to somewhere else. the tracks seem to go off farther than we can see. so, I suppose I am sitting there just thinking about things and maybe wishing things were different and then I hear the train and wish that I was on it and away from all the troubles. something like that. of course, my friend, we both know that there is just as many troubles at the next station. hahaha! there you go. that is probably more thought I'm giving it then when I wrote it!!! mike
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I appreciate the explanation sorry I did not get it. I have a train set hanging up in our garage that had great plans about but the main who was gonna be a part of that died just on a year ago now sadly. No time to play with it Summer the garage is too hot and Winter too cold so go figure. Spent more than $700 on it too.
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no problem. to tell you the truth. I have a couple that I have no idea what there about. just don't tell anyone! hahaha!! they sound good though. mike
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is something really different that
drew me in and held me throughout ---
quite unique - I do like your style.
You certainly have talent.
Margaret
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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This is something really different that
drew me in and held me throughout ---
quite unique - I do like your style.
You certainly have talent.
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I shouldn't say this but this is a bit like Paul McCartney telling me he likes my voice. I am really a little bit silly and delighted that you liked this and your kind praise. big smile. thank you so much. mike
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Silly is fine - my husband and I are often silly, even at our age - more fun. M
Comment from boxergirl
Now you owe me two. lol just kidding. I love trains . Your poem has the rhythm of a song . Great words to help visualize.
I smoked my first cig down by the train tracks. lol. we are all just like smoke. blowing in the wind. I dig it! :-)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Now you owe me two. lol just kidding. I love trains . Your poem has the rhythm of a song . Great words to help visualize.
I smoked my first cig down by the train tracks. lol. we are all just like smoke. blowing in the wind. I dig it! :-)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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it is a song. I am really delighted you like this. this is one of my own that I actually thought was pretty good. I don't think I will have any trouble finding a couple of your pieces worthy of sixes! thank you so very much. mikey (the oldest mikey on earth!)
Comment from lakeport
Smoke at the winds mercy, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed poem, very nice flow. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Lakeport.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Smoke at the winds mercy, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed poem, very nice flow. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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what wonderful words to read. so very happy to hear that you enjoyed this. big smile even though it shows my wrinkles. ha! blessings and warmest regards, mike
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your welcome.Lakeport.
Comment from rjuselius
interesting piece of poetry! i can dream of the tracks and the way they have been abandoned by everybody else but you.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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interesting piece of poetry! i can dream of the tracks and the way they have been abandoned by everybody else but you.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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So pleased you enjoyed this. I have always loved trains. Thank you for a great review. Mike
Comment from robina1978
I never saw anything by you before and I think you can indeed sing this one. I loved the combination of smoke from a cigarette and a train. Both make you feel terrible. The wind blows it away.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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I never saw anything by you before and I think you can indeed sing this one. I loved the combination of smoke from a cigarette and a train. Both make you feel terrible. The wind blows it away.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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very nice to meet you. lovely and encouraging words. most appreciated and encouraging. thank you so very much. big smiles. mike
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welcome, Ine
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, there is still something romantic about the
train--especially the older ones, with their works
showing. I like the conversational tone of this.
And your reference to the infinity of the tracks.
Trains have always made great songs.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Ah, there is still something romantic about the
train--especially the older ones, with their works
showing. I like the conversational tone of this.
And your reference to the infinity of the tracks.
Trains have always made great songs.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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I imagine every musician has a couple train songs. great review. thank you. mike
Comment from Spitfire
I love this one too, Michael. We do have to keep working on our inner and outer vibrations all the time, the things that keep us moving even as we move into old age. Sigh. At least a wind will keep us from being stagnant. I love to walk with a stong breeze pushing me forward.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I love this one too, Michael. We do have to keep working on our inner and outer vibrations all the time, the things that keep us moving even as we move into old age. Sigh. At least a wind will keep us from being stagnant. I love to walk with a stong breeze pushing me forward.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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amen to that. I just ignore old age and exist in a world of my own making as though it doesn't exist. hahaha. works for me! warm regards, mike
Comment from Brumar97
I truly enjoyed your rhythm and word choices. "dig" is a little outdated:) You may need to work on your mechanics a bit (lite=light and but.= but). A little polish and this will be a winner. Thank you for sharing:)
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I truly enjoyed your rhythm and word choices. "dig" is a little outdated:) You may need to work on your mechanics a bit (lite=light and but.= but). A little polish and this will be a winner. Thank you for sharing:)
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. the use of "dig" and the spelling of "lite" was intentional and I felt in keeping with the mood of the piece. so, a choice, I suppose. I appreciate you pointing our "but." I may not have noticed that forever. ha! it is funny how one gets used to seeing something until they really don't see it at all. ha! regards, mike
Comment from Lylise
Charming! You are a good free verse writer. You know when to break your lines and paragraphs to keep the flow going. Who's to say what a train thinks? Ha! Great line. I love your work for all the quirky and poignant lines that pop up like that one. This is a lovely piece. Very carefree. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Charming! You are a good free verse writer. You know when to break your lines and paragraphs to keep the flow going. Who's to say what a train thinks? Ha! Great line. I love your work for all the quirky and poignant lines that pop up like that one. This is a lovely piece. Very carefree. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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great review. you are the only one to catch that line. when I wrote that I thought to myself "hey, brosky, not bad" ha! thank you, mike