Comment from ShonMS

Excellent

I especially enjoyed the story within this poem. What a twist at the end! The rhyming and flow are excellent as well. Great job, and best wishes on the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

I would say this is a love story gone bad for sure. It is well-written and expresses what many probably feel. God loves you and so do I.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This guy is definitely in trouble and clueless as to his coming fate. He should have bee true. Solid rhymes and a steady meter that helps build the negative emotions. Good job with the prompt and best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013

Thanks for the positive review.

Comment from mickbey

Excellent

Whoa, I don't know whether to laugh and scream after reading this poem, oh boy, this did bring out the image of a woman's scorn, it fit the prompt well and is full of energy and emotion, well crafted, nice work, good luck.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013

Ha ha . Thanks for reviewing.