A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Purple's Majesty"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
67 total reviews
Comment from amanda98653
Truly amazing, Dean. Simply sublime.
The title really caught my attention: Purple's Majesty
You've already mentioned in your author notes the significance of the color "purple" ..butI would love to tell you more:
Purple is derived from the combination of red and blue, it unites red's fiery masculinity with blue's cool femininity.
Relating to Christianity.. the color link it with God the Father and royal power
The first line is profound:
"Tho' silken fog doth saunter in"- hint of personification there.
The word "silken" is beautiful..smoothness..softeness
very delicate
"fog" - In the Bible, it is an image preceding great relevations. It is the "gray" zone between reality and unreality.
A transformation into the unreal.
saunter- suggesting easiness..to linger
"I'm lost to where I must begin,
clouded veil hinders musings so"
"Lost" links to "clouded veil
A hidden knowledge..secrecy..perhaps an illusion in which you find hard to interpret.
Very good use of rhetorical question:
"I long to leave, but dare I go?"
The main character pondering..in turn engaging the reader.
The second stanza is beautiful:
"A violet symphony's delight"
the melodic voice of nature..a violet symphony umm
violet relates to "purple"- very lovely
"where right is wrong, and wrong's just right"
A poetic line of a deep, philosophical meaning.
"there is no black, nor ever gray-
for purple's hue doth rue the day"
No black, nor ever gray
no fear nor sadness
for purple's beauty brings delight and happiness
"The silent whisperings of a ghost"
A line that conveys a deep sense of melancholy
"I sit alone- solitary host"
"as fields of lilacs stir in the breeze
I find this sets my mind at ease"
Words of beauty.
Lilacs-Like other variations of purple, lilacs are associated also with spirituality.
"sets my mind at ease"- bringing peace
The last stanza is sublime:
"The rain falls heavy from the skies"
very good use of pathetic fallacy, enhancing
the tragic mood.
"I fear that I shall never see
this field- this purple's majesty"
One of beauty. Sigh. The dark side of nature's cycle. Everything fades..and dies.
Splendid poem you've written there, Dean.
The rhyme scheme is flawless
The structure is profound.
A beautiful poem.
Amanda
p.s. A minor mistake (spelling):
"Dedicated to FanStroy's own adewpearl, just because.."
*fanstory*
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Truly amazing, Dean. Simply sublime.
The title really caught my attention: Purple's Majesty
You've already mentioned in your author notes the significance of the color "purple" ..butI would love to tell you more:
Purple is derived from the combination of red and blue, it unites red's fiery masculinity with blue's cool femininity.
Relating to Christianity.. the color link it with God the Father and royal power
The first line is profound:
"Tho' silken fog doth saunter in"- hint of personification there.
The word "silken" is beautiful..smoothness..softeness
very delicate
"fog" - In the Bible, it is an image preceding great relevations. It is the "gray" zone between reality and unreality.
A transformation into the unreal.
saunter- suggesting easiness..to linger
"I'm lost to where I must begin,
clouded veil hinders musings so"
"Lost" links to "clouded veil
A hidden knowledge..secrecy..perhaps an illusion in which you find hard to interpret.
Very good use of rhetorical question:
"I long to leave, but dare I go?"
The main character pondering..in turn engaging the reader.
The second stanza is beautiful:
"A violet symphony's delight"
the melodic voice of nature..a violet symphony umm
violet relates to "purple"- very lovely
"where right is wrong, and wrong's just right"
A poetic line of a deep, philosophical meaning.
"there is no black, nor ever gray-
for purple's hue doth rue the day"
No black, nor ever gray
no fear nor sadness
for purple's beauty brings delight and happiness
"The silent whisperings of a ghost"
A line that conveys a deep sense of melancholy
"I sit alone- solitary host"
"as fields of lilacs stir in the breeze
I find this sets my mind at ease"
Words of beauty.
Lilacs-Like other variations of purple, lilacs are associated also with spirituality.
"sets my mind at ease"- bringing peace
The last stanza is sublime:
"The rain falls heavy from the skies"
very good use of pathetic fallacy, enhancing
the tragic mood.
"I fear that I shall never see
this field- this purple's majesty"
One of beauty. Sigh. The dark side of nature's cycle. Everything fades..and dies.
Splendid poem you've written there, Dean.
The rhyme scheme is flawless
The structure is profound.
A beautiful poem.
Amanda
p.s. A minor mistake (spelling):
"Dedicated to FanStroy's own adewpearl, just because.."
*fanstory*
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for this fabulous, amazing review, Amanda. You hit precisely on every single emotion that I tried to relay, and that's impressive!
I am very happy that you; a very spiritual person in your own right, no doubt, could connect with this meager offering so completely. You certainly know your "stuff", my young friend. Don't ever let anyone try to tell you differently!
Thanks so much again...
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My pleasure, Dean.
You poems are magnificent and truly inspiring.
Your reply made me smile:)
Thank you so much.
Amanda
Comment from EmberSnowcat
Wow, absolutely amazing Dean. If I had not gone to your page, I'd never known that it was you that wrote this. You have such absolute talent with words. A true writer can do many different genres, and you my friend, are a true writer. I love seeing this side of your talent! Absolutely amazing! By the way, putting it to Inuyashas lullabye was pure genius! I love Inuyasha. Beautifully done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Wow, absolutely amazing Dean. If I had not gone to your page, I'd never known that it was you that wrote this. You have such absolute talent with words. A true writer can do many different genres, and you my friend, are a true writer. I love seeing this side of your talent! Absolutely amazing! By the way, putting it to Inuyashas lullabye was pure genius! I love Inuyasha. Beautifully done.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Ember, I am so pleased that you liked this one. I appreciate you digging it out and dusting it off to read and review it for me. I truly appreciate it, and welcome back, great to hear from you!
Comment from Jade Lawson
I loved the sound of this poem. What a great poem you created.
It seemed like I was in a movie and there was something mystical about that landscape.
The last stanza it was my favourite.
Still there was sadness and a feeling of loss that I felt as I read this poem. Loved it. Another six, you know.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I loved the sound of this poem. What a great poem you created.
It seemed like I was in a movie and there was something mystical about that landscape.
The last stanza it was my favourite.
Still there was sadness and a feeling of loss that I felt as I read this poem. Loved it. Another six, you know.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much for this review, Angel. You caught one of my more serious, less morbid writings here. I don't believe I'm as good at them as I am the scarier stuff, but I am very happy to know you liked it just the same!
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Dean, you know, I'm planing to write a story about ghosts. I real one that happened inside my house, although I may use a bit of fiction in it. I always wanted to write an horror story, but I always thought that I couldn't do it because of my vocabulary may still not be enough, but what the hell, I'm gonna give it a go. Once someone told me that he could not understand how I could write novels and also poetry, because poets are not story tellers, like him. I can't understand that because in all my poems I tried to tell a story. I mentioned about this to a friend. Do you know what she told me? A good writer is capable of writing everything! You are a good writer.
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You should write that horror story. I'd be one of the first in line to read it. And, should you want to send it to me in my inbox as a private message for help editing it, I'd be more than happy to help you out as much as I possibly can.
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I'll try yes,I'm just concerned about descriptions. Horror stories need good descriptions, but I'll be reading your work and I may get inspired and learn before I attempt to do it. You know that when I was younger, I wrote a continuation of the saga "a nightmare in elm street" Ahah, I used to read lots of books about horror, but they were not in English. English stories? Only fanstory now :)
Comment from Jane Johnson
Don't need to think twice about that six Dean Kuch! You are a master of poetry. You have captured my less spooky side this time. Thanks to Brooke for requesting this; it is beautiful....like everything you do. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Don't need to think twice about that six Dean Kuch! You are a master of poetry. You have captured my less spooky side this time. Thanks to Brooke for requesting this; it is beautiful....like everything you do. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks for such a wonderful compliment, Jane. I appreciate your support for what I try to do.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
I put off reading your piece to Miss Evelyn late last night because they're always scary . With her being on meds I didn't want to put a scary story in her mind before she went to sleep. Had i know you had done something so delightful we would have shared it last night instead of this morning. You're an awesome writer. We would love to see more of this part of you as it doesn't leave us afraid. Great job. God loves you and we do too.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I put off reading your piece to Miss Evelyn late last night because they're always scary . With her being on meds I didn't want to put a scary story in her mind before she went to sleep. Had i know you had done something so delightful we would have shared it last night instead of this morning. You're an awesome writer. We would love to see more of this part of you as it doesn't leave us afraid. Great job. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Oh, mercy! A six from one of my favorite, most cherished authors on FS! I am on cloud ten (that's just one above cloud nine, LOL)
Comment from Spitfire
I love the music -a violet symphony itself. Not crazy about the picture --too loud for my tastes in art. I love purple too and it is a healing color. How different from your usual writes. Shows a wistful side of you.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I love the music -a violet symphony itself. Not crazy about the picture --too loud for my tastes in art. I love purple too and it is a healing color. How different from your usual writes. Shows a wistful side of you.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Well, coming from an art connoisseur, perhaps I should have thought better about my choice. I just loved the old world feel, and the crackling style of the piece, it seemed to fit so well, I thought. Oh well, that's what I get for thinking...
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Dean
I've read your poem over and over again, and I just don't get it. The last two verses seem to be about the end of your life.
You write about Heaven coming down to earth, and the Master calling you. But why the tears? You almost have me thinking that these purple fields are your vision of glory, but why don't you think you'll ever see them? We aren't worthy, but Christ makes us worthy. Our hope is in Him, and Him alone.
I think it's a fine gesture to write a poem especially for Brooke, Fanstory's premier poet.
You have a great way with words, but many lines are off rhythm. I won't list them all. Perhaps you weren't going for a definite meter.
"clouded veil hinders musings so" ... "so" is a poor adverb.
"as fields of lilacs stir in the breeze"...let's turn it around, what do you think?
(as fields of lilacs stir the breeze)
The ending,
"I fear that I shall never see
this field - this purple's majesty"
I suggest,
(I fear that I shall never see
this field - this purple majesty) ...but who am I?
Love the picture you chose to compliment your poem.
cheers
Kimbob
p.s. You had to throw a ghost in there, didn't you?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Hi Dean
I've read your poem over and over again, and I just don't get it. The last two verses seem to be about the end of your life.
You write about Heaven coming down to earth, and the Master calling you. But why the tears? You almost have me thinking that these purple fields are your vision of glory, but why don't you think you'll ever see them? We aren't worthy, but Christ makes us worthy. Our hope is in Him, and Him alone.
I think it's a fine gesture to write a poem especially for Brooke, Fanstory's premier poet.
You have a great way with words, but many lines are off rhythm. I won't list them all. Perhaps you weren't going for a definite meter.
"clouded veil hinders musings so" ... "so" is a poor adverb.
"as fields of lilacs stir in the breeze"...let's turn it around, what do you think?
(as fields of lilacs stir the breeze)
The ending,
"I fear that I shall never see
this field - this purple's majesty"
I suggest,
(I fear that I shall never see
this field - this purple majesty) ...but who am I?
Love the picture you chose to compliment your poem.
cheers
Kimbob
p.s. You had to throw a ghost in there, didn't you?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Hah, yes, that specter weaseled his (or her) way in there somehow.
Thanks for your review and concerns Kimbob. I do appreciate them both, your fine suggestions as well as your wonderful review. I suppose that all I was saying is as lovely as the purple fields of lilacs my protagonist finds himself in, he's just not sure where he's going, who's calling him home. Oh, his time has come, no doubt about it. It's time for him to go. I say his master calls, but do I say which master he's served? He is not sure himself, hence the references to never seeing his lovely lilac fields again... If we want our own little slice of heaven, we'd better be sure we're going to be happy with who is calling us home.
Thanks for the wonderful review.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
I will one day venture forth to see those lavender fields. Your talents as a writer shine through in this word. Even without the music there is haunting beauty in the words...Stephanie
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I will one day venture forth to see those lavender fields. Your talents as a writer shine through in this word. Even without the music there is haunting beauty in the words...Stephanie
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, Stephanie. I am happy that you enjoyed reading it.
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It is such a beautiful piece. You rocked that challenge.
Comment from WN BUCHAN
You are an incredibly talented artist and poet, this piece of work is just amazing. Your words just flow freely and in harmony, and yes purple has always been noted as a majestic and spiritual colour, also my soul-mates favourite colour.
Take a bow.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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You are an incredibly talented artist and poet, this piece of work is just amazing. Your words just flow freely and in harmony, and yes purple has always been noted as a majestic and spiritual colour, also my soul-mates favourite colour.
Take a bow.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, WN BUCHAN. I have been so very grateful that many from different countries have been able to relate to this. It was certainly penned from the heart...
Thanks again, my friend.
Comment from poet.wayne
So beautiful! This is an excellent pastoral type poem... a "Monet of words"! And the piece of music is the perfect choice... just a hint of an Oriental feel, like the strong connection to nature, earth, seasons in Oriental poetry. Awesome work dude!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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So beautiful! This is an excellent pastoral type poem... a "Monet of words"! And the piece of music is the perfect choice... just a hint of an Oriental feel, like the strong connection to nature, earth, seasons in Oriental poetry. Awesome work dude!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, poet.wayne. I am so happy you enjoyed it, my friend.
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