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Louise, part 1

Boy tempted by lust and faith

37 total reviews 
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This compelling story moves fast, captures your attention, and places you in the scene with the characters. This proves, boys shouldn't play around with grown women. They'll be led astray every time. I'm going straight to part 2 to see what happens.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
    Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Well, guess what? I read part two before part one. Go figure. LOL How many young men, or even some older ones, have been seduced by a beautiful woman? I bet a lot. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for reposting it.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Thank you so much. I'm sure the numbers are staggering. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Absolutely awesome! One of those tummy ticklers that makes an old man wish he could go back, and for just once, be young again. LOL. Where imagination meets reality. Thanks for sharing. Just wish I had a six.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Thanks, Ric. I'm glad you liked this. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
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Stalking a female is never a good thing .The teenager is totally infatuated with her I think this will not have a good ending.So I am curious to see what comes after..

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
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So if you're working full time, how on earth do you have the time to write so much????? This is a very sexy story, and reminds me of ... no, maybe that's for me to write in a story!

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    You write that story!! Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Wish I could see the picture. It must be a doozie. Well, I have a good imagination so I figure I know where this is going. She robs him of his cherry and turns him into her personal "Renfield". I only say this because I know you. I think you, me, Ric, Sandra Stoner Mitchell, Terry, and Jay should write an anthology book. Three stories a piece. What do you think? Just a thought. Karen

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Lol. Sounds good but you'd have to put it together. I can hardly keep my own stuff together. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 21-Sep-2023
    I am just thinking on it right now to see if there is any interest. It is a good idea. But it would take work to get it all done. Karen
Comment from Wendy G
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Believable and well-written characters. Sounds like this will be a coming of age story. But who knows? They may end up in love. "The moral dilemma in every situation" will be coming to the fore as he wrestles with his upbringing and beliefs. Well written.
Wendy

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Thank you so much for this. Wrestle he does. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
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Oh my Gretchen,
I'm afraid that this young man may have bitten off more than he can chew. Sometimes it's best to keep your fantasies in your mind and not to let them loose. I don't see anything good coming from this. At best a temporary release. I hate to think of the worse case scenario. Well done gal.
Blessings,
Tom

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Tom. You were right to assume nothing good is going to come of this. I appreciate this kind review. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is a well-written beginning. It's a slightly cliched beginning but there are things you can do to make it special. I'm looking forward to seeing where you are going with this.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
    Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
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I love these juicy stories. I can't wait to see where it is all heading. How old is Louise supposed to be? Couldn't see any spags through here. Keep it coming.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
    Louise and Tucker might live happily ever after. Then again, that's not my style, is it? Thanks for this nice review. Gretchen