Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Iyaope Moon"Murder Mystery
52 total reviews
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Bev, some jolly good descriptive work in this chapter. I like how you developed the twins in little time as well as Ty. I enjoyed the little skirmish between the two brothers. Seems they're never too old for a good family fight. Now the Sh*t has hit the fan and it seems they've found Fritz's body. Can't wait to read on. Luv jada
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hi Bev, some jolly good descriptive work in this chapter. I like how you developed the twins in little time as well as Ty. I enjoyed the little skirmish between the two brothers. Seems they're never too old for a good family fight. Now the Sh*t has hit the fan and it seems they've found Fritz's body. Can't wait to read on. Luv jada
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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I liked those two characters. If I had more time with this novel, I'd develop them a bit more. Glad you liked them - and the chapter - too. Love ya, Bev
Comment from jjstar
Gees, I can't believe I've been so tied up I've missed so much. It's such a treat to read this. I loved everything about it. The mixture of the old ways, melding with the "new way" of Ty is a great contrast. Okay, guess I won't say too much. On to the next. :)
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Ty's answering smile curved gently like a river connecting two mountain peaks==nice..:)
missing skin by a whisker==that's a blast from the past. My grandfather used to say that. :)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Gees, I can't believe I've been so tied up I've missed so much. It's such a treat to read this. I loved everything about it. The mixture of the old ways, melding with the "new way" of Ty is a great contrast. Okay, guess I won't say too much. On to the next. :)
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Ty's answering smile curved gently like a river connecting two mountain peaks==nice..:)
missing skin by a whisker==that's a blast from the past. My grandfather used to say that. :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Thank you, jj. I so appreciate your generosity and support. How kind of you to go back and read this chapter. That's really awesome, my friend. Your encouragement means so much! Hugs, Bev
Comment from beccabootie123
I hate to say when its all said and done that I think I read this already wish there was a way to know, it sounded familiar. then I saw how many views. well written held my interest second time or not. now I want to read previous chapters, keep it going. well done
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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I hate to say when its all said and done that I think I read this already wish there was a way to know, it sounded familiar. then I saw how many views. well written held my interest second time or not. now I want to read previous chapters, keep it going. well done
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Hi, becca. I appreciate the review, especially if it is after reading twice! Thanks for stopping by and thanks for the encouragement. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from donaldww
I love the name of the street, 'Cowbird Lane', and the brothers Bree, Raymond and Russell. Something quite poetic sounding about these names.
Excellent detail about Ty's smile being a curve connecting two mountains! I can really picture that kind of angular face!
Super job!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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I love the name of the street, 'Cowbird Lane', and the brothers Bree, Raymond and Russell. Something quite poetic sounding about these names.
Excellent detail about Ty's smile being a curve connecting two mountains! I can really picture that kind of angular face!
Super job!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Hi, Donald. Thanks a lot for pointint out some of my favorite parts! I really appreciate you taking time to read and your very generous review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from donkeyoatey
this is unfolding in a very interesting way! I think your characters are being well developed, and I find them interesting personally. Being able to engage with the characters in the story is huge! Thanks for choosing my artwork, I am honored indeed! DonkeyOatey
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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this is unfolding in a very interesting way! I think your characters are being well developed, and I find them interesting personally. Being able to engage with the characters in the story is huge! Thanks for choosing my artwork, I am honored indeed! DonkeyOatey
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for that, D.K. I've had a few folks remark on the beauty of the artwork. In fact, I found quite a few 'pieces' I admired as I perused your portfolio. Say, if I ever publish my story, would you be interested in doing the illustration? There has been some interest expressed in submitting it for publication. But I am a ways away from that making a decision on that process.
Warmest regards, Bev
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I would be honored..when you get to that point, just ask! Donkeyoatey
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Thank you! That's awesome.
Comment from Joy Graham
I love this story, Bev. I'll give you six star ratings as often as I can :) While we were traveling to my mom's last weekend I noticed the moon. Hubby told me the name of it but I can't remember now. I thought of you and your story. So glad to get home and see a new chapter to read!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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I love this story, Bev. I'll give you six star ratings as often as I can :) While we were traveling to my mom's last weekend I noticed the moon. Hubby told me the name of it but I can't remember now. I thought of you and your story. So glad to get home and see a new chapter to read!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Joy, what a gracious and generous review! You are really most kind to follow my story so loyally. You're words have made my evening complete! Thank you so much! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Cornelius2000
This chapter fairly crackles with energy. Ty Longacre is a particularly likable character, and the story moves along at a fast pace. Well written, and most enjoyable.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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This chapter fairly crackles with energy. Ty Longacre is a particularly likable character, and the story moves along at a fast pace. Well written, and most enjoyable.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Hi, Dave. I'm glad you like Ty because I really like him, too. Thanks so much for the great review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Gideon300
Nothing like a body, to break up a silly agrument. I like the way you used the casino pay checks that put just that niggle of a doubt and controversy in between the brothers. Nice work.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Nothing like a body, to break up a silly agrument. I like the way you used the casino pay checks that put just that niggle of a doubt and controversy in between the brothers. Nice work.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Hi, Stauros. Thanks for the witty, and generous, review. I appreciate it! Bev
Comment from kashmayank
You captured the setting well with your words that increased the appeal of the work a good tempo maintained I liked reading it all the best
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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You captured the setting well with your words that increased the appeal of the work a good tempo maintained I liked reading it all the best
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much, Kashmayank. I sure appreciate you taking time to read my chapter and your generous review. Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Bloody superb writing. You know, Bev, I read a lot. Everything from NY Best Sellers to run-of-the-mill romances. Your writing is as good as anything I read, and by far, much better than most.
It's so darn real. The little details, how you set a scene. The paragraph with the Stetson is an example of how you take a mundane action and turn into something vivid and important. Fantastic.
Dialogue is perfect. The mood - perfect. The fight scene - brilliantly portrayed. You write action very very well.
I adore the native touches, as you know. And now you've left us with yet another good hook.
Bravo. I'm just gobsmacked by your talent. One of the best writers on this site, my lady!
Love and hugz
Av
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Sorry I'm late reviewing. Had the flu, and it sucks.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Bloody superb writing. You know, Bev, I read a lot. Everything from NY Best Sellers to run-of-the-mill romances. Your writing is as good as anything I read, and by far, much better than most.
It's so darn real. The little details, how you set a scene. The paragraph with the Stetson is an example of how you take a mundane action and turn into something vivid and important. Fantastic.
Dialogue is perfect. The mood - perfect. The fight scene - brilliantly portrayed. You write action very very well.
I adore the native touches, as you know. And now you've left us with yet another good hook.
Bravo. I'm just gobsmacked by your talent. One of the best writers on this site, my lady!
Love and hugz
Av
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Sorry I'm late reviewing. Had the flu, and it sucks.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Av, you are such an angel! I am deeply, deeply honored because you are someone whose writing always inspires me. I often tell my husband that you are one of my absolute favorite writers on the planet. I'm learning a lot with this novel, and I find myself strongly gravitating toward the Native American characters. So, your insights in that direction are really helpful.
So sorry that you've got caught in that nasty flu going around. Humpwhistle apparently has been down for the count with the bug, too. I sure hope you are feeling stronger.
Thank you so much for your generosity and graciousness. Especially given how badly you're feeling.
Love and BIG hug,
Bev
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This book will be published, I'm sure. It would make a great film, actually.
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I do love scriptwriting. In fact, as soon as I'm finished with Stacia's class, I'm going to put out another scene from the snoop sisters. Thanks so much for your encouragement, Av. XxxOoo Bev