Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
This chapter is worth ten stars! Your knowledge of First Nation culture is amazing. I love the way you've used the language and the proper address to Jana's Elder as she walked in the house. The spirit passing through the house is so well written. I felt that I was a part of every step of the chapter, from the ride home to the time in the house. This is an excellent book! I see that it is up for book of the month. I wish you the very best. You sure deserve the win!
Bye.
Your friend, Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
Hi, Bev.
This chapter is worth ten stars! Your knowledge of First Nation culture is amazing. I love the way you've used the language and the proper address to Jana's Elder as she walked in the house. The spirit passing through the house is so well written. I felt that I was a part of every step of the chapter, from the ride home to the time in the house. This is an excellent book! I see that it is up for book of the month. I wish you the very best. You sure deserve the win!
Bye.
Your friend, Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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I am fascinated by the fact that I just finished a review of your latest chapter, Rosalyne, for which I wished I had a ten! That is so cool when hearts and minds are in tune like that. Thank you, dear friend, for your stunning review. Means so much to me! Love ya, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Wow! Looking forward to more in the next chapter. This is the time when I am glad to know the next chapter is ready for me to read so I don't have to wait a week or two for your next post :)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
Wow! Looking forward to more in the next chapter. This is the time when I am glad to know the next chapter is ready for me to read so I don't have to wait a week or two for your next post :)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Joy. I am really honored by your continued support and interest. You're the best! Bev
Comment from Realist101
Hi Bev! I had this bookcased meaning to read it a month ago! I do hope to hold this in my hands. I was totally creeped out as the wind swooshed thru the house and the door ajar. I swear this has happened to me as well....and not all that long ago. I love this Bev, and let me know about whether it'll be a real book? Best too, in the polls. xoxo!! Susan
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
Hi Bev! I had this bookcased meaning to read it a month ago! I do hope to hold this in my hands. I was totally creeped out as the wind swooshed thru the house and the door ajar. I swear this has happened to me as well....and not all that long ago. I love this Bev, and let me know about whether it'll be a real book? Best too, in the polls. xoxo!! Susan
Comment Written 30-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Hi, Susan. Thanks for the great review! I really appreciate the time you took to read and review, my friend. I also appreciate your good luck wishes. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Rob Caudle
Hey, Bev, so sorry I have not been around for awhile. I have been busy with work, so fan story has been off limits. But I had a minute to spare and wanted to catch up. I see my absence has not dulled your talent. The story is twisted up quite nicely the bad guy is still very well done and Jana's uncle brings a nice supernatural spin to the tale. Again I found your writing to be professional on every level a very nice bit of work here.
Rob
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
Hey, Bev, so sorry I have not been around for awhile. I have been busy with work, so fan story has been off limits. But I had a minute to spare and wanted to catch up. I see my absence has not dulled your talent. The story is twisted up quite nicely the bad guy is still very well done and Jana's uncle brings a nice supernatural spin to the tale. Again I found your writing to be professional on every level a very nice bit of work here.
Rob
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Rob, thank you so very much my friend. Your generosity is truly inspiring and heart-warming. Hugs, Bev
Comment from wordsfromsue
This is getting so twisted, Bev. I'm sorry I didn't review when you first posted, but I've been spreading my attention around this summer to lots of fun pursuits! And then I come back to read this and this guy's just getting whacked freaky!
Did I ever tell you I know a real serial killer? Not something to brag about, I should say I met him multiple times and was acquainted with him. He was always polite to me, thankfully.
Back to your story, sorry, my mind drifted off to that man for a moment. Your guy is way creepy. He definitely thinks he's performing noble acts.
I think killer's like him, in their minds, are doing very right things.
Ooh, the scene with Jana's uncle was good. I liked the supernatural thing happening with him. I'm not Indian, but I think my .... whatever you call it, is a little more sensitive to the supernatural than some. Fortunately, the good, not the awful scary kind!
I'm really wandering around with this review. It's my long winded way of saying I enjoyed this chapter very much!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
This is getting so twisted, Bev. I'm sorry I didn't review when you first posted, but I've been spreading my attention around this summer to lots of fun pursuits! And then I come back to read this and this guy's just getting whacked freaky!
Did I ever tell you I know a real serial killer? Not something to brag about, I should say I met him multiple times and was acquainted with him. He was always polite to me, thankfully.
Back to your story, sorry, my mind drifted off to that man for a moment. Your guy is way creepy. He definitely thinks he's performing noble acts.
I think killer's like him, in their minds, are doing very right things.
Ooh, the scene with Jana's uncle was good. I liked the supernatural thing happening with him. I'm not Indian, but I think my .... whatever you call it, is a little more sensitive to the supernatural than some. Fortunately, the good, not the awful scary kind!
I'm really wandering around with this review. It's my long winded way of saying I enjoyed this chapter very much!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Hi, Sue. Thanks so much for this really great review. And I'm very glad you've had some fun this summer! Thanks for letting me know what worked for you, Sue. That is so very helpful. A big hug and thanks! Bev
Comment from kashmayank
good job although I feel a bit lengthy but good depiction of the inherent conflicts and problems.nice thought and well written .nice job
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
good job although I feel a bit lengthy but good depiction of the inherent conflicts and problems.nice thought and well written .nice job
Comment Written 10-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Thank you for sharing your insights and choosing to read! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Well, this was very well written, my friend, and fully compelling all the way through.
Fantastic flights of description and wonderful, believable dialogue throughout, and a strong, suspenseful work of pacing made this chapter a good, fun read, even out of context. Stands plenty well on its own. Well done. Good luck with the rest of this story. Thanks too for putting it up at the top of the listings where it was easy to stumble across, a pleasant surprise to top off a night of mostly lackluster reviewing.
cheers
js
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
Well, this was very well written, my friend, and fully compelling all the way through.
Fantastic flights of description and wonderful, believable dialogue throughout, and a strong, suspenseful work of pacing made this chapter a good, fun read, even out of context. Stands plenty well on its own. Well done. Good luck with the rest of this story. Thanks too for putting it up at the top of the listings where it was easy to stumble across, a pleasant surprise to top off a night of mostly lackluster reviewing.
cheers
js
Comment Written 10-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Jonathan. I really appreciate your excellent and very helpful insights. It's always so great to get the perspective of another novelist -- the writing of a novel takes a bit of a different persepctive, I find. Thanks so much, js.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Dramatic and intense chapter. I moved into the story immediately. Settings were solid in description and easily accessible by the reader. characters are excellent. The points of view had excellent transitions. the story very iteresting in every detail.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
Dramatic and intense chapter. I moved into the story immediately. Settings were solid in description and easily accessible by the reader. characters are excellent. The points of view had excellent transitions. the story very iteresting in every detail.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Elly. So good to hear from you! I really appreciate your insights and generous support. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Fluffyhead
woah the killer just gets wierder and weirder and weirder. Love the subject of the medicine man. You have a way of writing the most unique stuff.Have a good day.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
woah the killer just gets wierder and weirder and weirder. Love the subject of the medicine man. You have a way of writing the most unique stuff.Have a good day.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Hi, Fluffyhead. Thanks for the compliment! And I very much appreciate you taking time to read my chapter and support it so generously. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from DALLAS01
Glad I had a six. Your focus to even the smallest of details
Generates a realism and enables the reader to see instead of imagine your scenes. Favorite lines are:
the percussive love calls of crickets, reminiscent of a native drum beat, the pepper-sharp smell of fall leaves, and the distinct spice of apples split apart by foragers.
Love (pepper sharp) utilizing the sense of taste to provoke imagery.
He kissed his fingertips and pursed his lips,(great visual image with no wasted words.)
Who is writing in the diary?
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
Glad I had a six. Your focus to even the smallest of details
Generates a realism and enables the reader to see instead of imagine your scenes. Favorite lines are:
the percussive love calls of crickets, reminiscent of a native drum beat, the pepper-sharp smell of fall leaves, and the distinct spice of apples split apart by foragers.
Love (pepper sharp) utilizing the sense of taste to provoke imagery.
He kissed his fingertips and pursed his lips,(great visual image with no wasted words.)
Who is writing in the diary?
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Hi, Dallas. I sure appreciate your very generous and supportive review. Thank you for noticing the way I'm trying to improve my descriptive abilities -- that's means a lot to me! The diary entry is by the killer.
So appreciate you taking time to read.
Warmest regards, Bev
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That's is what I thought just wanted to make sure.
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Sure, I appreciate the interest! Xx Bev