Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "A Maza Moon, Part I"Murder Mystery
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Comment from Author Unknown
Hi Bev! I like the phrase, 'alien amoeba'! LOL~ More good leading us into your plot and great dialogue too! It's almost 3 am so I have to hurry. I never had this before. Having the site shut off EVERY night. :/ ANyway, more good stuff my friend. x. S.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Hi Bev! I like the phrase, 'alien amoeba'! LOL~ More good leading us into your plot and great dialogue too! It's almost 3 am so I have to hurry. I never had this before. Having the site shut off EVERY night. :/ ANyway, more good stuff my friend. x. S.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thanks so much, buddy. I so appreciate your taking time to read and review. I didn't realize that about the site shutting down. I wonder why?!
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Try it sometime and let me know if you can get on. ? :) And I'm trying desperately to get this house cleaned. Will read more asap! :) x.
Comment from Joy Graham
"eyes rapidly in (a) effort to focus" - I think it should be "an".
Great chapter as usual, Bev. I love the idea of the Ghost dance. What a cranky medical examiner.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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"eyes rapidly in (a) effort to focus" - I think it should be "an".
Great chapter as usual, Bev. I love the idea of the Ghost dance. What a cranky medical examiner.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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HAHAHA -- yup cranky is a very good word for our M.E. Thanks so much Joy! Love hearing from you. Hugs, Bev
Comment from LAFraser
Bev, this is an awesome chapter! I can't wait to read another chapter. I thought I'd read them all, but I found this one. :D
Ya slipped one in on me. I really like Jana and Derek. And, worry about Father Brian. Great work! :D
~Eilish
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Bev, this is an awesome chapter! I can't wait to read another chapter. I thought I'd read them all, but I found this one. :D
Ya slipped one in on me. I really like Jana and Derek. And, worry about Father Brian. Great work! :D
~Eilish
Comment Written 30-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Hi, Eilish. Hey, thank you so much. I really appreciate you taking time to check out the chapter. And I also appreciate your support, my friend. In the next installment we'll see Brian struggling to cope. Hugs, Bev
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Oh, you're welcome! :D Oohh, I can't wait. Poor Brian. Hugs,
~Eilish
Comment from Doc Holiday
I really enjoyed the suspense leading up to the Howiwacipi!
I also thought the conversation written interwined with the priest's prayer was an excellent use of reflective dialogue.
As always I enjoyed your author notes as an appetizer served up before digging into the main course.
Looking forward to reading on.. Keep up the good work, Bev!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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I really enjoyed the suspense leading up to the Howiwacipi!
I also thought the conversation written interwined with the priest's prayer was an excellent use of reflective dialogue.
As always I enjoyed your author notes as an appetizer served up before digging into the main course.
Looking forward to reading on.. Keep up the good work, Bev!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hiya, Doc. Thanks for this great review and your continued support. Your comments and insights are really appreciated, my friend. Cheers, Bev
Comment from Anisa-
Hah, I was wondering what White Coat Hypertension was ... Very interesting.
Also, I was a bit lost during the part where the priest is saying his final prayers and what was happening in between. I guessed the spirit or ghost was communicating with him. I see from your notes that it's probably the case.
Very spooky ... Lol
I think you did a great job with this chapter. Left it with a good hangar!
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Anisa
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hah, I was wondering what White Coat Hypertension was ... Very interesting.
Also, I was a bit lost during the part where the priest is saying his final prayers and what was happening in between. I guessed the spirit or ghost was communicating with him. I see from your notes that it's probably the case.
Very spooky ... Lol
I think you did a great job with this chapter. Left it with a good hangar!
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Anisa
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much, Anisa. Yes, the alternating conversation was memories of his time spent with Debra.
I really appreciate the great review, my friend.
Warm regards, Bev
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You're welcome :)
It was another great chapter, that's for sure!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What an intriguing chapter, Bev,
and so well written and presented,
which made it a pleasure to read...
most impressive and deserving of a six.
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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What an intriguing chapter, Bev,
and so well written and presented,
which made it a pleasure to read...
most impressive and deserving of a six.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much, Margaret. I'm very honored by your words of support and your generosity. Much appreciated! Bev
Comment from HPicasso
You have a very good novel here. Great intro on the character of Doctor Franklin Bloomquist. You have really done your home work on the working of the church and the Police Dept. I love every sentence in your first paragraph. You are doing a wonderful job of developing each of these characters. thank you so much for sharing your creativity. Congratulation!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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You have a very good novel here. Great intro on the character of Doctor Franklin Bloomquist. You have really done your home work on the working of the church and the Police Dept. I love every sentence in your first paragraph. You are doing a wonderful job of developing each of these characters. thank you so much for sharing your creativity. Congratulation!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hi, HP. Thank you so much for your excellent review and words of support. I much appreciate it! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi writingfundimension,
Fially caught up with this chapter. Nicely handled in the death scene, some nice interweaving of the Christian and Indian beliefs there.
Good dialogue, I haven't spotted any spag.
Patrick
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hi writingfundimension,
Fially caught up with this chapter. Nicely handled in the death scene, some nice interweaving of the Christian and Indian beliefs there.
Good dialogue, I haven't spotted any spag.
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thanks much, Patrick. I really appreciate your generous review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from LilHippie
Oh, I really liked that. First time reading a chapter of this book. Very well written. Very believable. Want to know more about Howiwacipi too. I really love this. The charactes are very believable. So we have a murderer. I have to go back now to your other chapters. Very good. I think I am going to enjoy this book very much.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Oh, I really liked that. First time reading a chapter of this book. Very well written. Very believable. Want to know more about Howiwacipi too. I really love this. The charactes are very believable. So we have a murderer. I have to go back now to your other chapters. Very good. I think I am going to enjoy this book very much.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Hi, LilHippie. Thank you for your very gracious review. I really apprecicate you taking time to read the chapter, and glad you enjoyed it. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello Beverly
I am Glen Bear Smith and I think this is the first of your works I have reviewed. It will not be the last. It is funny and a pleasure to read AND review
Bear
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Hello Beverly
I am Glen Bear Smith and I think this is the first of your works I have reviewed. It will not be the last. It is funny and a pleasure to read AND review
Bear
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you so very much, GBS. I really appreciate your interest and very generous review! It's really heartwarming to read your words. Kind regards, Bev