Mummy Mouse's Birthday Surprise.
Daddy Mouse has made something special24 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
This chapter made me smile.
it brought back memories when my children was small
your storeis are filled with joyI want to stop
and do my chores. maybe I'll read just one more.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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This chapter made me smile.
it brought back memories when my children was small
your storeis are filled with joyI want to stop
and do my chores. maybe I'll read just one more.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Again, thank you!!! I really am so thrilled by your lovely comments! Thank you! xsx Sandra.
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Hollyhock
Lovely again, I enjoyed it just as much as the last one I read. I'm going to be really picky now
"Then for breakfast we'll give her a real special treat"
For me this is too cumbersome, what about
"For breakfast then her special treat" or
"For breakfast then we'll give her a treat"?
The same with the last line, could you leave off the "Oh"
"My goodness, you've made me my own rocking chair"
Apart from those little quibbles it's a poem I would love to
read to my grandchildren.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Lovely again, I enjoyed it just as much as the last one I read. I'm going to be really picky now
"Then for breakfast we'll give her a real special treat"
For me this is too cumbersome, what about
"For breakfast then her special treat" or
"For breakfast then we'll give her a treat"?
The same with the last line, could you leave off the "Oh"
"My goodness, you've made me my own rocking chair"
Apart from those little quibbles it's a poem I would love to
read to my grandchildren.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Hollyhock, I most certainly will go in and look at those lines again. My next one, which is called, 'The Circus Comes to Hedgerow Village,' really needs someone like you to look it over, I think you would give me an honest appraisal which I know will be needed on it. I really appreciate your comments and I am glad you liked it, thank you. Sandra. xsx
Comment from rashi kumar
This is really a very sweet story in a poem,
the cute little mouse made a gift for mommy.
Very well-written, nice rhyming and presentation!
Pleasure to read and review!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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This is really a very sweet story in a poem,
the cute little mouse made a gift for mommy.
Very well-written, nice rhyming and presentation!
Pleasure to read and review!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you,Rashi, that is such a lovely review. xsx
Comment from Linda England Bonam
What an incredibly cute poem. Your rhymes were awesome and the story flowed so lovingly down the page. I really enjoyed this a lot, and regret not having a six for you.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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What an incredibly cute poem. Your rhymes were awesome and the story flowed so lovingly down the page. I really enjoyed this a lot, and regret not having a six for you.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Linda, what a lovely thing to say! I am really pleased you liked it, thank you.xsx
Comment from stanzasandstuff
You certainly have a unique gift when it comes to writing for children. This one is no exception and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this lively and humorous poem. There are not many people who can do what you do and you make it appear so easy!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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You certainly have a unique gift when it comes to writing for children. This one is no exception and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this lively and humorous poem. There are not many people who can do what you do and you make it appear so easy!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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What a lovely review, I really appreciate your words, thank you! xsx
Comment from Gungalo
So cute. This is really poetry at its very best. Children the world over (and some adults) would die for this poetry. Are you considering publishing it? You should!!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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So cute. This is really poetry at its very best. Children the world over (and some adults) would die for this poetry. Are you considering publishing it? You should!!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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I would love to try, but don't know how to go about it! Thank you for such lovely comments, Gungalo, it's really does my confidence good! thank you. xsx
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Sigh, don't waste another minute. Investigate it.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I admire and respect so much the people like yourself who can think up special things that are somewhat ordinary and turn them into the extraordinary. Awesome work. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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I admire and respect so much the people like yourself who can think up special things that are somewhat ordinary and turn them into the extraordinary. Awesome work. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, kiwigirl! That is such a lovely thing to say! Thank you!! xsx
Comment from bowls
What a sweet poem! The story itself is charming and it's written in a lovely,lilting rhythm that flows throughout the poem from beginning to end. On top of all that, you've managed to write the entire thing in rhyming couplets, which is quite an accomplishment. Thanks for a lovely read this evening. I certainly enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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What a sweet poem! The story itself is charming and it's written in a lovely,lilting rhythm that flows throughout the poem from beginning to end. On top of all that, you've managed to write the entire thing in rhyming couplets, which is quite an accomplishment. Thanks for a lovely read this evening. I certainly enjoyed it.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Thank you for such a lovely review, bowls, I am so glad you liked it. xsx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Aww, this is sweet. I'm trying to imagine a wee rocking chair for a mouse. :-) Your poems are probably intended for little people but I seem to get a lot of enjoyment out of them myself! Hey, I'm 52, but I'm still my Mom's kid. :-)
Lovely poem. :-)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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Aww, this is sweet. I'm trying to imagine a wee rocking chair for a mouse. :-) Your poems are probably intended for little people but I seem to get a lot of enjoyment out of them myself! Hey, I'm 52, but I'm still my Mom's kid. :-)
Lovely poem. :-)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Sue! Most of us still have the child in us, I know I have. I am really pleased you liked it, thank you for such nice comments. xsx
Comment from percival86jack
'Oh my goodness, you've made me my own rocking chair!'... absolutely delightful! Children's poetry is an area I have dabbled in but mine were never so joyfully expressed as what you have created here! Loved it... hugs, Jack xxxxxx
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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'Oh my goodness, you've made me my own rocking chair!'... absolutely delightful! Children's poetry is an area I have dabbled in but mine were never so joyfully expressed as what you have created here! Loved it... hugs, Jack xxxxxx
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Jack! What a lovely thing to say. Thank you, I am so glad you enjoyed it. xsx