The dragon Mareng
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Mareng's birthday"Mareng growing up and all kinds
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Comment from Jean Lutz
Taking on a bit of personal meaning for me here. One of my granddaughters turned 18 on August 30th. She has just started college. I hope she has a Nicci looking after her. Actually her mother has a dog named Gucci, but not sure how much help she would be in the wierd world of a college freshman.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Taking on a bit of personal meaning for me here. One of my granddaughters turned 18 on August 30th. She has just started college. I hope she has a Nicci looking after her. Actually her mother has a dog named Gucci, but not sure how much help she would be in the wierd world of a college freshman.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Would not know either-LOL. Robert's eldest granson turned 18 last Friday. Nice name for a dog Gucci.
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She is definitely a "designer dog".
Comment from Janie King
Only question I have is...do children, that are 12 years old, go to college? In the states it is called Junior High School. To go to college in the US you have to graduate from Senior High School, which makes our kids around 18 years old. This is a very nice story. My nephew loves dragons and he'd love a flying dog. God bless.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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Only question I have is...do children, that are 12 years old, go to college? In the states it is called Junior High School. To go to college in the US you have to graduate from Senior High School, which makes our kids around 18 years old. This is a very nice story. My nephew loves dragons and he'd love a flying dog. God bless.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your kind and thoughtful review. Have a nice day and take care, Ine. Sorry my mistake, made it according to Dutch or English schools. Nice feedback from your nephews.
Comment from Charlene0513
To Robina1978,
A lovely short story on the experiences of having a dog and the expectations expected of Mareng to care for it and still
be committed to his work from school.
*When narrating, always be sure it is double-spaced, as you change characters.
Charlene
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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To Robina1978,
A lovely short story on the experiences of having a dog and the expectations expected of Mareng to care for it and still
be committed to his work from school.
*When narrating, always be sure it is double-spaced, as you change characters.
Charlene
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your kind and thoughtful review. Have a nice day and take care, Ine. Thanks for the tip.
Comment from rchitwood
A very lovely story and I enjoyed reading it as I have said a very charming children's story>Very creative good imagination and characters.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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A very lovely story and I enjoyed reading it as I have said a very charming children's story>Very creative good imagination and characters.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello robina, Good chapter/
Such an imagery and cute story you have going
I like it. I found one tiny nit
read the following
How did you (now) that Mum and Dad?"
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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Hello robina, Good chapter/
Such an imagery and cute story you have going
I like it. I found one tiny nit
read the following
How did you (now) that Mum and Dad?"
Gert
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine. Thanks Gert for picking up on the spag.
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You are welcome robina
Gert
Comment from rheabug
Another cute chapter in your ongoing book. I love the part about the dog. I would love to see a winged dog!lol! The word cloths need to be changed in my opinion to clothes. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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Another cute chapter in your ongoing book. I love the part about the dog. I would love to see a winged dog!lol! The word cloths need to be changed in my opinion to clothes. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine. Thanks for the spag you noticed.
Comment from amada
This is very light and sweet chapter. It opens the heart to sweet and touching images. Children would love this one as well. Waiting for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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This is very light and sweet chapter. It opens the heart to sweet and touching images. Children would love this one as well. Waiting for the next chapter!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine
Comment from TammyGail
What a great chapter ..
You did a wonderful job with this
I just read it to Evan you have his thumbs up twice
Lol ... he made me read again over ... lol
Loved your imagery as well
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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What a great chapter ..
You did a wonderful job with this
I just read it to Evan you have his thumbs up twice
Lol ... he made me read again over ... lol
Loved your imagery as well
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine.
How nice, give him a cuddle from me please.
Comment from missy98writer
Ine,
I haven't been following your book, but I'm glad I looked down your profile page. Chapter Seven of your kids fiction is extremely well written. As I read I could see the action take place in my head. Your descriptive writing is great in this chapter. Your dialogue is very good. You did an excellent job using the writing devises of alliteration and metaphor. I like these phrases: "they had plenty of time to play as they were used to and And college brought them a new challenge." I look forward to reading more. You are doing a mighty fine job and I'd recommend your chapter to other reviewers. Keep on writing with heart and please have a blessed day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Ine,
I haven't been following your book, but I'm glad I looked down your profile page. Chapter Seven of your kids fiction is extremely well written. As I read I could see the action take place in my head. Your descriptive writing is great in this chapter. Your dialogue is very good. You did an excellent job using the writing devises of alliteration and metaphor. I like these phrases: "they had plenty of time to play as they were used to and And college brought them a new challenge." I look forward to reading more. You are doing a mighty fine job and I'd recommend your chapter to other reviewers. Keep on writing with heart and please have a blessed day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine
Comment from alexisleech
This is really sweet and conjures up lovely images, especially a flying dog! Just one typo 'wot' two instead of three, I presume should be 'with' I'm sure children would love this but would suggest a little more description of the surroundings, which I'm sure you could make just as magical as the rest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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This is really sweet and conjures up lovely images, especially a flying dog! Just one typo 'wot' two instead of three, I presume should be 'with' I'm sure children would love this but would suggest a little more description of the surroundings, which I'm sure you could make just as magical as the rest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine. Thanks for spotting the typo. Keeping it short for the sake of the attention spell of younger children.
