The dragon Mareng
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Comment from Charlene0513
To Robina1978,
A simple short story that grabs the attention of its readers when Mareng and Mara discover their destiny and the reaction they see of human contact.
1)Well[,] of course, would [3.30](3:30) pm this afternoon...
2)Over dinner [,] they told their parents about...punct. not necessary
Charlene
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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To Robina1978,
A simple short story that grabs the attention of its readers when Mareng and Mara discover their destiny and the reaction they see of human contact.
1)Well[,] of course, would [3.30](3:30) pm this afternoon...
2)Over dinner [,] they told their parents about...punct. not necessary
Charlene
Comment Written 12-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for reviewing. Blessings, Ine. And thanks for the tips, will use them partly.
Comment from BigTomNY
Excellent job on your new chapter posted here on fanstory. Great structure good flow and an excellent story line and writing!!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Excellent job on your new chapter posted here on fanstory. Great structure good flow and an excellent story line and writing!!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for reviewing. Blessings, Ine.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I am still enjoying your tale so much, Ine. It has such a sweet innocence to it. You should be very proud. Look forward to the next. Av.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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I am still enjoying your tale so much, Ine. It has such a sweet innocence to it. You should be very proud. Look forward to the next. Av.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice day and take care, Ine.
Comment from adewpearl
You can't split us up, Mrs. Dragonlake
How does this teacher have the authority over where her students end up in college?
So, in this society, college is like junior high/middle school?
An interesting look at these dragons as they start to grow up. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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You can't split us up, Mrs. Dragonlake
How does this teacher have the authority over where her students end up in college?
So, in this society, college is like junior high/middle school?
An interesting look at these dragons as they start to grow up. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 10-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice day and take care, Ine. In The Netherlands at one time they that have a bit of a say apart from the exam. Yes college is like junior high/middle school.
Comment from rchitwood
Again a very creative story and I am enjoying following along with it.Very well written and good dialogue and characters.Very good imagination and your photo goes well with it.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Again a very creative story and I am enjoying following along with it.Very well written and good dialogue and characters.Very good imagination and your photo goes well with it.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice day and take care, Ine.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, robina, a great job writing this chapter of your book where mareng and mara about to learn about falling in love apparently, and the angsts of being teenagers.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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this is very well written, robina, a great job writing this chapter of your book where mareng and mara about to learn about falling in love apparently, and the angsts of being teenagers.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice day and take care, Ine.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello robina
Looks like I better read your previous chapters
I know one thing you kept my attention with this chapter
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Hello robina
Looks like I better read your previous chapters
I know one thing you kept my attention with this chapter
Gert
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice day and take care, Ine.
Comment from Jean Lutz
As I mulled over whether staying with the same teacher was good or not, I then remembered that I had the same teacher for my first three years of schooling. The small one room school house where I began school has now been restored. You can find it with an internet search of Doe Creek School, Scotts Hill Tennessee. There is even a picture of me clutching a doll. I took her to school that day to have her picture took. :-)
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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As I mulled over whether staying with the same teacher was good or not, I then remembered that I had the same teacher for my first three years of schooling. The small one room school house where I began school has now been restored. You can find it with an internet search of Doe Creek School, Scotts Hill Tennessee. There is even a picture of me clutching a doll. I took her to school that day to have her picture took. :-)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine.
Comment from Dutchie
This is written so well Ine and keeps the attention of the reader. It describes the phases of life. I wished we could have the same teachers too, years ago. I'm very curious how this story develops, it's a pleasure to read. Liefs Fia
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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This is written so well Ine and keeps the attention of the reader. It describes the phases of life. I wished we could have the same teachers too, years ago. I'm very curious how this story develops, it's a pleasure to read. Liefs Fia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine.
Comment from WilliamDeen
as the all liked /// as they all liked
Then the went off //Then they went off
As they had grown older, their play had changed./// As they grew older, their play changed. ... we avoid using had unless absolutely necessary
Mareng had pointed/// Mareng pointed
GREAT chapter to add to your book!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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as the all liked /// as they all liked
Then the went off //Then they went off
As they had grown older, their play had changed./// As they grew older, their play changed. ... we avoid using had unless absolutely necessary
Mareng had pointed/// Mareng pointed
GREAT chapter to add to your book!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine. And thanks a heap for the corrections. Will tell hubby off.
