Weeding my Life
little rhyme, please read author notes35 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
Well done and I understand the sentiment in this piece very well. I get overwhelmed when I can't stay abreast of things and then it just immobilizes us, doesn't it? Being down is painful, but like you, I always manage to pick myself up again. excellent free verse with just that touch of the same end rhyme at each verse.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Well done and I understand the sentiment in this piece very well. I get overwhelmed when I can't stay abreast of things and then it just immobilizes us, doesn't it? Being down is painful, but like you, I always manage to pick myself up again. excellent free verse with just that touch of the same end rhyme at each verse.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks Jude, glad you liked my poem.
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Comment from rmdelta
PUPA,
this was terrific and inspiring, my friend. Great piece of writing and the imagery is really strong. Nice work.
Reggie
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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PUPA,
this was terrific and inspiring, my friend. Great piece of writing and the imagery is really strong. Nice work.
Reggie
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Reggie, thank you so much for reviewing this poem, appreciate it my friend.
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Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi PUPA,
Love the art you have choosen. The play on light and shadows fits your poem perfectly. I like your references to the load that life sometimes places on your shoulders, but then you weed and find a new start. Your poem leaves no room for giving up and with a lighter heart you carry on. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Hi PUPA,
Love the art you have choosen. The play on light and shadows fits your poem perfectly. I like your references to the load that life sometimes places on your shoulders, but then you weed and find a new start. Your poem leaves no room for giving up and with a lighter heart you carry on. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Becky, I am glad you liked my poem, thanks so much for your comments and rating.
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Pupa
Comment from Nicki_Mist
I like this and how we have to keep going no matter what happens to us throughout life. This could be a good prose too. You have good imagery and nice words here. Keep on writing.
Nicole
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I like this and how we have to keep going no matter what happens to us throughout life. This could be a good prose too. You have good imagery and nice words here. Keep on writing.
Nicole
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks for your kind comments in this review, Nicole.
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Comment from fictionwriter
A wonderful little poem. If you fall apart then only pick up the best piece of yourself to put back, then you've made an improvemtent. Great job.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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A wonderful little poem. If you fall apart then only pick up the best piece of yourself to put back, then you've made an improvemtent. Great job.
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I am glad you liked my poem, and thanks for your kind comments.
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Pupa
Comment from Sally Carter
I enjoyed this poem very much Pupa. I don't know you, but this feels like a very powerful, personal account of depression. I read it several times, and each time I found something new.
The images in the second and third stanzas, of climbing up the ladder, and the strained muscles were so vivid, and really helped someone like me, who is lucky enough never to have suffered depression, to get some small idea of what it feels like.
I also liked the single rhyme at the end of each stanza, which produced a kind of cross between free verse and a more structure form.
A most effective and enjoyable poem.
Best wishes. Sally
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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I enjoyed this poem very much Pupa. I don't know you, but this feels like a very powerful, personal account of depression. I read it several times, and each time I found something new.
The images in the second and third stanzas, of climbing up the ladder, and the strained muscles were so vivid, and really helped someone like me, who is lucky enough never to have suffered depression, to get some small idea of what it feels like.
I also liked the single rhyme at the end of each stanza, which produced a kind of cross between free verse and a more structure form.
A most effective and enjoyable poem.
Best wishes. Sally
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Sally, thanks a million, this is very generous of you and I am so happy you liked my poem. I am also happy that you did'nt ever suffer from depression, hope you never do.
I appreciate your encouraging comments.
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Pupa
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My pleasure Pupa. With warm wishes. Sally
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good meter, good flow, an unusual picture. i like the way you brought attention to how we drag down the good things when things are going bad.
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good meter, good flow, an unusual picture. i like the way you brought attention to how we drag down the good things when things are going bad.
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thanks so much for your kind comments, yes, at times when we are down, we forget how many blessings we have.
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Pupa
Comment from bhogg
Your poem was a bit different style wise. After my first read, I would have bet that more than the last word rhymed. It just seemed to flow well. A lot of deep thoughts, all about life, it can knock you down, but your character will be defined on how you get up!
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Your poem was a bit different style wise. After my first read, I would have bet that more than the last word rhymed. It just seemed to flow well. A lot of deep thoughts, all about life, it can knock you down, but your character will be defined on how you get up!
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Exactly, how I get up! I might let you know in another poem, hopefully.LOL.
Thanks for your kind comments in this review.
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Pupa
Comment from lauriesummer
This is a good description of the inner turmoils we all go through at times. I especially like (and relate to!) the first two stanzas. Good work.
Laurie
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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This is a good description of the inner turmoils we all go through at times. I especially like (and relate to!) the first two stanzas. Good work.
Laurie
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you so much Laurie, your comments are kind and encouraging.
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Comment from bohemiangeek
Your title fits perfectly with your poem. You description was emotional and I especially liked this part:
'select good parts to work out a new chart'
your poem was very well written.
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Your title fits perfectly with your poem. You description was emotional and I especially liked this part:
'select good parts to work out a new chart'
your poem was very well written.
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review, I appreciate it and I am glad you liked it.
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Pupa