Precious Gems: An Anthology
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Comment from amaobong
i love this,its free style and expressive. it conveys in simple words exactly how the writer feels and what she wishes could happen.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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i love this,its free style and expressive. it conveys in simple words exactly how the writer feels and what she wishes could happen.
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much amaobong xoxoxoxxoxo
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Dearest Princess Xine,
If this is your first love poem, what can I say? MARVELOUS! Exquisite composition from first word to last. Absolutely exquisite. You, my dear, should turn your pen to love writing much more often. It becomes my princess perfectly.
Much love,
Seraph ~
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2008
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Dearest Princess Xine,
If this is your first love poem, what can I say? MARVELOUS! Exquisite composition from first word to last. Absolutely exquisite. You, my dear, should turn your pen to love writing much more often. It becomes my princess perfectly.
Much love,
Seraph ~
Comment Written 20-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2008
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Well, when you put it that way, how can I refuse? Not a huge fan of love poems am I as I think they can be a bit ... sweetly sickly, but this contest piqued my interest for some reason! Came third as it turned out, so I was pretty pleased with that result for a first effort. So, I may just do another, but it'll have to be ... not sickly.
What would I do without the support of sweet souls like your fine self my dear Cherub? It's like a soothing balm on burning skin ... xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from joan marie
This was very good for a first. Brought tears to my eyes. You wrote what I dreamed last night. Must have a psychic connection. Good luck in the contest. This is wonderfully written. joan marie
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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This was very good for a first. Brought tears to my eyes. You wrote what I dreamed last night. Must have a psychic connection. Good luck in the contest. This is wonderfully written. joan marie
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Thanks so much Joan; glad you enjoyed my first real go at a "love" poem. I came third! xoxoxoxoxo
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I would take a go at it again. I don't really write them either. Not much romance in my life so it would have to come from my imagination. Very good poem. jm
Comment from bard owl
This poem is tenderly touching and very sad and has extraordinary depth. To love from a distance with no hope for the future is heartbreaking. You have certainly succeeded in making your love fully felt without actually saying the word "love". That isn't easy to do. It was my pleasure to read your poem of longing and desire. I don't know how this could NOT win the contest. Best of luck and blessings to you, Chris, Linda
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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This poem is tenderly touching and very sad and has extraordinary depth. To love from a distance with no hope for the future is heartbreaking. You have certainly succeeded in making your love fully felt without actually saying the word "love". That isn't easy to do. It was my pleasure to read your poem of longing and desire. I don't know how this could NOT win the contest. Best of luck and blessings to you, Chris, Linda
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Thank you SO much Linda for such a glowing review! And six stars - it won anyway with those, and your kind words. (I came third in the voting booth). Bless you and yours m'dear - have a lovely Festive Season and beyond xoxoxoxo
Comment from Winslow
Dear Alpacalady,
It seems you love another but you are only dirt beneath his feet? It seems that you are groveling and expressing total submission here. Nice flow and rhyming in this verse. Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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Dear Alpacalady,
It seems you love another but you are only dirt beneath his feet? It seems that you are groveling and expressing total submission here. Nice flow and rhyming in this verse. Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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Thanks so much Winslow, but thankfully this is not auto-biographical! Otherwise, hubby'd be a bit ... confused methinks ... xoxoxoxxoo
Comment from Diny
wishing we weren't worlds apart
- i am so blessed by so many here on this site though worlds apart i feel as close a s ever!-
I must say this pours out love and adoration without saying the word- Well done- and so appropriate for this site and contest-Good Luck-Di
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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wishing we weren't worlds apart
- i am so blessed by so many here on this site though worlds apart i feel as close a s ever!-
I must say this pours out love and adoration without saying the word- Well done- and so appropriate for this site and contest-Good Luck-Di
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Thank you so very much Di, for your lovely words and review xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Minglement
This is a stunning entry for the contest. Best one I've read, from the artwork and color mood, the first lines to the last, you tell quite a story. Great job. Good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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This is a stunning entry for the contest. Best one I've read, from the artwork and color mood, the first lines to the last, you tell quite a story. Great job. Good luck.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much Minglement! What lovely words for this poor scrap of human confusement this day ... xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from MWann27
I liked this very much! You have a way with words--this was very evocative, with great imagery. The passion really comes through in each line. It has a certain rhythm that flows smoothly by, like a song. There's definitely music underneath it.
Nice work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I liked this very much! You have a way with words--this was very evocative, with great imagery. The passion really comes through in each line. It has a certain rhythm that flows smoothly by, like a song. There's definitely music underneath it.
Nice work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Well, nice to meet you, and thank you so much for what you have said! I feel hugely complimented to have my poetry described as "music", as I do tend to write it with a song in mind. So thank you for making this lowly Aussie gal feel like a million bucks! xoxoxoox
Comment from wierdgrace
a wonderful job you did this is emotional and a love poem in this way it should, I enjoued it from the beginning to end structure was smooth and easy to understand. no error and no revisions, thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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a wonderful job you did this is emotional and a love poem in this way it should, I enjoued it from the beginning to end structure was smooth and easy to understand. no error and no revisions, thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Well, thanks so very much weirdgrace; I'm so glad you enjoyed this! xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from boberto
I don't give out many sixes, but this gets one
from me. I like it. I like the way you have vividly
expressed love, without mentioning the word. The pacing is good, and the verse flows well. Good luck in the contest.
Haven't seen you for a while. Hope all is well and you have a good holiday.
boberto
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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I don't give out many sixes, but this gets one
from me. I like it. I like the way you have vividly
expressed love, without mentioning the word. The pacing is good, and the verse flows well. Good luck in the contest.
Haven't seen you for a while. Hope all is well and you have a good holiday.
boberto
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much boberto - even more so considering you don't hand out many sixes! Yes, it's been a while between drinks, and I am well here. I sure hope you are yourself my friend. I appreciate your kind words, and of course those six stars look nice 'n' shiny ... You have a lovely festive season, and may the ensuing year bring you much joy and peace. If you are in this contest also, may I extend my good luck wishes to you. AGain, thanks so much for this honour xoxoxoxoxo
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Thank you Chris. No, I'm not in the contest---at least so far. I haven't been writing much verse lately-mostly prose. The feeling for verse just hasn't been there. I have been on the site for a year now---posted over 360 poems 160 short stories. Only one poem and one short story won a site sponsored contest--then they were decided by good folks like you. Poem and Story of the month. Take care my good friend. May Santa be good to you.
boberto