Precious Gems: An Anthology
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Masterpiece"A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works
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Comment from EKPoet
Here you paint a beautiful, awe inspiring portrait of the natural beauty of your native land. the stark, almost harsh beauty of the dry grasslands, with their golden and russet colors, the purifying nature of the bush fires, sweeping the land, the burning eye of the sun, all work together in a poem full of rich imagry and soft, almost melancholy language, to create this sense of a wonder at the works of nature. great format for it, these rhymed quatrains, great meter as well. nice job EKPoet
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Here you paint a beautiful, awe inspiring portrait of the natural beauty of your native land. the stark, almost harsh beauty of the dry grasslands, with their golden and russet colors, the purifying nature of the bush fires, sweeping the land, the burning eye of the sun, all work together in a poem full of rich imagry and soft, almost melancholy language, to create this sense of a wonder at the works of nature. great format for it, these rhymed quatrains, great meter as well. nice job EKPoet
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so very much EKPoet. Although your review is a poem in itself! Such beautiful words in it, I am sighing as I write this, believe me! xoxoxoxoxoxo
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So what's life like down under? I always wanted to visit there, Australia is such a unique place among all our places here on Earth. I live in NY, enjoy ing the snow now, ready to put up my Christmas tree. What do you think of Obama as our new pres? EK
Comment from johnleethehooker
I live in oz and think you have captured the essence of our beautiful but harsh country in spectacular fashion. The poem flows well and is filled with creative imagery. I would suggest leaving the word knife out of this line (Of solar knife blades stabbing down)as you still have the word (stabbing) to create the image. Either way a great poem. Good to see another aussie on fanstory. Regards Jamie
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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I live in oz and think you have captured the essence of our beautiful but harsh country in spectacular fashion. The poem flows well and is filled with creative imagery. I would suggest leaving the word knife out of this line (Of solar knife blades stabbing down)as you still have the word (stabbing) to create the image. Either way a great poem. Good to see another aussie on fanstory. Regards Jamie
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so very much fellow Aussie! That "knife" bit I've been meaning to remove, so will do so after reading this, and I appreciate you pointing that out!
Yes, it's always good to see another Aussie here, so nice to meet you, thanks so much for your excellent review, and hopefully I'll come across some of your works in the very near future! xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Russel Chale
Truly an excellent poem, my friend. I love the way that you have woven your words to conjure vivid and realistic word pictures to complement the selected scenery. Well done, indeed.
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Truly an excellent poem, my friend. I love the way that you have woven your words to conjure vivid and realistic word pictures to complement the selected scenery. Well done, indeed.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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As said in pm, thank you so very much Russel xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Domino
Hey, Chris, I never seen an 'Australian bush' as all the Oz babes I met preferred ta shave, LMAO!! (I wished,)
I spose a 'bushfire' works just as well, though they tend ta scream a bit! Seriously, this is extremely well crafted, I love it! The meter's not perfect, but it still rages, I MEAN flows along brilliantly.
Vivid imagery from an observant and poetic hand.
Best wishes, ray xx
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Hey, Chris, I never seen an 'Australian bush' as all the Oz babes I met preferred ta shave, LMAO!! (I wished,)
I spose a 'bushfire' works just as well, though they tend ta scream a bit! Seriously, this is extremely well crafted, I love it! The meter's not perfect, but it still rages, I MEAN flows along brilliantly.
Vivid imagery from an observant and poetic hand.
Best wishes, ray xx
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Hey, thanks for poppin in and taking a look. I truly hate perfect meter, but sometimes I adopt it for the sake of it. I'm pretty glad you liked this one and took it in the spirit it was given ... Yes, I suppose one's perception of "bush" can be bring a myriad of images ... even wishful thinking at times ...
I appreciate your visit and fine words my friend. Best wishes to you! xoxoxoxo
Comment from bard owl
I think Mother Nature is a tempermental witch. She reigns with such fury both in summer and winter. Your poem describes summmertime in the harsh terms it deserves. I have heard that Australian summers are sometimes devastating and your words clearly define that. Excellent writing, as usual. I hope you soon hear the gentle pattering of raindrops on your roof. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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I think Mother Nature is a tempermental witch. She reigns with such fury both in summer and winter. Your poem describes summmertime in the harsh terms it deserves. I have heard that Australian summers are sometimes devastating and your words clearly define that. Excellent writing, as usual. I hope you soon hear the gentle pattering of raindrops on your roof. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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I think we will as the kookaburras have been laughing which usually heralds rain. We're lucky though, as the summers of 2005 and 2006 were fraught with bush fires in the Weddin Mountains (which surround our shire), and even though it is devastating, my God what an awesome sight it is from a distance.
Thank God for air-conditioning. And my little long-haired bunny is kept clipped short, with a wet towel over his cage, a frozen bottle of water in it, and I hose the towel and ground around him three times a day. So far, he's surviving the poor little critter ...
Again, thank you so very much for your kind thoughts and comments. As you say to me, I always appreciate you stopping by. And you are also one whose work I've always admired and learned from xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from kassey
You describe your homeland in such a loving way, the reader can tell that you so much want to share your country's beauty with the rest of the world. You do it very well, the descriptions are many and very clear. A beautiful poem Kay
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You describe your homeland in such a loving way, the reader can tell that you so much want to share your country's beauty with the rest of the world. You do it very well, the descriptions are many and very clear. A beautiful poem Kay
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Thanks Kay. It is a truly stunning thing, the changing landscape. I appreciate your comments and always enjoy you stopping by my friend xoxoxoxo
Comment from rama devi
This is a wonderful testament to the artistry of nature. Your closing verse is superb and remarkably stunning;
Flaming forests, ashen art
Frame the land in reddened fire
Nature's scorching soul and heart
Displayed in works of burning ire
Whew! What a powerful verse. Love it.
Warm regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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This is a wonderful testament to the artistry of nature. Your closing verse is superb and remarkably stunning;
Flaming forests, ashen art
Frame the land in reddened fire
Nature's scorching soul and heart
Displayed in works of burning ire
Whew! What a powerful verse. Love it.
Warm regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Glad you enjoyed this rama. Sometimes, it's hard to find the words to adquately describe nature in all her glory, but sometimes we luck in ... just. Thanks so much for your wonderful comments! xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from adewpearl
Your first verse so appealed to me, a lover of alliteration, especially when involving the letter "s" - I thought I had died and gone to summery Heaven!!
I absolutely love near rhymes, so straw and core are such a great pairing for me - I do hope nobody called you on it as some insist on exact rhymes
Rolling hills in wheaten beige - that is a line that just warms my poet's heart
this is sheer loveliness, especially as this was the coldest day yet of our winter
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Your first verse so appealed to me, a lover of alliteration, especially when involving the letter "s" - I thought I had died and gone to summery Heaven!!
I absolutely love near rhymes, so straw and core are such a great pairing for me - I do hope nobody called you on it as some insist on exact rhymes
Rolling hills in wheaten beige - that is a line that just warms my poet's heart
this is sheer loveliness, especially as this was the coldest day yet of our winter
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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No-one has called me on that rhyme bit, and if they did I may have chosen to ignore it! I refuse to "stilt" my work for need of perfect rhymes, so hence I often write with "near" ones in order to produce the effect. I'm just glad you enjoyed this, and saw it for what I was trying to convey. Sometimes technical stuff can be a right pain in the tush! So thank you for your terrific comments and insights my friend. And I don't envy you the cold winters you get over there, YET our summers here can be very nasty indeed! xoxoxoxoxo
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I've had people list my not-exact rhymes for me and offer to review my poem again once I fix them. LOL As if I had not noticed the darn things didn't exactly rhyme all on my own! I think I may have just frustrated those people away, however, as this is more of a memory than what happens much anymore! LOL
Comment from jshep
This is absolutely beautiful, Chris. The flow, the rhyme, the presentation were awesome. Your descriptions lets the reader see what your are writing about, and adds to the fact that the land is so dry you can sense it would not take much for one of those brush fires to start. Hard to imagine as we had snow last. What a strange world we live in. Your writing is ever improving every time you post. Excellent job. Joyce
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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This is absolutely beautiful, Chris. The flow, the rhyme, the presentation were awesome. Your descriptions lets the reader see what your are writing about, and adds to the fact that the land is so dry you can sense it would not take much for one of those brush fires to start. Hard to imagine as we had snow last. What a strange world we live in. Your writing is ever improving every time you post. Excellent job. Joyce
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Thankyou so very much Joyce. It always amazes me the changing hues of the landscape, and our view of it is a stunning one to say the least. Again, I thank you for always encouraging and supporting me xoxoxoxo
Comment from mmichelle97219
Here in the forests of Oregon and the northwest of the United States there are wild fires every season. We cannot seem to escape them. I thought this was a very good post.
Happy Writing.
Michelle
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Here in the forests of Oregon and the northwest of the United States there are wild fires every season. We cannot seem to escape them. I thought this was a very good post.
Happy Writing.
Michelle
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Thanks so much Michelle. Yes, will be "happy writing" at the moment as I've done me back again, so will have to sit in the ole recliner with pen in hand ... xoxoxooxo