Precious Gems: An Anthology
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Repentance"A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works
27 total reviews
Comment from Zakarism
The poet presents sin as a platform for confession. He sees God almighty as the author of life and to whom only humans should show remorse as symbol of atonement for forgiveness.
He has skillfully highlighted his elements of weakness and shortcomings. The rhyming and rhythms are professionally developed and aligned.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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The poet presents sin as a platform for confession. He sees God almighty as the author of life and to whom only humans should show remorse as symbol of atonement for forgiveness.
He has skillfully highlighted his elements of weakness and shortcomings. The rhyming and rhythms are professionally developed and aligned.
Comment Written 12-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Bless you!
Comment from Xylok
wow, that was awesome. super job with the meter and cadence and some very deep thoughts. a truly compelling piece. im sorry i dont have much constructive critique for you on this one; i just wanted to comment to tell you i enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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wow, that was awesome. super job with the meter and cadence and some very deep thoughts. a truly compelling piece. im sorry i dont have much constructive critique for you on this one; i just wanted to comment to tell you i enjoyed it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Thanks very much Xylok. Your review was a nice surprise! xoxoxoxoxox
Comment from Wilder
Wow, this is truly amazing. You mix words together that aren't always remembered are words- which I think takes a great deal of talent. It's truly beautiful. I hope your God answers with Peace.
Wilder
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2008
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Wow, this is truly amazing. You mix words together that aren't always remembered are words- which I think takes a great deal of talent. It's truly beautiful. I hope your God answers with Peace.
Wilder
Comment Written 28-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much Wilder, for this lovely review xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from joan marie
Finally got a six back. This was very emotional and personal. You shared some intimate feelings. It is great to feel safe enough here to do that. I can see why it took first place. I could feel anguish and hope. It was like a prayer honestly spoken to God from someone truly repentive. Congragulations. joan marie
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2008
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Finally got a six back. This was very emotional and personal. You shared some intimate feelings. It is great to feel safe enough here to do that. I can see why it took first place. I could feel anguish and hope. It was like a prayer honestly spoken to God from someone truly repentive. Congragulations. joan marie
Comment Written 28-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2008
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As said in pm, thanks so much joan marie xoxoxoxoxoxo
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What'd I do read it 2x's. My just read it again. I have been up since 4am and feeling goofy. jm
Comment from Stephy Jemmisparks
God's grace is more than sufficient,dear. He is benevolent.It is a constant struggle to see things through His eyes, which I must remind myself to learn.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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God's grace is more than sufficient,dear. He is benevolent.It is a constant struggle to see things through His eyes, which I must remind myself to learn.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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As we all do! Thanks so much Stephy for your great review xoxoxoxoxox
Comment from honeytree
I am very impressed with the art work and your words which although sad in a way can happen, to each and one of us on earth.
I felt the humility within your words and your sorrow.
I am sure God will help you in every way possible.
"I'm heartless and hopeless, yet know I must hold
To a glimmer, a speck of warm light in the cold
Though beaten by guilt and restrained by remorse
I'll kneel here before You and beg for recourse
God, shine a merciful light on this wraith
Who, here in Your goodness, clings on with raw faith
For You can deliver my soul from black skies
By viewing it through Your benevolent eyes."
Beautiful words expressed and truly sincere words.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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I am very impressed with the art work and your words which although sad in a way can happen, to each and one of us on earth.
I felt the humility within your words and your sorrow.
I am sure God will help you in every way possible.
"I'm heartless and hopeless, yet know I must hold
To a glimmer, a speck of warm light in the cold
Though beaten by guilt and restrained by remorse
I'll kneel here before You and beg for recourse
God, shine a merciful light on this wraith
Who, here in Your goodness, clings on with raw faith
For You can deliver my soul from black skies
By viewing it through Your benevolent eyes."
Beautiful words expressed and truly sincere words.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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Thanks so very much Honeytree for your lovely comments xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from ulster3
Hello.
Takes a lot to speak of such pain and bare your soul this way. Congratulations on your win. You have rhythm and really held the end rhyme all the way through a work that was not short or easy to write I'm sure. Thanks for sharing your faith. rebecca
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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Hello.
Takes a lot to speak of such pain and bare your soul this way. Congratulations on your win. You have rhythm and really held the end rhyme all the way through a work that was not short or easy to write I'm sure. Thanks for sharing your faith. rebecca
Comment Written 27-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much Rebecca for your great comments and your congratulations xoxoxoxoxoo
Comment from jshep
This is absolutely stirring, and a heartfelt poem of depth and sincerity. Truly worthy of winning this contest. The flow, the rhyme, the poignant artwork is amazing. You poured a great deal of soul into this piece. Well done and congratulations, my friend. Joyce
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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This is absolutely stirring, and a heartfelt poem of depth and sincerity. Truly worthy of winning this contest. The flow, the rhyme, the poignant artwork is amazing. You poured a great deal of soul into this piece. Well done and congratulations, my friend. Joyce
Comment Written 26-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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Thanks my friend. Makes me happy when my mates like my work. Your comments are, as always, encouraging and supportive and I really appreciate it xoxooxoxoxoxo
Comment from dportwood
A wonderful poem, alpacalady, and definitely worthy of 1st place. The rhyming, meter, wording and imagery all excellent. Quatrain format and easy reading with nothing forced contribute to make it a winner. Congratulations.
Duane
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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A wonderful poem, alpacalady, and definitely worthy of 1st place. The rhyming, meter, wording and imagery all excellent. Quatrain format and easy reading with nothing forced contribute to make it a winner. Congratulations.
Duane
Comment Written 26-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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Thanks Duane. Coming from you - someone whose work I admire - this is high praise indeed xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from bluefly
alpacalady,
Congrats on this poem and winning the contest!!! This truly is a masterful piece of writing.
Bravo and Well Done!
Scott
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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alpacalady,
Congrats on this poem and winning the contest!!! This truly is a masterful piece of writing.
Bravo and Well Done!
Scott
Comment Written 26-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2008
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Thanks Scott! Gee, six stars and a contest win; pretty good day all round I'd say! I really appreciate this review my friend xoxoxoxoxo