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Jobsworth

First Contact with Earth

32 total reviews 
Comment from Adri7enne
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Amusing! I can see that happening. The first person they meet up with is a bureaucrat, and that's enough to sour any creature on our civilization. Funny!
O.K, Nuff for today.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009
    Thanks, glad it was funny
Comment from Undaunted
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That was a very funny read. It is in the same mold as the hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy books... i'm going to look up more of your writings. well done...

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
    Gosh, praise indeed. Thank you.
Comment from William Walz
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i love sci-fi and i especially love quirky sci-fi. your writing has a certain flavor reminiscent of philip k. dick and robert sheckly. all i can say it is perfectly realized and sounds totally professional. what else can we ask for?

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2008


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
    Wow, Praise indeed. Thank you
reply by William Walz on 30-Apr-2008
    BY THE WAY, IF YOU LIKE SCI-FI STORIES WITH A COMIC TWIST, YOU MIGHT ENJOY MY STORY CALLED--MEET THE FLINTSTONES. IF YOU GET A CHANCE AND FEEL SO INCLINED, GIVE IT A READ.
Comment from ryanj777
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Very comical and it has anice twist to it Keep it up I can say that the alien may well have felt as some people do who travel to foreign countries and do not fully understand their customs.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2008


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2008
    Thanks. Glad you liked it
Comment from merhavia
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Hi Snodlander,
what a clever and in some sense sad story: Yep, it wouldn't surprise me if we already scared off the aliens that could be the answer to (most) our problems...
I particularly enjoyed phrases like"full ambassadorial encounter suit" and "intoned Zarr'ock in his most senatorial voice". Overall I liked the ironic feel of the story.
Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2008


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2008
    No, thank you for reading. Glad you enjoyed it
Comment from Mi Medio Naranja
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I like this, it's really well written and articulated, I can definitely see why its an all time best!
The writing is clever and witty.
Well done.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2008


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2008
    Thank you, I'm glad you liked it
Comment from AidanConnors
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This is just brilliant again. Classic characterisations but with a new story line. Thought the whole thing was just brilliant mate. Keep them coming, it's what you do best. I didn't notice any errors (but I am quickly learning that I am not the best on grammar.)
Just great writing.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2008


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
    You're very kind, thank you, and thanks for the 6
Comment from Torrence Winter
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Very good one. I liked that the officer was soo blond..he had to have been not to be listening to the offers of the alien. Really good work with this one. Cheers mate.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2008


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
    Haha. Never though of him as blonde. I think he was just pedantic and obsessive about his job, enjoying the rush of power it gave him. But who knows? You could be right. My characters are often different to what I thought they were going to be.

    Glad you liked it
Comment from Nanette Mary
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Hullo Snodlander ....

What a clever piece of imagination at work this really is and I enjoyed it immensely, especially your parting shot -
that the fine could be paid on line!
There is just one small change needed ....

* You have "No?" he asked, hesitantly. This should be -
"No!", he said, hesitantly ..... because it was his answer to
a question.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2008


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
    I phrased the No as a question because he wasn't sure whether that was the answer Albert was looking for. Perhaps Albert wnated to be bribed, he didn't know.

    Thanks for your review and I'm glad you enjoyed it, especially the last line, as I was in two minds whether to keep it there.
Comment from conniet
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I thought your story was very interesting, and I liked the way you described the characters, makes the reader think they know them very well! Connie

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2008


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
    Thank you, you're very kind