Rhythmical Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Crescent"2025 NaPoWriMo contest
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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This 3-5-3 poem and presentation is simple and beautiful like the moon itself. You used your few words to their full advantage here. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2025
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This 3-5-3 poem and presentation is simple and beautiful like the moon itself. You used your few words to their full advantage here. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2025
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hi Marilyn thanks for your comments and review Dove
Comment from Mrs Anna Howard
Wow! Such an elegant piece. The last line is so clever. I love how it shows that a quiet presence can have such a huge impact. What a wonderful metaphor.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2025
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Wow! Such an elegant piece. The last line is so clever. I love how it shows that a quiet presence can have such a huge impact. What a wonderful metaphor.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2025
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Thank you, Dove
Comment from jessizero
This was a lovely poem about the moon. I think the font could have been bigger, but that might have taken away from the effect. I don't know. The picture you used was pretty. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2025
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This was a lovely poem about the moon. I think the font could have been bigger, but that might have taken away from the effect. I don't know. The picture you used was pretty. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2025
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hi jessi (hope you don't mind if I shorten your name?) thanks for comments and review Dove
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I absolutely do not mind!
Comment from lancellot
Crescent moon resting - 5
'tween bright stars -3
turns the tide - 3
This is good, but I wonder why stop at a 5-3-3. It is a fine form but wouldn't a traditional Haiku form fit better. Maybe not. Inspiration comes as is after all.
Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2025
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Crescent moon resting - 5
'tween bright stars -3
turns the tide - 3
This is good, but I wonder why stop at a 5-3-3. It is a fine form but wouldn't a traditional Haiku form fit better. Maybe not. Inspiration comes as is after all.
Well done.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2025
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hi lancellot oops! didn't think about syllabization! I was trying to write a lune which I believe is 3-5-3, Will go in and edit thanks for comments and review Dove
Comment from RodG
You have described this phase of the moon very well in only 11 syllables. It is easy to visualize this crescent "resting 'tween bright stars" having an effect on Earth's tides. Rod
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2025
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You have described this phase of the moon very well in only 11 syllables. It is easy to visualize this crescent "resting 'tween bright stars" having an effect on Earth's tides. Rod
Comment Written 20-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2025
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hi Rod thanks for comments and review Dove
Comment from Sally Law
Good day, Dove! As an amateur astronomer, and watcher of the night sky, I really enjoyed this. I can't get enough of the celestial heaven and the moon's phases. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the book.
Sal Xos
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2025
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Good day, Dove! As an amateur astronomer, and watcher of the night sky, I really enjoyed this. I can't get enough of the celestial heaven and the moon's phases. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the book.
Sal Xos
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2025
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hi Sal thank you for your comments and review lessings to you and keep star-gazing!
Comment from Teri7
Donna, This is a very interesting poem you have penned about the crescent moon. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the artwork you chose. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2025
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Donna, This is a very interesting poem you have penned about the crescent moon. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the artwork you chose. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2025
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Teri thanks for comments and review God bless Donna
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Of course the moon has great power and your poem speaks the truth here, the miracle of nature and this is something man has no control over, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Of course the moon has great power and your poem speaks the truth here, the miracle of nature and this is something man has no control over, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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hi Dolly thank you for your comments and review Donna x x
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and makes a good poem and it is informational as well because the moon just control the tides. I wish you the very best with your writing. May you have a wonderful day and God bless.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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This is very well written and makes a good poem and it is informational as well because the moon just control the tides. I wish you the very best with your writing. May you have a wonderful day and God bless.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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hi Patricia thanks for your comments and review. have a wonderful weekend Dove
