Its not over till its over
An arresting encounter9 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have done a good job of showing the feelings and fears of both people involved in this case before the judge. The misunderstanding is obvious, but both are in their own way distraught. That judge can pat himself on his back for asking the right questions to make a world of difference. I have really enjoyed your happy ending story.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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You have done a good job of showing the feelings and fears of both people involved in this case before the judge. The misunderstanding is obvious, but both are in their own way distraught. That judge can pat himself on his back for asking the right questions to make a world of difference. I have really enjoyed your happy ending story.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Many thanks, Carol. So glad you liked it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an gripping, entertaining story with a strong lever of reality. The police office followed protocol, and the driver of the vehicle was wrongfully speeding without a valid license. The judge asked the appropriate questions that led to a heartwarming response from both the officer and the offender, leading to a satisfactory ending to the story. Well done with just the right amount of vivid description.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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This is an gripping, entertaining story with a strong lever of reality. The police office followed protocol, and the driver of the vehicle was wrongfully speeding without a valid license. The judge asked the appropriate questions that led to a heartwarming response from both the officer and the offender, leading to a satisfactory ending to the story. Well done with just the right amount of vivid description.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I wondered where this was going and I am glad that the judge here saw fit to let this woman go! I hear of so many cases where the woman gets a raw deal in life. A believable story Brad, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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I wondered where this was going and I am glad that the judge here saw fit to let this woman go! I hear of so many cases where the woman gets a raw deal in life. A believable story Brad, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Thanks, Dolly. Yes, I think that not all lawbreakers are for the pokey. My wife works as a volunteer in counseling for first-time offenders, so I hear a lot of stories like this.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
this all feels very nice and feel-good but she was still speeding and this is what she was pulled over for. A sob-story and it's all okay... lol
A few bits & pieces I noted down as I read through-
police officer finally arrived and took her to the county..." - it may be better to use a dash rather than the ellipses at the end of the dialogue. they signal more of a trailing off where the dash is an interruption / cut off.
"Yes, Your Honor, / "Yes, your Honor. Her four-year / child care facility, your honor." - keep the presentation the same (3 different presentation here)
"Where is he?" The young woman cried out- following speech tags are lower case unless a proper noun or name (this occurs in other spots as well)
yanked me by my arm. I fought back." - need opening speech marks here.
I was trying to be as careful as possible, but she fought me." - need opening speech marks here.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Hi there,
this all feels very nice and feel-good but she was still speeding and this is what she was pulled over for. A sob-story and it's all okay... lol
A few bits & pieces I noted down as I read through-
police officer finally arrived and took her to the county..." - it may be better to use a dash rather than the ellipses at the end of the dialogue. they signal more of a trailing off where the dash is an interruption / cut off.
"Yes, Your Honor, / "Yes, your Honor. Her four-year / child care facility, your honor." - keep the presentation the same (3 different presentation here)
"Where is he?" The young woman cried out- following speech tags are lower case unless a proper noun or name (this occurs in other spots as well)
yanked me by my arm. I fought back." - need opening speech marks here.
I was trying to be as careful as possible, but she fought me." - need opening speech marks here.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Thanks, graffmang. The women loved it, but we guys say Don't break the law. But sometimes, the laws need to be stretched. My wife volunteers in counseling for first-time offenders, so I hear a lot of stories like this.
Comment from Karen Cherry
You get a big AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAh. This is a great short romance woman in danger story. If only real people in real life used this much common sense. I see the officer getting her car out of the lot. I see her and her kid sleeping in his bed while he takes the couch. She will plan to stay a month while she finds a job and saves up.
Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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You get a big AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAh. This is a great short romance woman in danger story. If only real people in real life used this much common sense. I see the officer getting her car out of the lot. I see her and her kid sleeping in his bed while he takes the couch. She will plan to stay a month while she finds a job and saves up.
Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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You're several steps ahead of me, Karen. It could even be the beginning of a book. She could have an innate talent, and he brings it out. Then her child's father comes back, and... The possibilities are endless.
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I posted Halloween Hijinks, it has some good points on it take a look. Karen
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Will do.
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:-)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wouldn't be wonderful if most cases could be solved this easy. I would really like that, but that's not the real world, is it. This is a good write.
The woman placed her hand on her forehead, her voice trembling. "I was so upset. (trembling,)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Wouldn't be wonderful if most cases could be solved this easy. I would really like that, but that's not the real world, is it. This is a good write.
The woman placed her hand on her forehead, her voice trembling. "I was so upset. (trembling,)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Thanks, Barbara, and thanks for the typo notice. Yes, the law system could be much better if we had a non-court system for smaller offences. It would take a load off the legal system.
Comment from pome lover
well, that is a lovely tale that breathes a bit of fresh air into today's tough world... I did have to smile at the fact that she didn't have her license in her wallet and her wallet in her purse. However it worked out well! good story.
Katharine
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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well, that is a lovely tale that breathes a bit of fresh air into today's tough world... I did have to smile at the fact that she didn't have her license in her wallet and her wallet in her purse. However it worked out well! good story.
Katharine
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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It's a rough starting love story, Pome lover. I just had to join the two up at the end. :>)
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and that you did! happy ending! :)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This story really pulled me in! I loved how you built up the tension in the courtroom. I could feel every emotion Judy was going through. The back and forth felt so real. I could see the scene play out like a movie. That ending was so heartwarming! You really turned a tough situation into something beautiful. I truly enjoyed reading this!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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This story really pulled me in! I loved how you built up the tension in the courtroom. I could feel every emotion Judy was going through. The back and forth felt so real. I could see the scene play out like a movie. That ending was so heartwarming! You really turned a tough situation into something beautiful. I truly enjoyed reading this!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thanks, Michael. It's much appreciated. I put this on, and I got some immediate replies. The pictures are on there now, but it looks like the pictures aren't as important as the story. Thanks again. Brad
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Now I read the real story :-) I really enjoyed this. Very realistic and good dialogue. And I'd like to see the story continue where the officer and the lady get together. But until then I am going with that storyline in my head. Nicely written. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Now I read the real story :-) I really enjoyed this. Very realistic and good dialogue. And I'd like to see the story continue where the officer and the lady get together. But until then I am going with that storyline in my head. Nicely written. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Hi Marilyn, Wow, I just finished writing the story and was going through some changes when it must have been posted. That's wild. If you liked it, I'd better leave it alone. Thanks.
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You're kidding right? Lol. You didn't mean to post TBA?
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Oh, it's ok, MariIyn, I just hadn't added the pix yet. It's on there now.
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oh no. I thought you were joking with it! lol I will read it tomorrow and leave a real review. I was Ms. Sarcasm with the first one!
