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After a lifetime of suffering, Tess’s world shatte

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Comment from Iza Deleanu
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So, that is how she become the serial killer that is taking revenge of her childhood schoolmates and family. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2025
    Thank you reading my chapter. Yep, she's getting revenge for everyone who wronged her and her mom.
    Thank you again for your lovely review and wonderful stars, take care.
Comment from Karen Cherry
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Well the kids from her school should run far and fast. She has gotten good at dispatching bad people. Even if they thought she was alive they would be hard-pressed to connect the dots. Karen

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 07-Apr-2025
    Thank you for reading my chapter and kind review. You're right Tess is on a roll. Who's going to be next? the kids, or someone from her distant past? You'll have to read on to see.
    Thank you again for all your support and wonderful stars, take care.
Comment from Yolanda King
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Much easier to follow this time round (-;
I only found a few minor things:
typical for him. = typical of
"He stayed in his office alone all day? = you missed the "
"You know this, how?" = I'm not sure I'd put a , here
Toni glances at the list. I'm going to = "I'm going to...
Now that sounds like a plan." = "Now.....
"My clothes. Running to her room, = clothes."

Keep it up! It'll be interesting to see how it shapes up.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
    Thank you for reading my chapter and for all your help. I really appreciate it and I'm glad you're enjoying my story. So this week I need to slow down, proofread better.
    Thank you again for all your support and wonderful stars, take care.
reply by Yolanda King on 05-Apr-2025
    I'm also always thankful to those who actually correct me or give me valuable tips on how to improve my writing instead of always telling me that it's great. That's polite and nice but not necessarily helpful. I like engaging stories so I'll look out for yours (-:
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I really enjoyed reading this chapter! Your characters emotions come through strong. The tension between Tess and Ryan really pulled me in. I especially like how you show Tess's struggle and the growing unease with her situation - it makes me want to know more about what happens next! I can't wait to see how things unfold. Keep going - this story has so much potential!

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
    Thank you for reading and for your encouraging review. I'm so glad you're enjoying it. That my characters and their actions are realistic to you. I was bullied as a child so I used that experience when writing this. Of course I never drew a knife on anyone, and no one died. I did knock one into his locker. He was bent over tying his shoe at the time. I got in big trouble he ended up with a huge knot on his head. He never bullied me again.
    Thank you again for all your support and wonderful stars, take care.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
    Thank you for reading and for your encouraging review. I'm so glad you're enjoying it. That my characters and their actions are realistic to you. I was bullied as a child so I used that experience when writing this. Of course I never drew a knife on anyone, and no one died. I did knock one into his locker. He was bent over tying his shoe at the time. I got in big trouble he ended up with a huge knot on his head. He never bullied me again.
    Thank you again for all your support and wonderful stars, take care.
Comment from patcelaw
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This is an interesting detective story and it flows very well when it is read aloud your sentence structure and your paragraphing are all very well done as is your punctuation with the punctuation and all you have produced the piece that it's very easy to listen to. May you have a wonderful day and a terrific weekend. Patricia

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
    Thank you for listening to my story. I'm so glad you're enjoying it. You have a wonderful weekend too.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi!
This is the first chapter I've read. I found it creative and engaging. I plan to go back and read the first ones. Your character list is very helpful.

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
    Thank you for reading my chapter. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Tess is a very determined woman who's righting the wrongs done in her life.
    Thank you again for you kind review and wonderful stars, take care.
Comment from royowen
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I love this, it's like a lot of the British TV shows that I've watched, it is hard to prove one's innocence in an accident like has befallen Ryan, there have been wrong hangings as a result, this is beautifully written Dawn, well dine, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
    Thank you so much for reading my chapter. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm sure Tess would've taken the fall if she and her mom hadn't ran.
    Thank you again for you kind review and wonderful stars, take care.
reply by royowen on 03-Apr-2025
    Well done