No - Say It Ain't So!
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The safe house certainly isn't very safe, and the guards aren't much interested in their duties either. Phil's body doesn't obey commands very well, not even ones from Tom. The problem is he has Trump running his body. I like your song choice.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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The safe house certainly isn't very safe, and the guards aren't much interested in their duties either. Phil's body doesn't obey commands very well, not even ones from Tom. The problem is he has Trump running his body. I like your song choice.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Wendy G
Tom is doing his work very well! He probably has the hardest role, being convincing as he cares for the real Trump but also watching over Phil. To be honest I 'm feeling a bit "trumped out" at the moment, not by your story, (which is well done) but by the real person. I need to debrief in our (at present) calm and peaceful environment, and focus on our positive way of life, and hope and pray we don't follow the US path of destruction and division, and lack of empathy. (Sorry).
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2025
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Tom is doing his work very well! He probably has the hardest role, being convincing as he cares for the real Trump but also watching over Phil. To be honest I 'm feeling a bit "trumped out" at the moment, not by your story, (which is well done) but by the real person. I need to debrief in our (at present) calm and peaceful environment, and focus on our positive way of life, and hope and pray we don't follow the US path of destruction and division, and lack of empathy. (Sorry).
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your heartfelt review.
Imagine how we in the States feel, we who value the rule of law and humanity.
Comment from lyenochka
I continue to be amazed that the real Trump would have the attention capacity for the Lord of the Rings. I was sure he'd have fallen asleep. It's good that Tom was able to succeed in getting him out. I had to laugh about the "junk" drawer having the hammer and screwdriver. I just have literally "junk" with stamps and rubber bands and pens...
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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I continue to be amazed that the real Trump would have the attention capacity for the Lord of the Rings. I was sure he'd have fallen asleep. It's good that Tom was able to succeed in getting him out. I had to laugh about the "junk" drawer having the hammer and screwdriver. I just have literally "junk" with stamps and rubber bands and pens...
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Maybe I should comment on Tom's animated reading style, or more on Trump's bonding with Bilbo.
We've always had junk drawers. And as we house/pet sit we find them ubiquitous.
Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from jim vecchio
Wow! Chapter 28 already! And with many of our country's stores and restaurants only reaching Chapter 11! What will Trump/Phil do now? Can they get the car to start? Reminds me of the time I was in my parked car and a beautiful woman walked by. I wished I could be a strong football player so I could get her attention. I morphed into O.J. Simpson, behind bars. It took me six weeks to morph back again. When we morphed back, I discovered O.J. had eaten me out of house and home.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Wow! Chapter 28 already! And with many of our country's stores and restaurants only reaching Chapter 11! What will Trump/Phil do now? Can they get the car to start? Reminds me of the time I was in my parked car and a beautiful woman walked by. I wished I could be a strong football player so I could get her attention. I morphed into O.J. Simpson, behind bars. It took me six weeks to morph back again. When we morphed back, I discovered O.J. had eaten me out of house and home.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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I just hope left your wife alone.
Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Faith Williams
There are a couple things I have difficulty believing in this chapter. One is that Trump would not be more suspicious of Tom showing up when Trump is now in Phil's body. Two is that Trump does not get bored with the reading. Especially after reading for hours.
Suggestions to consider:
"Oh, but the inscription inside. "I tried to distract him. The quotation mark here got hooked to the wrong word.
Some lost Middle Earth tome? I'm not sure Trump would know the word 'tome'.
Looking forward to the next chapter, Wayne.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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There are a couple things I have difficulty believing in this chapter. One is that Trump would not be more suspicious of Tom showing up when Trump is now in Phil's body. Two is that Trump does not get bored with the reading. Especially after reading for hours.
Suggestions to consider:
"Oh, but the inscription inside. "I tried to distract him. The quotation mark here got hooked to the wrong word.
Some lost Middle Earth tome? I'm not sure Trump would know the word 'tome'.
Looking forward to the next chapter, Wayne.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your great review. And for the catch.
What I'm trying to do is to steer Trump toward insanity, (smiley face here) hoping that readers can suspend belief and accept my fictionalized version as Trump buying into his new reality - Bilbo is his alter ego as well as rescue.
Comment from Karen Cherry
This may be my favorite one so far. Tom is the star of the piece. He is doing all the heavy juggling. He is my hero. How can you give Phil a happy and safe life when this is done? And, if you pull out that old chestnut of it being only a dream, I will scream. I guess you could end it with two Aliens talking about our marvelous imaginations.
Alien one: you say the stupid fat one is their leader, and the skinny nice guy is trying to fix all his errors when they switch bodies? Why don't they just kill him when he returns to his fat self?
Alien two: They have rules about that. I am glad we have zapping days. One person every day can zap someone. And you cannot zap again until everyone has had their turn, or has passed on the choice. No willy nilly behavior here. People behave because they don't want to be zapped. Works pretty good.
Alien one: Velma gets to Zap on Tuesday, we could ask her to Zap him. They will just think he had a stroke. Works for me. Karen
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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This may be my favorite one so far. Tom is the star of the piece. He is doing all the heavy juggling. He is my hero. How can you give Phil a happy and safe life when this is done? And, if you pull out that old chestnut of it being only a dream, I will scream. I guess you could end it with two Aliens talking about our marvelous imaginations.
Alien one: you say the stupid fat one is their leader, and the skinny nice guy is trying to fix all his errors when they switch bodies? Why don't they just kill him when he returns to his fat self?
Alien two: They have rules about that. I am glad we have zapping days. One person every day can zap someone. And you cannot zap again until everyone has had their turn, or has passed on the choice. No willy nilly behavior here. People behave because they don't want to be zapped. Works pretty good.
Alien one: Velma gets to Zap on Tuesday, we could ask her to Zap him. They will just think he had a stroke. Works for me. Karen
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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smiley face here
No, there won't be any dreamin' (except me dreamin' that my story and real life would switch places).
Thank you for your fun review.
And for the six stars!!!!!!!
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I will see what you do next. karen
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Chapter Twenty-eight is a thrilling and deeply engaging continuation of the story, showcasing not only the heightened stakes but also the uniquely compelling dynamic between Tom and Phil (as Trump). The pacing is riveting, and the tension steadily builds throughout, pulling readers deeper into the narrative with every turn.
The chapter opens with a strikingly vulnerable moment as Phil, embodying Trump's characteristic blend of arrogance and insecurity, whines about his confinement. The writing does a superb job of blending the real with the absurd, allowing Phil to almost comically identify with Bilbo Baggins' struggles, yet there's a sharp undercurrent of desperation in his attempts to reclaim his power. This moment sets the tone for the rest of the chapter-there's a deep psychological complexity at play, especially with the recurring motif of the "Ring of Power." Tom's lighthearted banter about Bilbo's ring contrasts with the increasingly precarious situation they find themselves in, revealing how Tom's practicality and calm demeanor serve as an anchor to Trump's mounting paranoia and delusions.
The shift from dark humor to palpable tension when an intruder attempts to breach their safe house is seamless. The narrative expertly weaves suspense, as the previously lighthearted moments give way to a frantic escape plan. The imagery of broken glass and desperate, half-comedic efforts to evade capture with Trump (Phil) clumsily in tow highlights the absurdity of the situation, but it also underscores the stakes-Tom's quick thinking and resourcefulness, paired with the utter lack of familiarity Phil has with any semblance of security, make for a truly captivating sequence.
The chapter reaches a climax with the unsuccessful car escape attempt, leaving the reader on the edge of their seat. Will they get away? Will they be caught? The open-ended conclusion to the chapter leaves you eager to turn the page, the unanswered questions looming like the slow march of time itself.
What stands out most in this chapter is the seamless fusion of political intrigue, personal conflict, and humor. The narrative dances between moments of dark comedy and deep tension, creating a complex atmosphere that is both captivating and unpredictable. The chapter's structure-shifting between intimate character moments and high-stakes action-ensures that readers remain hooked, constantly wondering what will happen next.
This chapter is an excellent continuation of the story, keeping the momentum going while deepening the emotional and psychological stakes. It's a masterful blend of wit, suspense, and character exploration, making it one of the most compelling chapters in the book so far.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Chapter Twenty-eight is a thrilling and deeply engaging continuation of the story, showcasing not only the heightened stakes but also the uniquely compelling dynamic between Tom and Phil (as Trump). The pacing is riveting, and the tension steadily builds throughout, pulling readers deeper into the narrative with every turn.
The chapter opens with a strikingly vulnerable moment as Phil, embodying Trump's characteristic blend of arrogance and insecurity, whines about his confinement. The writing does a superb job of blending the real with the absurd, allowing Phil to almost comically identify with Bilbo Baggins' struggles, yet there's a sharp undercurrent of desperation in his attempts to reclaim his power. This moment sets the tone for the rest of the chapter-there's a deep psychological complexity at play, especially with the recurring motif of the "Ring of Power." Tom's lighthearted banter about Bilbo's ring contrasts with the increasingly precarious situation they find themselves in, revealing how Tom's practicality and calm demeanor serve as an anchor to Trump's mounting paranoia and delusions.
The shift from dark humor to palpable tension when an intruder attempts to breach their safe house is seamless. The narrative expertly weaves suspense, as the previously lighthearted moments give way to a frantic escape plan. The imagery of broken glass and desperate, half-comedic efforts to evade capture with Trump (Phil) clumsily in tow highlights the absurdity of the situation, but it also underscores the stakes-Tom's quick thinking and resourcefulness, paired with the utter lack of familiarity Phil has with any semblance of security, make for a truly captivating sequence.
The chapter reaches a climax with the unsuccessful car escape attempt, leaving the reader on the edge of their seat. Will they get away? Will they be caught? The open-ended conclusion to the chapter leaves you eager to turn the page, the unanswered questions looming like the slow march of time itself.
What stands out most in this chapter is the seamless fusion of political intrigue, personal conflict, and humor. The narrative dances between moments of dark comedy and deep tension, creating a complex atmosphere that is both captivating and unpredictable. The chapter's structure-shifting between intimate character moments and high-stakes action-ensures that readers remain hooked, constantly wondering what will happen next.
This chapter is an excellent continuation of the story, keeping the momentum going while deepening the emotional and psychological stakes. It's a masterful blend of wit, suspense, and character exploration, making it one of the most compelling chapters in the book so far.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Thank you so very much for your captivating review, superbly written.
Comment from lancellot
This is an interesting satire fiction piece. I'm not sure if it is Fan-fiction or not, because of all the Tolkien characters being mentioned. I guess it's okay, this is only FanStory.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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This is an interesting satire fiction piece. I'm not sure if it is Fan-fiction or not, because of all the Tolkien characters being mentioned. I guess it's okay, this is only FanStory.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Thank you.
I'm pretty sure The Hobbit and the Lord of the Rings is public domain. But my greater concern is what some offended MAGA might want to do to destroy my life
And you are right... only FanStory.
