Comment from Jessica Wheeler

Exceptional

Perfection. There are countless aspects of this piece I find brilliant: The title, the meter/rhyme, how it's both hilarious AND true to form (to name a few). However, what I love most of all, is the fact that it won THIS contest. Bananas-in the best way.
Well done, daddy.
Xo
Jess

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2025

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Congrats and yes I love this poem as well, especially these lines; "I feel my darling's gaze upon my skin
Can love begin as lust and still be true?
Will passion screw my mind so deep within
That mortal sin's the price of having you?

"Not ripe enough": her words have rent my heart;
She puts an orange in her shopping cart." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2025

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You wrote a good sonnet;
I can see why you won.
-The music was good, too.
-A very good opening verse sets the scene.
-You follow that well about "true love waiting."
-A very good volta with questions as to
whether this is a true love or not.
-A very good closing couplet.
-Very well done.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2025

Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem. I had to reread the poem just to make it make sense. It wasn't until I saw your notes that I realized it was a banana. Sometimes I am a little slow on the uptake.

Congrats on your 1st place win

Cecilia

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2025

Comment from Kirsten Shonle

Excellent

The rhyming for this poem is spectacular. It is not contrived. I like the fact that it talks about the fact that true love is hard to find and it is not merely that of lust.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025

Thanks so much! I just threw the lyrics into an AI music engine and one of the results may have some potential.

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Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I sense within a touch a brilliance that is well above my intellect. I read it thrice as I was drawn to it as a moth to a lamp but dang my Southern lifestyle kept me scratching my head thinking it was a love sonnet not a shopping spree for a bruised fruit.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025

Thank you Tom. Your writing is no less brilliant than mine, just a different genre, and I admire it greatly. I just start with really stupid ideas and keep poking at them until they die or mushrooms start growing out of the turds. Maybe someday we can collaborate on a project.

BTW I just threw the lyrics on this into an AI music engine and one of the results may have some potential. If you get a change to listen, let me know what you think!

Thanks again,

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Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

brilliant Shakespearean sonnet bout going to a supermarket to look for fruit while on the way to visit your secret lover and realizing perhaps that it is just lust and not true love

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025

Thanks so much Jake! The idea was that the banana is fantasizing about its consumption/consumation by a customer, but I love that others came up with multiple interpretations. Hahaha.

BTW I just threw the lyrics on this into an AI music engine and one of the results may have some potential. See what you think!

Thanks again,

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Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Congratulations on winning the Sonnet contest.
This certainly is a unique and fun sonnet. Your sense of humor was a delight and certainly a different take as the banana was rejected for the orange.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025

Thanks so much Janet! BTW I just threw the lyrics on this into an AI music engine and one of the results may have some potential. If you get a chance to listen, let me know what you think!

Thanks again,

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Comment from Mrs Anna Howard

Excellent

Haha! This is so unique and refreshing. I adore your imagination and your sense of humor. Also love the use of different font colors in the presentation. Wishing you the best for the contest!
(Not done reading yet so not promising my vote, but I may come back!)

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025

Thanks very much Anna! Playing with the colors is always the last thing I do at the end and it was particularly fun this time : )

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi
This is a nicely done sonnet which tells of unrequited love and how passion can blind you. I like the twist at the end.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy healthy
Have a great day.
Joan

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025

Thanks very much Joan. That's a really good summation.

reply by dragonpoet on 17-Mar-2025

You're welcome, harambe. I am glad I got our intended meaning.
Joan