Veil of Secrets
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15 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. There is a bit of closure between Rebecca and Garth. There are still a few kinks to work out. There is one small edit toward the end. " He kneeled down, and his (hands) brushed over....." Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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This is another excellent chapter. There is a bit of closure between Rebecca and Garth. There are still a few kinks to work out. There is one small edit toward the end. " He kneeled down, and his (hands) brushed over....." Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you for taking your time to read and review my stories. I wish there was more time in the day to do all the things necessary to keep up, but I get slower by the day. I am sorry this is so late, but I do appreciate your time and thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Great chapter! The wolf-dog has done a great job of protecting Lenore and the others from the bear. Garth has finally found Rebecca. I like that Amelia calls him Rebecca's prince. Hopefully Donatelli will survive his surgery and recover. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Great chapter! The wolf-dog has done a great job of protecting Lenore and the others from the bear. Garth has finally found Rebecca. I like that Amelia calls him Rebecca's prince. Hopefully Donatelli will survive his surgery and recover. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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I think it is impossible to get caught up with my thank yous when I fall so far behind. I do appreciate every time you read and respond and I am sorry for falling so far behind. Thank you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
I'm really hoping Zhang and his men don't harm Donatelli and Jenna's daughter, they've been through a lot already. I can really feel Donatelli's anguish and despair here. Another excellent read, Carol.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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I'm really hoping Zhang and his men don't harm Donatelli and Jenna's daughter, they've been through a lot already. I can really feel Donatelli's anguish and despair here. Another excellent read, Carol.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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I think it is impossible to get caught up with my thank yous when I fall so far behind. I do appreciate every time you read and respond and I am sorry for falling so far behind. Thank you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great descriptions of the scene between the charging wolfdog and the hungry angry bear. And you finished with a lighthearted scene as Rebecca's 'prince' finds her. Well told carol. Loving this story, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Great descriptions of the scene between the charging wolfdog and the hungry angry bear. And you finished with a lighthearted scene as Rebecca's 'prince' finds her. Well told carol. Loving this story, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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I think it is impossible to get caught up with my thank yous when I fall so far behind. I do appreciate every time you read and respond and I am sorry for falling so far behind. Thank you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Lenore is very competent with that rifle. The poor wolf-dog keeps getting beat up. Garth has found the new woman who will make his life complete. Zhang got away again. Donatelli had to be ordered to behave if he wanted to see his daughter after she is rescued. Things are getting organized, and the bad guys are no longer winning it all. You have a missing word: . . . his (hand) brushed over . . . One thing you will need to do is a little background work. The tunnels collapsed because of the intense rain. But there have been several mentions of dust. It seems a really insignificant problem, but it isn't.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Lenore is very competent with that rifle. The poor wolf-dog keeps getting beat up. Garth has found the new woman who will make his life complete. Zhang got away again. Donatelli had to be ordered to behave if he wanted to see his daughter after she is rescued. Things are getting organized, and the bad guys are no longer winning it all. You have a missing word: . . . his (hand) brushed over . . . One thing you will need to do is a little background work. The tunnels collapsed because of the intense rain. But there have been several mentions of dust. It seems a really insignificant problem, but it isn't.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the review as always...Here's where my mind has been this morning... I wrote a chapter in a story (less than 500 words) and thought we might have fun adding new chapters to the story (under 500 words) and other authors would join writing each chapter tht follows...Would you be interested?
Smiles, Carol
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I am still not getting over the flu as hoped. I am having trouble just getting what I need to do done.
Comment from royowen
A really beautiful episode, I always know I'm going to have a have a happy ending, even after the protagonists have died, with you it's just another beginning, I'm a fantasist too, that's what you get with a caring God, and an optimistic dreamer, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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A really beautiful episode, I always know I'm going to have a have a happy ending, even after the protagonists have died, with you it's just another beginning, I'm a fantasist too, that's what you get with a caring God, and an optimistic dreamer, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you for always supporting me and taking the time to enjoy my posts. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Well done
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Well is well.when it ends well , at least on this side Rebecca is reunited with Garth, Amelia found a home and hopefully the dog will be okay. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Well is well.when it ends well , at least on this side Rebecca is reunited with Garth, Amelia found a home and hopefully the dog will be okay. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2025
Comment from Wendy G
My goodness - they even have to deal with a bear! There is no end to the danger.
And Donatelli must be in a terrible way after waking up during surgery - obviously the anaesthetist miscalculated the dosage!! But he's tough, he will have to be! Very dramatic chapter throughout.
Wendy
Edit: He saved us," Rebecca said softly. (quotation marks needed befoe "He")
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My goodness - they even have to deal with a bear! There is no end to the danger.
And Donatelli must be in a terrible way after waking up during surgery - obviously the anaesthetist miscalculated the dosage!! But he's tough, he will have to be! Very dramatic chapter throughout.
Wendy
Edit: He saved us," Rebecca said softly. (quotation marks needed befoe "He")
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
I can talk about the characters and what they are doing, but I'm always impressed by what YOU are doing with this story. You think of the little things and make every paragraph suspenseful.
Take this little detail for instance. "The driver's window cracked open, and an arm waved. "Is he signaling us?"
Rather than just proceed with gunfire, you included the arm wave, which added to the visuals. A fantastic job.
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I can talk about the characters and what they are doing, but I'm always impressed by what YOU are doing with this story. You think of the little things and make every paragraph suspenseful.
Take this little detail for instance. "The driver's window cracked open, and an arm waved. "Is he signaling us?"
Rather than just proceed with gunfire, you included the arm wave, which added to the visuals. A fantastic job.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
Comment from karenina
Woo-hoo! Did you hear me hooting and hollering as I read this chapter?
Heck yeah~ This is "rescuing" Carol-style. No time to take a breath! I just plunged in and read clear through to Amelia's adorable inquiry as to if Garth was the prince!
I've caught up. (For the moment) -- and I'm SO happy I ended on THIS chapter!
More please!
:)
Karenina
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Woo-hoo! Did you hear me hooting and hollering as I read this chapter?
Heck yeah~ This is "rescuing" Carol-style. No time to take a breath! I just plunged in and read clear through to Amelia's adorable inquiry as to if Garth was the prince!
I've caught up. (For the moment) -- and I'm SO happy I ended on THIS chapter!
More please!
:)
Karenina
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
