Veil of Secrets
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15 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, multiple attacks, that Z guy I don't like him at all. Thanks to that rat at least they had some fair warning before all goes south. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
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Wow, multiple attacks, that Z guy I don't like him at all. Thanks to that rat at least they had some fair warning before all goes south. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You did a great job raising the tension and keeping it there. I am looking forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
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This is another excellent chapter. You did a great job raising the tension and keeping it there. I am looking forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
Shit is starting to get real. Zhang is an evil man and just doesn't seem to quit. This story is well organized and everything is flowing nicely. Keep writing my friend.
Cecilila
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Carol,
Shit is starting to get real. Zhang is an evil man and just doesn't seem to quit. This story is well organized and everything is flowing nicely. Keep writing my friend.
Cecilila
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
Comment from royowen
Things are really hotting up with Frank DeVito and Jack Lexington in involved in the scene now, it should be really interesting with an all in go going on now, how fascinating that it's an all in going one, well done Carol, blessings Roy
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Things are really hotting up with Frank DeVito and Jack Lexington in involved in the scene now, it should be really interesting with an all in go going on now, how fascinating that it's an all in going one, well done Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
So much is happening with Zhang, and you're using a phone conversation to explain everything to the reader. Good tactic. The dialogue between Terry and Rossi explains the basic plan, and the phone conversation provides many more details. It's interesting that Rossi is actually helping out. Several mobsters have turned to doing good deeds now. Good chapter. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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So much is happening with Zhang, and you're using a phone conversation to explain everything to the reader. Good tactic. The dialogue between Terry and Rossi explains the basic plan, and the phone conversation provides many more details. It's interesting that Rossi is actually helping out. Several mobsters have turned to doing good deeds now. Good chapter. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 15-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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I wouldn't count on Rossi being an angel, but he knows the info he has will give him enough pull to get out of the flea-bag motel. I think he knows his days are numbered with Zhang and it would do him well to have someone on his side.
Smiles, Carol
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Of course he won't! But one can always hope for the best in people! LOL. Good chapter.
Comment from Wy Jung
A gruff voice answered, "Peter Cottontail."
Vince slid the bolt lock and opened the door, his eyes darting around the parking lot as Peter Cottontail slipped inside.
This cracked me up! Onward.
OH Carol, that's it??!! I guess I have to wait now???! WHY!? haha
I've gotten spoiled reading them all at once like I did. Wellll, it is midnight, WAY past my bedtime so I'll go to bed and wait with the rest of your eager fans. ;)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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A gruff voice answered, "Peter Cottontail."
Vince slid the bolt lock and opened the door, his eyes darting around the parking lot as Peter Cottontail slipped inside.
This cracked me up! Onward.
OH Carol, that's it??!! I guess I have to wait now???! WHY!? haha
I've gotten spoiled reading them all at once like I did. Wellll, it is midnight, WAY past my bedtime so I'll go to bed and wait with the rest of your eager fans. ;)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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Chap 37 is posted and definitely full of action and surprises... I can't believe you read the entire book...That's awesome.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Oh no, instead of moving towards rescuing the women and finding Rebecca, there is a horrid twist to kill Donatelli and kidnap his baby. What next? Who let Zhang know Donatelli wasn't dead ... guess I'll have to wait!
Wendy
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Oh no, instead of moving towards rescuing the women and finding Rebecca, there is a horrid twist to kill Donatelli and kidnap his baby. What next? Who let Zhang know Donatelli wasn't dead ... guess I'll have to wait!
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I was holding my breath through this chapter Carol. Well done, now I'm off to make a calming coffee.
Some funny little additions need editing in the paragraph - A knock on the door sent Rossi hustling
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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I was holding my breath through this chapter Carol. Well done, now I'm off to make a calming coffee.
Some funny little additions need editing in the paragraph - A knock on the door sent Rossi hustling
cheers
valda
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Thanks, Valda. Sorry I put you on the edge of your seat and you need something to calm you. Be sure and keep it close because the next few chapters are going to be zingers. thanks for letting me know about those Gremlins...I take them out and they come right back. Might be the ghosts. LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
I don't know how you keep track of where everybody is. Do you keep a chart? The last I remember of Maggie, she was left in Antonio's care while Jenna rushed to the hospital. I guess Jenna went back and got Maggie.
Now, there's going to be a big battle at Frank's hospital. I'm on the edge of my seat prepared.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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I don't know how you keep track of where everybody is. Do you keep a chart? The last I remember of Maggie, she was left in Antonio's care while Jenna rushed to the hospital. I guess Jenna went back and got Maggie.
Now, there's going to be a big battle at Frank's hospital. I'm on the edge of my seat prepared.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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She was in Charle's care...but when they transferred Donatelli to Frank's hospital, Jenna and Maggie went with him. Hold on because we're going to have battles everywhere.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Darn it. I knew you had to get back to Zhang pretty soon but this is even worse news than I anticipated! Who's the creep who spilled the beans? Seriously? Now I have to stay up late worrying about Maggie? You're killing me here!
(But in the best possible way!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Darn it. I knew you had to get back to Zhang pretty soon but this is even worse news than I anticipated! Who's the creep who spilled the beans? Seriously? Now I have to stay up late worrying about Maggie? You're killing me here!
(But in the best possible way!)
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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I knew it was coming and it was hard not to tell.... I'm not sure about who spilled the beans...maybe Zhang was suspicious and put the squeeze on the coroner...or a cop..someone who was there at the time which limits the people. My mind hasn't decided.
Smiles, Carol
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Whatever you decide...
It'll be great!
