Veil of Secrets
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12 total reviews
Comment from Wy Jung
Eleanor's phone buzzed. She glanced at the caller ID - €"Frank".
This might be a formatting snafu - but might be as it was supposed to be?
The tension is building! I'll admit I'm a little upset with Jenna being so hard on her ghost mom. That wound does cut deep, I have a feeling she'll come around.
On to the next.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Eleanor's phone buzzed. She glanced at the caller ID - €"Frank".
This might be a formatting snafu - but might be as it was supposed to be?
The tension is building! I'll admit I'm a little upset with Jenna being so hard on her ghost mom. That wound does cut deep, I have a feeling she'll come around.
On to the next.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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It seems when I use dashes, the software often changes it into these weird signs.... Sometimes I can change it and it will revert right back. Irritating.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pearl Edwards
An emotional chapter in the hospital especially for Jenna and Eleanor who find themselves at odds with one another. You do the emotions really well, Carol, a great read.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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An emotional chapter in the hospital especially for Jenna and Eleanor who find themselves at odds with one another. You do the emotions really well, Carol, a great read.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 01-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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I am thrilled to see your reviews every day and I am so sorry that I fall so far behind. But know I truly appreciate everything you have to say and the smile you give me.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, I feel so bad for Eleanor. Jenna is blaming her for everything. That was some coverup they pulled off to get Donatelli out of danger. One small fix: 'nonchalantly pushed the (mop) bucket down the hall.' Great chapter, and great dialogue. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Wow, I feel so bad for Eleanor. Jenna is blaming her for everything. That was some coverup they pulled off to get Donatelli out of danger. One small fix: 'nonchalantly pushed the (mop) bucket down the hall.' Great chapter, and great dialogue. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much for enjoying this chapter... It was a tough one for me because it reminded me so much of how my daughter would have reacted. My heart goes out to Eleanor...not matter how much you do, it's never enough.
Smiles, Carol
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Unfortunately, sometimes parents cannot do right by their children, no matter how much good they do. Glad you made it through this chapter. Hugs! Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I feel for Jenna but I think she was being unreasonable towards her mother, who can't be everywhere all at the same time. I am sure their relationship will be restored though. High tension in this chapter. Always well done.
Wendy
Edit: And who's body is that? (whose)
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I feel for Jenna but I think she was being unreasonable towards her mother, who can't be everywhere all at the same time. I am sure their relationship will be restored though. High tension in this chapter. Always well done.
Wendy
Edit: And who's body is that? (whose)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The plot to get Donatelli out of the hospital and to a better place went flawlessly, until Jenna hears about Donatelli's death on her phone. Eleanor has to go back to the Vineyard to help find Rebecca and Jenna won't forgive her for not being there for her. Eleanor is devastated but can't stay with Jenna.
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The plot to get Donatelli out of the hospital and to a better place went flawlessly, until Jenna hears about Donatelli's death on her phone. Eleanor has to go back to the Vineyard to help find Rebecca and Jenna won't forgive her for not being there for her. Eleanor is devastated but can't stay with Jenna.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
After reading all the emotion expelled, I have to sit back and relax for a moment.
My heart aches for Eleanor. I know Jenna was emotionally drained praying God would spare her husband, and then hearing her husband was dead. I also know she has unrealistic expectations of her mother's ghostly capabilities.
Throughout this novel, Eleanor has been expected to solve EVERY problem, and with all she has done, her daughter is least appreciative. This element of the story is so true to real life, and demonstrates your understanding of human nature. I hope Jenna and Eleanor's relationship can be mended after Jenna calms down.
Your inclusion of the character's thoughts, feelings, and emotions takes time to sort out, but it makes this novel phenomenal.
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After reading all the emotion expelled, I have to sit back and relax for a moment.
My heart aches for Eleanor. I know Jenna was emotionally drained praying God would spare her husband, and then hearing her husband was dead. I also know she has unrealistic expectations of her mother's ghostly capabilities.
Throughout this novel, Eleanor has been expected to solve EVERY problem, and with all she has done, her daughter is least appreciative. This element of the story is so true to real life, and demonstrates your understanding of human nature. I hope Jenna and Eleanor's relationship can be mended after Jenna calms down.
Your inclusion of the character's thoughts, feelings, and emotions takes time to sort out, but it makes this novel phenomenal.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
This was an excellent continuation, Carol.
You packed it punch-drunk full of raw brutal emotion.
I hope, that once she calms down and hears the full story, Jenna will forgive her mum, I think she will. Assuming Matthew survives. But he is a cockroach and takes a lot of killing.
Now we can get on with finding Rebecca before she gets loaded on some ship as a sex slave export to some foreign port.
Also, that dude in the bathroom...
Tim x
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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This was an excellent continuation, Carol.
You packed it punch-drunk full of raw brutal emotion.
I hope, that once she calms down and hears the full story, Jenna will forgive her mum, I think she will. Assuming Matthew survives. But he is a cockroach and takes a lot of killing.
Now we can get on with finding Rebecca before she gets loaded on some ship as a sex slave export to some foreign port.
Also, that dude in the bathroom...
Tim x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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There is no way I will every catch up on these thank yous, but please no I appreciate every one of your reviews and encouraging thoughts. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Poor Eleanor, she is in the situation that whatever she does will be wrong. I hope they work it out, I'd hate it after all this time Jenna falls out with her mother. It's not fair. Now to get Rebecca, and help Garth find her. Just when everything was going right, too. I'm just starting to breathe again! Lol. Well done, my friend, this is a fabulous story. Love and hugs Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Poor Eleanor, she is in the situation that whatever she does will be wrong. I hope they work it out, I'd hate it after all this time Jenna falls out with her mother. It's not fair. Now to get Rebecca, and help Garth find her. Just when everything was going right, too. I'm just starting to breathe again! Lol. Well done, my friend, this is a fabulous story. Love and hugs Sandra xxx
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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There is no way I will every catch up on these thank yous, but please no I appreciate every one of your reviews and encouraging thoughts. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
You've managed to interject a new layer to this already ambitious plot! I find the introduction of some mother/daughter conflict to be extremely realistic. I felt Eleanor recoiling from her daughter's rage and feeling as though this has all been taxing even her spiritual "powers"--
I could imagine this scene playing out in a movie. The human element only adds to the enormity of the crime and underhandedness happening in all corners!
This is the kind of emotional "wreckage" I witnessed when working as an RN. Hospitals and tragedies bring out the best and the worst in most of us!
(I hope Eleanor goes out and has a stiff drink. She needs that kind of "spirit" right now!)
A white-knuckle chapter written with such intensity, Carol!
You are on your game woman!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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You've managed to interject a new layer to this already ambitious plot! I find the introduction of some mother/daughter conflict to be extremely realistic. I felt Eleanor recoiling from her daughter's rage and feeling as though this has all been taxing even her spiritual "powers"--
I could imagine this scene playing out in a movie. The human element only adds to the enormity of the crime and underhandedness happening in all corners!
This is the kind of emotional "wreckage" I witnessed when working as an RN. Hospitals and tragedies bring out the best and the worst in most of us!
(I hope Eleanor goes out and has a stiff drink. She needs that kind of "spirit" right now!)
A white-knuckle chapter written with such intensity, Carol!
You are on your game woman!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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There is no way I will every catch up on these thank yous, but please no I appreciate every one of your reviews and encouraging thoughts. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Smart woman. Wipe out those 5,278 thank you for your review replies this way!
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I can't keep up and I feel so bad about it. So I hope everyone understands that I read them and I appreciate them but this is the best I can do.
Smiles, Carol
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It's what a whole LOT of people do when they are so behind! I think it's very kind...you are NOT blowing anyone off. This IS acknowledging both your appreciation of THEM and the number of hours in a day!
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You just want to make me feel good! I still have 125 more to go and I need to write....and read...Ugh!
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
What a twist of story plot. Jenna mad at her mom. I think she will come around she is just a little stressed out at the moment.
Keep writing my friend
Lots of love,
Cecilia
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Carol,
What a twist of story plot. Jenna mad at her mom. I think she will come around she is just a little stressed out at the moment.
Keep writing my friend
Lots of love,
Cecilia
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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There is no way I will every catch up on these thank yous, but please no I appreciate every one of your reviews and encouraging thoughts. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
