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Skate

a 50-word story

9 total reviews 
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Very amusing fifty word story Bill, now I am left wondering how the giant lost his skate. I love some of these 'giant' sculptings that come up and this is a colourful one, and a great little story to go witth it. cheers
valda

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2025


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
    Thank you, Valda
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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This is a very enigmatic story, this looks like one of those clownish story and full of surprises, but of course this is not a surprise, I need to use my imagination to fill out the gaps.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
    Thanks for giving this a look, Iza.
Comment from patcelaw
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This is an interesting poem about a lonely and very large rollerskate. I have never rollerskating in my life. I tried one time I fell and I decided that I didn't want to be hurt anymore so I never put skates on again. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    Thanks, Patricia
Comment from jim vecchio
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Too bad your story involved only one skate. Were there more, we might have seen a colossal Roller Derby Game. I wonder if that skate truly fit the Giant. That would be quite a feet!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    If that were my skate, it would likely be an escape attempt.
Comment from nomi338
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When did you find the time to write this. I am sure you did not write while on the run, and I know you were on the run, ya big coward. I would easily out run you, because you see, I don't have to outrun the giant, I only need to outrun you. See you fool!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    So, looks like I will be safe.
reply by nomi338 on 30-Jan-2025
    ouch!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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I'm not sure what i would think or do if i saw that thing rolling its way down the street, especially if i was sober at the time. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    I would move out of Lilliput immediately.
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh, alrightty! I liked all the onomatopoeic words to add brief drama to this briefest of flash forms. Without the picture, I would not have gotten the full impact of the story. At least, it's not a sea creature skate...

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    Thanks for taking a look, Helen. Yes, a sea creature skate would be ridiculous.
Comment from samandlancelot
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Hi Bill,

Such a fun story. It looks like a girl's skate with pink wheels so I think it's a girl monster. I can see her hair swinging back and forth as she clomps and thuds.

For appearances, lines four and five are single-spaced, and the other lines are double-spaced.

Patricia

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    Thank you, Patricia, for giving this a look. The lines are all complete sentences. The one is longer and takes up two lines.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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You made me smile here with this little tale Bill, a giant on roller skates whizzing through the town sounds like a lot of fun! Is this a real skate in the picture? Love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
    Thank you, Dolly. On the picture, I see a steering wheel at the top.
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 29-Jan-2025
    Wow! yes I see it and a kind of engine near the bottom too, love Dolly x