Veil of Secrets
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Comment from Wy Jung
*Then, with a laugh that echoed her irrepressible spirit, she pushed herself up and brushed off her coat. "Well, that was dignified," she muttered with a wry smile.*
Her irrepressible spirit - nice. I love that and the little comedic moment of laughing at herself is one more priceless glimpse into the character.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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*Then, with a laugh that echoed her irrepressible spirit, she pushed herself up and brushed off her coat. "Well, that was dignified," she muttered with a wry smile.*
Her irrepressible spirit - nice. I love that and the little comedic moment of laughing at herself is one more priceless glimpse into the character.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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I like to have different dimensions to my characters so they appear to be more real. Glad you enjoyed it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I like how you start this chapter lightheartedly with Eleanor's stumbly arrival before Althea's dramatic rescue which is just the start of it. Great chapter Carol.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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I like how you start this chapter lightheartedly with Eleanor's stumbly arrival before Althea's dramatic rescue which is just the start of it. Great chapter Carol.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 27-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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I try to lighten the story every now and then so the reader has a moment to catch their breath. I'm thinking the team needs to recuperate...maybe the next novel will be a vacation and of course some crime. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I was wondering what a dead man could possibly want with riches and particularly ownership of something that belongs to this plain Carol, although malevolence is probably eternal, as the devil does things out of hatred and revenge, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2025
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I was wondering what a dead man could possibly want with riches and particularly ownership of something that belongs to this plain Carol, although malevolence is probably eternal, as the devil does things out of hatred and revenge, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2025
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Cornelius only wants it because someone said he couldn't have it and he loves the fact that he thinks he can outsmart everyone. He's a devil and somehow he's going to end up in flames.
Smiles, Carol
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He will indeed.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another beautiful chapter and I laughed reading this, very witty phrase;"Well, that was dignified," she muttered with a wry smile. "Guess I need a refresher course about proper landings."
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Another beautiful chapter and I laughed reading this, very witty phrase;"Well, that was dignified," she muttered with a wry smile. "Guess I need a refresher course about proper landings."
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. As usual, you are moving the story along nicely. I am enjoying your huge cast of characters. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
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This is another excellent chapter. As usual, you are moving the story along nicely. I am enjoying your huge cast of characters. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
There is one thing for sure, you use conflict like whipped cream on a sundae, piled on top and sliding over the sides. There's never a shortage of the rich, velvety goodness. Thanks for sharing.
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There is one thing for sure, you use conflict like whipped cream on a sundae, piled on top and sliding over the sides. There's never a shortage of the rich, velvety goodness. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
I see I read this chapter out of order, but it answers a few questions in my mind. It's interesting that Garth now accepts speaking to ghosts and doesn't seem to be bothered by it. I guess Danni has educated him. Althea is now safe, but Rebecca is missing. So many twists in this book! Blessings. Carol
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I see I read this chapter out of order, but it answers a few questions in my mind. It's interesting that Garth now accepts speaking to ghosts and doesn't seem to be bothered by it. I guess Danni has educated him. Althea is now safe, but Rebecca is missing. So many twists in this book! Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
Comment from Jacob1395
Cornelius really will stop at nothing to get what he wants. I loved the sinister atmosphere in this piece, especially when Cornelius took Rebecca with him. Another engaging read, Carol, I really enjoyed reading it.
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Cornelius really will stop at nothing to get what he wants. I loved the sinister atmosphere in this piece, especially when Cornelius took Rebecca with him. Another engaging read, Carol, I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wrote a review for this chapter last night in bed on my phone, but on checking on my laptop, it looks as if it didn't go. I had to read it and have now reread it. I love the ghosts coming to help each other, and to help members of their own family.
Now Eleanor has rescued Althea, and Rebecca has escaped for now, but where is she? She ran off into the forest and that was the last we saw of her. Hopefully she's somewhere safe. Now they need to concentrate on finding Travis which will take the power out of Cornelius ghostly hands!
Garth should be used to all the ghosts coming into to help by now. Antonio has been called by Miriam, who needs help herself, being trapped in the mirrow. But she's worried about Rebecca. What a brilliant story, Carol, each one of these books get better and better. Now off to the next one. I really should keep all my six's for you! :))Love you lots, Sandra xxxx
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I wrote a review for this chapter last night in bed on my phone, but on checking on my laptop, it looks as if it didn't go. I had to read it and have now reread it. I love the ghosts coming to help each other, and to help members of their own family.
Now Eleanor has rescued Althea, and Rebecca has escaped for now, but where is she? She ran off into the forest and that was the last we saw of her. Hopefully she's somewhere safe. Now they need to concentrate on finding Travis which will take the power out of Cornelius ghostly hands!
Garth should be used to all the ghosts coming into to help by now. Antonio has been called by Miriam, who needs help herself, being trapped in the mirrow. But she's worried about Rebecca. What a brilliant story, Carol, each one of these books get better and better. Now off to the next one. I really should keep all my six's for you! :))Love you lots, Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
Comment from Wendy G
I am glad Althea is at least safe, but Rebecca is not, so I hope she is found before that horrid Cornelius finds her. Another action and drama packed chapter. Well done on holding it all together.
Wendy
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I am glad Althea is at least safe, but Rebecca is not, so I hope she is found before that horrid Cornelius finds her. Another action and drama packed chapter. Well done on holding it all together.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
