Fantasyland
Inspired by the imagination4 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I love this colorful presentation and so will children. It reminds we of Willie Wonka. You use good colorful words and imagery. One suggestion as a teacher in past decades. You should also create a less colorful one for kids that are distracted when reading. Maybe have those kids read first, then color it. Just an idea. I enjoyed reading this.
A typo note:
fairy's (fairies)
Best wishes,
Alex
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I love this colorful presentation and so will children. It reminds we of Willie Wonka. You use good colorful words and imagery. One suggestion as a teacher in past decades. You should also create a less colorful one for kids that are distracted when reading. Maybe have those kids read first, then color it. Just an idea. I enjoyed reading this.
A typo note:
fairy's (fairies)
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, okay this is written and styled very well, and I can see children enjoying it. But... I don't think it will work for this contest for two reasons.
1) The setting is one of Prose not Poetry. The poets on FanStory will not like that.
2) I like the style but... though written for children, this will be judge by older eyes (mostly elderly) and they may not be able to easily read this, whereas a young person or child could.
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Hmm, okay this is written and styled very well, and I can see children enjoying it. But... I don't think it will work for this contest for two reasons.
1) The setting is one of Prose not Poetry. The poets on FanStory will not like that.
2) I like the style but... though written for children, this will be judge by older eyes (mostly elderly) and they may not be able to easily read this, whereas a young person or child could.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is so creative. I like how you used the colors of the tex. I absolutely loved the red lollipop trees, chocolate waterfalls, and an octopus wearing socks - so imaginative and fun! You swept me right into Fantasyland, making it feel like a magical place I'd want to explore. The secret twist at the end was perfect - it made me smile. Your poem was a joy to read!
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Your poem is so creative. I like how you used the colors of the tex. I absolutely loved the red lollipop trees, chocolate waterfalls, and an octopus wearing socks - so imaginative and fun! You swept me right into Fantasyland, making it feel like a magical place I'd want to explore. The secret twist at the end was perfect - it made me smile. Your poem was a joy to read!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2025
Comment from mermaids
Your words take the reader to another place. Of course, I like the mention of mermaids. I also like the octopus wearing socks, a cute image. Your rhyming of words is smooth and I am sure children would enjoy reading your poem out loud.
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Your words take the reader to another place. Of course, I like the mention of mermaids. I also like the octopus wearing socks, a cute image. Your rhyming of words is smooth and I am sure children would enjoy reading your poem out loud.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2025
