Sensual
A friendship develops into more3 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I suspect somewhere you had something on your mind that you expressed salaciously. Did you like the challenge on hand? I thought it interesting, yes? I wish you the best in the contest. Now what will someone think of next?
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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I suspect somewhere you had something on your mind that you expressed salaciously. Did you like the challenge on hand? I thought it interesting, yes? I wish you the best in the contest. Now what will someone think of next?
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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It's funny because I am not a writer in general as far as any background knowledge, so these prompts that get put out here are challenging.. so I thought why not? so I try my best at them. I don't like sonnets because of the iambic pentameter.
I also learned something new today And had to look up the word salaciously. So thank you for that first thing in the morning.
Thank you for taking the time to review and the well wishes.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Hi Lana
Your poem is written beautifully for the complexity of the romantic sentiments which are also apparent in friendship of kind. The cohesion of each line and section is also very good and they do fit well with the title. The metaphor "slumber slows my rabbit trails," and the design of the emotions; from clandestine pining to feeling exposed, is excellent. The poem is balanced between vulnerability and desire, and it ends thrillingly, identifying the addictive qualities of love. It is a stunningly well written piece that will speak to anyone who has had to wade through the complexities of love
Most humans will connect with your words. Best of luck - the voting booth will soon open!
Bless you
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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Hi Lana
Your poem is written beautifully for the complexity of the romantic sentiments which are also apparent in friendship of kind. The cohesion of each line and section is also very good and they do fit well with the title. The metaphor "slumber slows my rabbit trails," and the design of the emotions; from clandestine pining to feeling exposed, is excellent. The poem is balanced between vulnerability and desire, and it ends thrillingly, identifying the addictive qualities of love. It is a stunningly well written piece that will speak to anyone who has had to wade through the complexities of love
Most humans will connect with your words. Best of luck - the voting booth will soon open!
Bless you
X
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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I just want to know how you know it's me when it's supposed to be anonymous? Anyway, thank you so much for this great review. It sure takes time to think about how to put these different challenges together.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Once the line has been crossed and friendships become more intimate, there is no turning back. You captured the moment when that happens here Lana and everyone is a witness to the close union. I enjoyed your fine poem for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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Once the line has been crossed and friendships become more intimate, there is no turning back. You captured the moment when that happens here Lana and everyone is a witness to the close union. I enjoyed your fine poem for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Dolly, and I'm just wondering how you know it is me? Cause it's supposed to be a blind contest. Did I accidentally put my name on there lol?
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I think I was messaged to say you had posted something Lana x x x
