Veil of Secrets
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Comment from Wy Jung
"Trust is irrelevant, Mr. Doyle," Zhang said smoothly, rising from his chair. "Loyalty is what matters."
Such a great bad-guy line. ..and on to chapter 12 I go.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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"Trust is irrelevant, Mr. Doyle," Zhang said smoothly, rising from his chair. "Loyalty is what matters."
Such a great bad-guy line. ..and on to chapter 12 I go.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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I love to write the bad guy...and then find out he isn't as smart as he thinks he is.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I tell you what, there is a huge gap between the good guy, ghosts and people, the wicked ones are super wicked, and the good ones still have problems, flanked by the super bad, who still plot long after they're dead, you'd think they'd want to rest, well done Carol, blessings Roy
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I tell you what, there is a huge gap between the good guy, ghosts and people, the wicked ones are super wicked, and the good ones still have problems, flanked by the super bad, who still plot long after they're dead, you'd think they'd want to rest, well done Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, you write this so very well. Although I've fallen behind I can still just about keep up on the story. The animosity running through this chapter is so very obvious. Now onto what's next. Lots of love, Ulla xxx
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Hi Carol, you write this so very well. Although I've fallen behind I can still just about keep up on the story. The animosity running through this chapter is so very obvious. Now onto what's next. Lots of love, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm sorry I'm behind, my friend. I can only read a few a day, and write a little. My eyes are giving me a headache all the time.
Now we know what Doyle was taken out of prison for, but he's not too happy about it. And Althea, poor woman, she's right in the thick of it, only because she wants to save her son. I'm sure once this is over, Garth and co., will help her. Now I'm off to the next chapter! Another exciting chapter, my friend!! What a mix, children's stories and murder and mystery, with some spookiness added! LOL Love and hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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I'm sorry I'm behind, my friend. I can only read a few a day, and write a little. My eyes are giving me a headache all the time.
Now we know what Doyle was taken out of prison for, but he's not too happy about it. And Althea, poor woman, she's right in the thick of it, only because she wants to save her son. I'm sure once this is over, Garth and co., will help her. Now I'm off to the next chapter! Another exciting chapter, my friend!! What a mix, children's stories and murder and mystery, with some spookiness added! LOL Love and hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
Comment from Jacob1395
I could feel the animosity between some of the character's here really well in your writing, Carol, and you did a brilliant job with this. This is another exciting chapter and I really enjoyed reading it. Looking forward to reading it.
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I could feel the animosity between some of the character's here really well in your writing, Carol, and you did a brilliant job with this. This is another exciting chapter and I really enjoyed reading it. Looking forward to reading it.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2025
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The plot gets a little more difficult to understand. Grayson wants the entire Vinyard and will do anything to get it, possibly killing or using Althea. Zhang Wei has intercepted Doyle and Rossi in their escape from prison. I am not sure what he wants from them or with the Vinyard, but he would kill them if they don't do as he asks. Could be I missed the reason, or it isn't clearly enough explained.
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The plot gets a little more difficult to understand. Grayson wants the entire Vinyard and will do anything to get it, possibly killing or using Althea. Zhang Wei has intercepted Doyle and Rossi in their escape from prison. I am not sure what he wants from them or with the Vinyard, but he would kill them if they don't do as he asks. Could be I missed the reason, or it isn't clearly enough explained.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Zhang Wei doesn't play around and Doyle's in trouble. I started reading and came across numerous words ending with 'ing' and found some dialogue that wasn't punctuated right. I ran a check on words ending with 'ing' and found about 90. Slightly better than before.
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Zhang Wei doesn't play around and Doyle's in trouble. I started reading and came across numerous words ending with 'ing' and found some dialogue that wasn't punctuated right. I ran a check on words ending with 'ing' and found about 90. Slightly better than before.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
Comment from Wendy G
Wow, this is certainly complex, with baddies against baddies as well. Doyle is between a rock and a hard place. I can't actually imagine what they are all after regarding the vineyard. Althea too is in a dire predicament!!
Wendy
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Wow, this is certainly complex, with baddies against baddies as well. Doyle is between a rock and a hard place. I can't actually imagine what they are all after regarding the vineyard. Althea too is in a dire predicament!!
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
I am really going to have to start making a spreadsheet, Carol.
Is there any spider in your family genetics, because you weave a very tangled web?
This story is tense and so gripping.
I love it.
Tim x
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I am really going to have to start making a spreadsheet, Carol.
Is there any spider in your family genetics, because you weave a very tangled web?
This story is tense and so gripping.
I love it.
Tim x
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
Comment from karenina
If your character list gets any longer it'll be a novel itself! Holy lotsa people to keep track of!
Hmmm.
Doyle likes to have the upper hand and things are pretty stormy for him right now.
What the Devil Dog is in those tunnels
under the vineyard?
Oh. I know.... I have to keep reading!
:)
Karenina
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If your character list gets any longer it'll be a novel itself! Holy lotsa people to keep track of!
Hmmm.
Doyle likes to have the upper hand and things are pretty stormy for him right now.
What the Devil Dog is in those tunnels
under the vineyard?
Oh. I know.... I have to keep reading!
:)
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
