Firework Display
Who does not like a display of fireworks10 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Although your poem is very nice, it does not seem to follow the requirements for the syllables of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 for a Tyburn poem. But thank you for sharing.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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Although your poem is very nice, it does not seem to follow the requirements for the syllables of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 for a Tyburn poem. But thank you for sharing.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2025
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Hi Wendy
Thank you for your honest review of my Tyburn. The incorrect syllable count is due to my inexperience and lack of attention to detail. We live and learn.
Take care, and bless you
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Yes, I have done that sort of thing before. I still enjoyed your work.
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Bless you
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, just love fireworks!! ;) However, your first four lines are not the required 2 syllables each and your final two lines are not the required nine... A great choice of topic and presentation! ;)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Oh, just love fireworks!! ;) However, your first four lines are not the required 2 syllables each and your final two lines are not the required nine... A great choice of topic and presentation! ;)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your valuable comments. Got this completely wrong lucky to get 3 stars. You live and learn
Kind regards
Comment from Terry Reilly
Really sorry. Nice poem, but your syllable count is wrong in five out of six lines. Should have been picked up by the CRC and you should have been given time and opportunity to revise it. You've been let down by our lords and masters.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Really sorry. Nice poem, but your syllable count is wrong in five out of six lines. Should have been picked up by the CRC and you should have been given time and opportunity to revise it. You've been let down by our lords and masters.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your constructive and helpful comments. The CRC did allow me to revise, you should have seen the first one! You live and learn.
Kind regards and stay well
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is an excellent Tyburn poem. It looks like you have followed the rules of the contest. I like how you have incorporated all your words together.
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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This is an excellent Tyburn poem. It looks like you have followed the rules of the contest. I like how you have incorporated all your words together.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Hi Cecilia
Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Bless you and take care.
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You're welcome
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Tyburn poetry writing prompt. I liked the descriptive words you've chosen and the way you put them into final sentences, Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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An excellent entry for the Tyburn poetry writing prompt. I liked the descriptive words you've chosen and the way you put them into final sentences, Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Bless you and take care.
Comment from Regina Elliott
Outstanding contest entry,
dear poet. We had neighborhood fireworks in my
area on New Year's Eve. Your
poem captured the excitement of their dazzling
display. Have a good January
evening. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Outstanding contest entry,
dear poet. We had neighborhood fireworks in my
area on New Year's Eve. Your
poem captured the excitement of their dazzling
display. Have a good January
evening. Blessings ~
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Hi Regina
Thank you for your lovely review. I recently returned from Abu Dhabi, where I spent Christmas and the New Year. On New Year’s Eve, the fireworks display lasted 45 minutes!!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I love how your poem brings excitement to with words like "Vibrant," "Flashing," and "Sparkling." The way you've built up this scene with "mesmerising sparkling fiery glow" is wonderful. I could feel the intensity of the moment. Your poem really captures the magic of something dazzling. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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I love how your poem brings excitement to with words like "Vibrant," "Flashing," and "Sparkling." The way you've built up this scene with "mesmerising sparkling fiery glow" is wonderful. I could feel the intensity of the moment. Your poem really captures the magic of something dazzling. Keep it up!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Hi Michael
Thank you for your delightful review.
Kind regards
Comment from tempeste
Ciao ! The topic is still alive in our memory.
I personally don't like fireworks , they are dangerous and noisy and many pets left out side , poor souls, run away in fright.
PS: the 4 descriptive words are supposed to rhyme.
Vibrant and flashing don't etc
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Ciao ! The topic is still alive in our memory.
I personally don't like fireworks , they are dangerous and noisy and many pets left out side , poor souls, run away in fright.
PS: the 4 descriptive words are supposed to rhyme.
Vibrant and flashing don't etc
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Hi
Many thanks for your thoughtful review. This is my first attempt at a Tyburn poem, and my lack of knowledge is evident.
I thank you for pointing this out. We live and learn!
Kind regards
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The committee usually gives you time to edit. Other participants , I noticed, need to edit too.
It took me several times to get it right 😐 ( and I still have slips up) 😕
Best of luck ! 🍀
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent tyburn, I don't think I've seen one for years, and I've seen two in a very close proximity of one another, a beautifully written post my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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This is an excellent tyburn, I don't think I've seen one for years, and I've seen two in a very close proximity of one another, a beautifully written post my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Hi Roy
Many thanks for your lovely review. This is my first attempt at a Tyburn.
Bless you
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Well done
Comment from Bill Schott
This tyburn, Fireworks Display, has the proper formatting and brings the thrill of watching the light and sound display back to us as we push into the new year.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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This tyburn, Fireworks Display, has the proper formatting and brings the thrill of watching the light and sound display back to us as we push into the new year.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Hi Bill
Thank you for your kind review. This is my first Tyburn poem.
Bless you and take care.
