Baltazar
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story is such a fun ride! The dialogue is sharp. So funny. The back and forth between the characters is hilarious. And the twist of the "evil twin" adds a great punch It's unique and keeps me hooked from start to finish. Great job!
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Your story is such a fun ride! The dialogue is sharp. So funny. The back and forth between the characters is hilarious. And the twist of the "evil twin" adds a great punch It's unique and keeps me hooked from start to finish. Great job!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
Many of the contests encourage creative approaches. This dialogue only story is certainly creative and interesting. Your story proves that mimicking someone else, rather than being true to yourself, doesn't always get favorable results. I enjoyed your story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Many of the contests encourage creative approaches. This dialogue only story is certainly creative and interesting. Your story proves that mimicking someone else, rather than being true to yourself, doesn't always get favorable results. I enjoyed your story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Wow, I like your interpretation it's very original.WOW
Comment from Bill Schott
This dialogue-only story, Baltazar, certainly holds nothing back on painting the titular character as a torture-loving being with lots of experience.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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This dialogue-only story, Baltazar, certainly holds nothing back on painting the titular character as a torture-loving being with lots of experience.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my short entry.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good contest entry. Quite different.
my soul; I can lose them. Shooo, boy. Fly away; - Don't you mean can't lose them?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Good contest entry. Quite different.
my soul; I can lose them. Shooo, boy. Fly away; - Don't you mean can't lose them?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Wayne for the corrections:)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, he walked into that trap nicely, didn't he? Now he can't get out. I love the twist at the end. A mythical story with an ending that is in tune with today. Well done, Iza, and good luck in the contest. : )) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Oh dear, he walked into that trap nicely, didn't he? Now he can't get out. I love the twist at the end. A mythical story with an ending that is in tune with today. Well done, Iza, and good luck in the contest. : )) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Ms. Sandra, sometimes we do stupid things to ourselves, and then blame fate.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Everything is not always fun and games, even if it starts out that way. LOL. I always like these dialogue only contests. I don't do contests anymore, but I did do one of these years ago. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Everything is not always fun and games, even if it starts out that way. LOL. I always like these dialogue only contests. I don't do contests anymore, but I did do one of these years ago. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Hi Ric, I must confess I am such a bore when it comes to games, as my repertoire is slim shaddy:) as in I don;t play games
Comment from Begin Again
What a twist we have on this myth, Iza. You have a fine entry for the contest and I hope you do well. I've enjoyed all your posts lately. Keep up the good work!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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What a twist we have on this myth, Iza. You have a fine entry for the contest and I hope you do well. I've enjoyed all your posts lately. Keep up the good work!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Carol, your encouragements mean the world to me.
Comment from DonandVicki
A Greek myth that has a modern twist. The dialogue was smooth and believable. A very strong entry for the dialogue only contest. I wish you all the luck.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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A Greek myth that has a modern twist. The dialogue was smooth and believable. A very strong entry for the dialogue only contest. I wish you all the luck.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much for the good wishes and the beautiful review.
Comment from Jessica Borras
Hi there! This was a very interesting dialogue, and you were able to tell a story with just a single conversation, which is awesome.
There were a couple of spots where (I think) there were some typos, or maybe I'm just missing what you were trying to say... And they made me stop, and have to read through it a few times. For example, "And what the heck wanted to prove loser!" and "I am stincking badly!"
But at the same time, I absolutely loved this bit: "Well, you got your results, freak! Say hello to Mister Vulture. Hey boy, fly over here; I have some fresh liver for you... kosher, and if you do a good job, you can have his eyes too!" Hi dark, but humorous.
So despite a few typos, I very much enjoyed reading your story.
Happy writing!
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Hi there! This was a very interesting dialogue, and you were able to tell a story with just a single conversation, which is awesome.
There were a couple of spots where (I think) there were some typos, or maybe I'm just missing what you were trying to say... And they made me stop, and have to read through it a few times. For example, "And what the heck wanted to prove loser!" and "I am stincking badly!"
But at the same time, I absolutely loved this bit: "Well, you got your results, freak! Say hello to Mister Vulture. Hey boy, fly over here; I have some fresh liver for you... kosher, and if you do a good job, you can have his eyes too!" Hi dark, but humorous.
So despite a few typos, I very much enjoyed reading your story.
Happy writing!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Hi Jessica, so sorry for my delay, and thank you so much for your suggestions I really appreciate it.
Comment from estory
Once again you create a modern twist on an ancient fable, and the modern dialogue is fun to read. The theme here is a little vague, the writing abstract in some ways; I don't really get what this person is sacrificing herself for. Is it a personal ideology of some kind? estory
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Once again you create a modern twist on an ancient fable, and the modern dialogue is fun to read. The theme here is a little vague, the writing abstract in some ways; I don't really get what this person is sacrificing herself for. Is it a personal ideology of some kind? estory
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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It's an experiment trying to be Prometeus and also Houdini:)
