My Last Arrest . . . I Hope
The more things change the more they stay the same14 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
What a story! I can see why you retired from thhat kind of work. Others who should have been been responsible totally avoiding it, leaving you to face danger alone - and then that email! Yes, I can understand your being jaded. Well written.
Wendy
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What a story! I can see why you retired from thhat kind of work. Others who should have been been responsible totally avoiding it, leaving you to face danger alone - and then that email! Yes, I can understand your being jaded. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I never once thought the swearing was inappropriate. In fact, if anything, it was considerably less than I would have expected given the seriousness of the situation and the ineptitude and inertia of the security guard. Talk about thinking on your feet with no back-up, this was an impressive intervention on your part that potentially saved lives. Your description of his pajama trousers will, undoubtedly, stay with me for a while, sadly:( I think this is an incredibly compelling piece that brings together all your previous experience into this one event which is conveyed in powerfully vivid detail. No grammatical errors noted and only one punctuation:
same type of threats and(,) while Kalamazoo is a rough area,
A virtual six from me. Good luck, Doug! Debbie
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I never once thought the swearing was inappropriate. In fact, if anything, it was considerably less than I would have expected given the seriousness of the situation and the ineptitude and inertia of the security guard. Talk about thinking on your feet with no back-up, this was an impressive intervention on your part that potentially saved lives. Your description of his pajama trousers will, undoubtedly, stay with me for a while, sadly:( I think this is an incredibly compelling piece that brings together all your previous experience into this one event which is conveyed in powerfully vivid detail. No grammatical errors noted and only one punctuation:
same type of threats and(,) while Kalamazoo is a rough area,
A virtual six from me. Good luck, Doug! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Terry Broxson
Douglas, what a hoot! This needs to be published somewhere like Readers Digest, life in America. Jay Squires, in his bio, refers to himself as an unflushable floater. That sounds like something you might use as well. Great stuff! Terry.
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Douglas, what a hoot! This needs to be published somewhere like Readers Digest, life in America. Jay Squires, in his bio, refers to himself as an unflushable floater. That sounds like something you might use as well. Great stuff! Terry.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Begin Again
When I was married to my children's dad, I was introduced to that swear tornado almost every day time and time again. It was way more than this girl could take and now days my daughter has picked it up....You were brave and if that's what it took, more power to you. But when it becomes an everyday way of talking, not so much. Great job, Doug! Been sick for three days and trying to force myself to stay awake till meds... your story helped.
Smiles, Carol
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When I was married to my children's dad, I was introduced to that swear tornado almost every day time and time again. It was way more than this girl could take and now days my daughter has picked it up....You were brave and if that's what it took, more power to you. But when it becomes an everyday way of talking, not so much. Great job, Doug! Been sick for three days and trying to force myself to stay awake till meds... your story helped.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from jmdg1954
Damned if you do and damned if you don't!
My guess would be that next time you may end up doing the same type thing when the time was right.
Great contest entry!ll
Cheers, Doug
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Damned if you do and damned if you don't!
My guess would be that next time you may end up doing the same type thing when the time was right.
Great contest entry!ll
Cheers, Doug
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thanks, John.
We do what we do.
Appreciate you
D
Comment from Sally Law
Dear D,
I'm just glad you're okay. Geez, you out cuss my five brothers. That's quite a feat. Especially Mike. He got tsaved the day he passed away. Man, he was my hardest convert. I loved him so. He didn't have time to call and and tell me of his conversion so he had his son call. I thought that was really sweet. I had just spoken to him the week before and he told me --no--again. He was an an atheist. I don't know what softened him. Maybe it was me. I hope so.
Thank you for what you do to make the world a better place. I'm sorry there's so many iin management that don't appreciate it. I do. Great story with lots of real details. I'm sure it will score a ribbon. Fingers crossed!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the contest.
Sal :)) xo
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Dear D,
I'm just glad you're okay. Geez, you out cuss my five brothers. That's quite a feat. Especially Mike. He got tsaved the day he passed away. Man, he was my hardest convert. I loved him so. He didn't have time to call and and tell me of his conversion so he had his son call. I thought that was really sweet. I had just spoken to him the week before and he told me --no--again. He was an an atheist. I don't know what softened him. Maybe it was me. I hope so.
Thank you for what you do to make the world a better place. I'm sorry there's so many iin management that don't appreciate it. I do. Great story with lots of real details. I'm sure it will score a ribbon. Fingers crossed!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the contest.
Sal :)) xo
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from royowen
I'm not amazed that it would get one down in the long run, I know o could never do it, it has screwed up many a well meaning young man or woman, reality is a strange beast, but God in my life has straightened a lot of buckled heartware, but every now and then I need a do over, how does God handle it, He's incorruptible I guess, I think writing straightens our skeewifness, well done Douglas, blessings Roy
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I'm not amazed that it would get one down in the long run, I know o could never do it, it has screwed up many a well meaning young man or woman, reality is a strange beast, but God in my life has straightened a lot of buckled heartware, but every now and then I need a do over, how does God handle it, He's incorruptible I guess, I think writing straightens our skeewifness, well done Douglas, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My husband worked for CID in the Army and yes, their language needed some attention, as did their jokes. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. It's a strong entry. Good luck with the contest.
"Get your guys back, before they get hit by that bucket, "I ordered (bucket," I()
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My husband worked for CID in the Army and yes, their language needed some attention, as did their jokes. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. It's a strong entry. Good luck with the contest.
"Get your guys back, before they get hit by that bucket, "I ordered (bucket," I()
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Gayla putnam
I laughed and cringed. I loved your descriptive language; many of your lines are perfect. I particularly loved the "switched toilet bowls." Your character descriptions are dead on, and, of course, the bureaucratic nonsense one endures. A good writer makes the reader feel right with you in the situation. You did an excellent job of holding my interest. gayla
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I laughed and cringed. I loved your descriptive language; many of your lines are perfect. I particularly loved the "switched toilet bowls." Your character descriptions are dead on, and, of course, the bureaucratic nonsense one endures. A good writer makes the reader feel right with you in the situation. You did an excellent job of holding my interest. gayla
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Julie Helms
Wow, what a story! You should do a whole collection of them showing what your days were like in a job the rest of us really have no clue about.
You bravely handled that situation, and the contrast to numbnuts is amazing.
One tiny typo:
"Get your guys back, before they get hit by that bucket, "I ordered the man, who I assumed must be Foreman Roger.
(The second set of quote marks attached itself to the wrong word)
I greatly enjoyed your story. And the 'language' does give the perfect picture to how you were feeling and the crap you had to deal with.
Julie
:-)
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Wow, what a story! You should do a whole collection of them showing what your days were like in a job the rest of us really have no clue about.
You bravely handled that situation, and the contrast to numbnuts is amazing.
One tiny typo:
"Get your guys back, before they get hit by that bucket, "I ordered the man, who I assumed must be Foreman Roger.
(The second set of quote marks attached itself to the wrong word)
I greatly enjoyed your story. And the 'language' does give the perfect picture to how you were feeling and the crap you had to deal with.
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
