Mirroring Mother Nature
Architectural complements to The Real Thing15 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a difficult format! I like how you followed the instructions though--particularly your third phrase. I think you captured the essence of your artwork. When I think of Japanese poetry, I think of simplicity. Like you, in that image, I see peaks--the mountains and those beautiful roofs. And, the valley is made up of walls of rocks. Synchronicity indeed.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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What a difficult format! I like how you followed the instructions though--particularly your third phrase. I think you captured the essence of your artwork. When I think of Japanese poetry, I think of simplicity. Like you, in that image, I see peaks--the mountains and those beautiful roofs. And, the valley is made up of walls of rocks. Synchronicity indeed.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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You're right! The Japanese form of pretty much everything is about simplicity! Less is more, and that's a hard concept for me! Thanks for this encouraging review. xoxox
Comment from Sugarray77
Great a job on crafting a superb Japanese form, Rachelle. I can't spell it much less pronounce it... LOL. I like your use of the word 'synchronicity'. Now isn't that a stupendous word???? I can only try to say it in a slow manner... similar to trying to pour cold syrup. Ha! Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Great a job on crafting a superb Japanese form, Rachelle. I can't spell it much less pronounce it... LOL. I like your use of the word 'synchronicity'. Now isn't that a stupendous word???? I can only try to say it in a slow manner... similar to trying to pour cold syrup. Ha! Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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And it appeals to just-so girls like me. All the duckies in a row = happiness. Xo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful contribution taking the stark artistic appeal of the pic and painting it with gentle emotions... well done, Red! ;) Thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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A beautiful contribution taking the stark artistic appeal of the pic and painting it with gentle emotions... well done, Red! ;) Thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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I absolutely love this Japanese Poetry Club. It's definitely "out of my comfort zone," but I love the challenges Gypsy issues forth each week with her assignments. Thank you for your kind words, especially since you are a masterful poet. It means a lot. xoxox
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Well, this is me with rosy cheeks saying a humble thank you... Have a wonderful Wednesday, Red!! ;) ;)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Beautiful qiyan jueju poem for the japanese poetry club. Thank you for participating. Excellent composition and presentation. The imagery and zen flavor is calming.
Well done
Gypsy
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Beautiful qiyan jueju poem for the japanese poetry club. Thank you for participating. Excellent composition and presentation. The imagery and zen flavor is calming.
Well done
Gypsy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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That's the biggest takeaway I've enjoyed from your teachings as well as the examples you bestow every day in your works, Gypsy: Japanese poetry is about zen and calming. For a high-octane girl like me, that is an elusive concept...but I continue to try!! Thank you for being patient with me. xoxo
Comment from Carol Clark2
Thanks for the explanation of this form, which is new to me. I like the way you constructed the four phrases of your poem. I love the final line! I see in the picture how the structure of the pagoda follows the landscape. Thanks for teaching me some new things. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thanks for the explanation of this form, which is new to me. I like the way you constructed the four phrases of your poem. I love the final line! I see in the picture how the structure of the pagoda follows the landscape. Thanks for teaching me some new things. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Yes, I joined Gypsy's Japanese Poetry Club this past summer, and I've loved learning all these new forms! Thank you for this encouraging, affirming review. I appreciate it very much! xoxox
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I've thought about joining a different club, but I don't have the time to work on more writing. I do enjoy reading everyone's examples, though.
Comment from Michele Harber
Hi, Rachelle. Based on the rules listed, you seem to have done this very well. Your first two lines beautifully set up the picture, your next line breaks it into its synchronistic parts, and your fourth line sums it up by identifying what you describe as synchronicity. Excellent job, with lovely imagery.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi, Rachelle. Based on the rules listed, you seem to have done this very well. Your first two lines beautifully set up the picture, your next line breaks it into its synchronistic parts, and your fourth line sums it up by identifying what you describe as synchronicity. Excellent job, with lovely imagery.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thanks! I honestly do love this Japanese Poetry Club and really look forward to receiving the Saturday afternoon assignments from Gypsy every week. I appreciate your validation and encouragement, too! xoxo
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Anytime. You know I'm much more of a rhyming poet myself, so I've been entering into as many rhyming poem contests as I can. I'm even rhyming in some contests that don't require it. Writing rhyming poetry gives me the same satisfaction you get from the Japanese poetry. I strongly suspect that, were I to attempt to write Japanese poetry, I'd wind up wasting my time trying to find ways to rhyme it!
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I bet I know what Yiddish word rhymes, in your mind, with sushi!! xoxoxo
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Let me sit down and think about it.
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Hahahahahaha.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I've got tyo hand it to you, Rachelle, I am loving your poetry. You truly have a gift. This one took me to a fantasitical place that left me breathless. Beautifully written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I've got tyo hand it to you, Rachelle, I am loving your poetry. You truly have a gift. This one took me to a fantasitical place that left me breathless. Beautifully written. Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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What a really encouraging review. Thank you very much for this, Gretchen. I appreciate your kind words. Xo
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I do love poetry. Not the fancy stuff where I'm left scratching my head, but things that make me escape into another world. I'm in awe of poets. I just can't write a poem for shit. Lol
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Maybe if you write one about shit, that could be your springboard to releasing that poetic muse that lies deep within you?...
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Rachelle!
I so appreciate Japanese poetry, and this QIYAN JUEJU in particular.
You have captured the essence of the scene and format.
My mother was a master floral designer, and she was very fond of Japanese floral design. It, too, created a distinct picture for the viewer.
Much enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Good morning, Rachelle!
I so appreciate Japanese poetry, and this QIYAN JUEJU in particular.
You have captured the essence of the scene and format.
My mother was a master floral designer, and she was very fond of Japanese floral design. It, too, created a distinct picture for the viewer.
Much enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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You're right about that! Everything I've learned in this class so far seems to be about creating and expanding upon tableau. Thank you for this lovely review. Xo
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
In the instructions for each phrase, and in the phrases of your poem, it's as though you are painting a picture - each phrase a different layer of paint that adds to the whole scene.
This seems a tough assignment, but you were, as always, up for the task.
Later, sista:-)
xo
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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In the instructions for each phrase, and in the phrases of your poem, it's as though you are painting a picture - each phrase a different layer of paint that adds to the whole scene.
This seems a tough assignment, but you were, as always, up for the task.
Later, sista:-)
xo
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I love the challenge of this club every week. Dolly does such a good job creating new and exciting challenges.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your descriptive words Rachelle and your presentation is full of natures gems here. I loved the form and the rich scenes in this short poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I enjoyed your descriptive words Rachelle and your presentation is full of natures gems here. I loved the form and the rich scenes in this short poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Dolly. It's a fun poetry club, and I really look forward to these assignments every Saturday night. xoxo
