Can You See The Real Me?
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "One of them is packing a gun!"A collection of ten Novella styled stories
2 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
It is difficult to read through your offering as it is loaded with 'gnome graffiti'.... pop back in there and read it yourself and you'll see it clearly laced throughout, quite heavy in some places... :-(
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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It is difficult to read through your offering as it is loaded with 'gnome graffiti'.... pop back in there and read it yourself and you'll see it clearly laced throughout, quite heavy in some places... :-(
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanks for the comments, but what is a Gnome Graffiti? I know the story is long. Its intended to be a Novella. Probably not suited for this crowd. One can only write so many short stories.
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Look back at it ... it's full of characters that don't belong
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I found your story completely engaging. There are some bad characters in there. You can probably edit them out. Your writing captures the weight of decisions that need to be made. I like how you show the practical wisdom of knowing when to move on. I especially liked how your integrity shone through, even in tough situations. This piece has so much depth and heart - I really enjoyed reading it!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I found your story completely engaging. There are some bad characters in there. You can probably edit them out. Your writing captures the weight of decisions that need to be made. I like how you show the practical wisdom of knowing when to move on. I especially liked how your integrity shone through, even in tough situations. This piece has so much depth and heart - I really enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanks, again, for your review and rating. You have reviewed quite a few of my stories, I would really like from you, how I could "edit out some of the bad guys"
