The Secret Room
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Comment from zanya
Yes and thereby hangs a tale for the reader to mull over - an interesting journey unfolds here for the historian, Eliza, with her love of 'dusty tomes and forgotten stories.'
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Yes and thereby hangs a tale for the reader to mull over - an interesting journey unfolds here for the historian, Eliza, with her love of 'dusty tomes and forgotten stories.'
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
Comment from Thesis
This is a well-written story with deep mystery a view into the faith of a librarian to follow her heart into the unknown to reveal the unknown. You show her quest for knowledge of the unknown. Showing the discovery of knowledge was done well.
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This is a well-written story with deep mystery a view into the faith of a librarian to follow her heart into the unknown to reveal the unknown. You show her quest for knowledge of the unknown. Showing the discovery of knowledge was done well.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really loved how your story pulled me in right from the start! The mysterious door and the glowing books made me feel like I was stepping into another world with Eliza. I liked how you built the tension with little details. It made everything feel magical. The line, "To know is to awaken; to awaken is to choose" was so powerful and left me wanting to know more about what comes next! Keep up the great work - I'm excited to see where you take this!
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I really loved how your story pulled me in right from the start! The mysterious door and the glowing books made me feel like I was stepping into another world with Eliza. I liked how you built the tension with little details. It made everything feel magical. The line, "To know is to awaken; to awaken is to choose" was so powerful and left me wanting to know more about what comes next! Keep up the great work - I'm excited to see where you take this!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from lancellot
This is very interesting. I like magical tone of reading and seeking knowledge from books, at a level that is almost irresistible. This should go over well with the site's members.
notes:
its weathered sign swaying in the breeze.
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its weathered sign swayed in the breeze. (to make the past tense consistent)
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This is very interesting. I like magical tone of reading and seeking knowledge from books, at a level that is almost irresistible. This should go over well with the site's members.
notes:
its weathered sign swaying in the breeze.
-suggest-
its weathered sign swayed in the breeze. (to make the past tense consistent)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This was an interesting and exciting story to read. You used colorful imagery and some suspense to keep the reader involved. I enjoyed reading this and the artwork and ending were thought provoking. Best wishes, Alex
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This was an interesting and exciting story to read. You used colorful imagery and some suspense to keep the reader involved. I enjoyed reading this and the artwork and ending were thought provoking. Best wishes, Alex
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
I love this, I do hope you make this chapter 1 of a novel as it deserves to be explored further.
Your descriptive narrative is excellent and I can almost taste the air of that ancient magical room.
Well done
Tim
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I love this, I do hope you make this chapter 1 of a novel as it deserves to be explored further.
Your descriptive narrative is excellent and I can almost taste the air of that ancient magical room.
Well done
Tim
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
