Fair Play For Caribou!
Reindeer have rights, too.3 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I can relate to this! Love your monorhyme, Cockney rhyming slang and the killer last line, complete with cross-eyed Rudolph. A winner in my book:) Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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I can relate to this! Love your monorhyme, Cockney rhyming slang and the killer last line, complete with cross-eyed Rudolph. A winner in my book:) Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Many thanks, Debbie.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your poem regarding Reindees on Strike" cleverly addresses the humorous and relatable theme of overworked reindeers specifically Rudolph. It combines wit and festive cheer to create an engaging narrative.
Unfolding the last line has 6 syllables, which deviates from the traditional 5-7-5 haiku structure. Adjusting this line to fit the structure could enhance the poem's form and flow, and in my view will stand a very good chance of winning.
One suggestion would be to replace the word placard (2 syllables) with board (2 syllables)
Take care.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Your poem regarding Reindees on Strike" cleverly addresses the humorous and relatable theme of overworked reindeers specifically Rudolph. It combines wit and festive cheer to create an engaging narrative.
Unfolding the last line has 6 syllables, which deviates from the traditional 5-7-5 haiku structure. Adjusting this line to fit the structure could enhance the poem's form and flow, and in my view will stand a very good chance of winning.
One suggestion would be to replace the word placard (2 syllables) with board (2 syllables)
Take care.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Well spotted. Many thanks.
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Take care. A winner in my view!!
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Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Fair Play for Caribou, has the proper formatting and seems to suggest that the reindeer want to renegotiate the contract that requires them to work on Christmas.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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This 5-7-5, Fair Play for Caribou, has the proper formatting and seems to suggest that the reindeer want to renegotiate the contract that requires them to work on Christmas.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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Cheers, Bill.
