Inch
a 5-7-510 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What an eye-catching visual and such a poignant and tragic verse to accompany it! I love the way you've focused on size and the child's diminished form. We should never look away, never ignore. Your last line is the killer, piercing our conscience. Great alliteration too. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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What an eye-catching visual and such a poignant and tragic verse to accompany it! I love the way you've focused on size and the child's diminished form. We should never look away, never ignore. Your last line is the killer, piercing our conscience. Great alliteration too. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Debbie
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a great poem, if not sad. Those three lines and the picture you chose are very powerful. It's sad there are starving kids in the world.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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This is a great poem, if not sad. Those three lines and the picture you chose are very powerful. It's sad there are starving kids in the world.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 20-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Cecilia
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You're welcome
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem
all together. I found the poem, sad, true and creative. I pondered on
those children who do not have enough to eat. The artwork is awesome!
Have a Wonderful Christmas! Blessings, Maria
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem
all together. I found the poem, sad, true and creative. I pondered on
those children who do not have enough to eat. The artwork is awesome!
Have a Wonderful Christmas! Blessings, Maria
Comment Written 20-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Maria.
Comment from tempeste
A Starving tummy is not that small , it's bloated like that of a pregnant woman.
In a continent so rich as Africa , there should be no children dying of famine.
But things won't change until America and Europe (last year at least 7 African countries finally told France to fuck off) are allowed to continue to exploit their resources.
Elon Musk gets from The Republic of Congo the cobalt needed for his EV batteries.
Child labour is high in those cobalt open mines.
Children as young as 4/5 are extracting the metal from tiny heaps for hours.
While children as young as 8/9 work with the adults shifting heavy bags from A to B.
Their lives don't matter to Elon Musk.
In the not too far future Africa finally will benefit from its own resources and super powers like America won't be profiteering anymore.
All this Christmas merriment tends to make us forgets those that are suffering, your poem reminds us of those less fortunate.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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A Starving tummy is not that small , it's bloated like that of a pregnant woman.
In a continent so rich as Africa , there should be no children dying of famine.
But things won't change until America and Europe (last year at least 7 African countries finally told France to fuck off) are allowed to continue to exploit their resources.
Elon Musk gets from The Republic of Congo the cobalt needed for his EV batteries.
Child labour is high in those cobalt open mines.
Children as young as 4/5 are extracting the metal from tiny heaps for hours.
While children as young as 8/9 work with the adults shifting heavy bags from A to B.
Their lives don't matter to Elon Musk.
In the not too far future Africa finally will benefit from its own resources and super powers like America won't be profiteering anymore.
All this Christmas merriment tends to make us forgets those that are suffering, your poem reminds us of those less fortunate.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2024
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Thanks, T.
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You have your first vote. 😐
Best of luck 🍀
Comment from artisart4u
Your 5-7-5 is a good one for Christmas, the season of giving.
Also, the person is, as we say, "inching along."
You have the right amount of syllables.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Your 5-7-5 is a good one for Christmas, the season of giving.
Also, the person is, as we say, "inching along."
You have the right amount of syllables.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thanks, aia4u
Comment from shad blunt
Meets all the counts. I find it amazing the points that we can get a crossed with so many words and a picture. Love the imagery, and you wrote a good haiku.
May we find the time to share a meal with those less fortunate this Holiday Season. Happy Holidays. Shadrach
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Meets all the counts. I find it amazing the points that we can get a crossed with so many words and a picture. Love the imagery, and you wrote a good haiku.
May we find the time to share a meal with those less fortunate this Holiday Season. Happy Holidays. Shadrach
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Shad
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an intriguing and thought provoking poem. It encourages a reader to engage. The image adds to the poem and works well with it. I like the use of simile too. Very good work! Best wishes! Alex
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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This is an intriguing and thought provoking poem. It encourages a reader to engage. The image adds to the poem and works well with it. I like the use of simile too. Very good work! Best wishes! Alex
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Alex
Comment from Lana Marie
You got me thinking about how small an inch really is! how many things are only an inch long? A stomach and an attention span need satisfaction right away. so your haiku makes a lot of sense. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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You got me thinking about how small an inch really is! how many things are only an inch long? A stomach and an attention span need satisfaction right away. so your haiku makes a lot of sense. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Lana
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We know there are starving children in the world and yet they continue to suffer. The Governments in these countries are too busy filling their purses, I enjoyed your clever 5-7-5, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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We know there are starving children in the world and yet they continue to suffer. The Governments in these countries are too busy filling their purses, I enjoyed your clever 5-7-5, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, it breaks one's heart to see the starving in this world, and we live in a world of plenty, if we could only share that abundance with others around us. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Oh yes, it breaks one's heart to see the starving in this world, and we live in a world of plenty, if we could only share that abundance with others around us. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Roy
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