The Time Machine
A senryu stack on the mirror theme2 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu stack, The Time Machine, has the proper formatting and reveals the message that a mirror reflects -- "Get a grip, Grandpa, and take care of yourself."
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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This senryu stack, The Time Machine, has the proper formatting and reveals the message that a mirror reflects -- "Get a grip, Grandpa, and take care of yourself."
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Bill.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This if a good mirror poem. It flows well from beginning to end. The only problem is the first line, "I stare (in) amaze." It just doesn't sound right. You need to rethink it. If you put (and) it would sound better and make it make more sense.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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This if a good mirror poem. It flows well from beginning to end. The only problem is the first line, "I stare (in) amaze." It just doesn't sound right. You need to rethink it. If you put (and) it would sound better and make it make more sense.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Cecilia.
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You're welcome