Woah this life of joy
Woah this life of joy5 total reviews
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your free-form poem beautifully encapsulates the duality of existence--the interplay between presence and absence, creation and search. The imagery of wandering through fields and hills juxtaposed with the internal journey of the mind adds a captivating depth to your verses. Your closing lines evoke a sense of mystery and introspection that lingers.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Your free-form poem beautifully encapsulates the duality of existence--the interplay between presence and absence, creation and search. The imagery of wandering through fields and hills juxtaposed with the internal journey of the mind adds a captivating depth to your verses. Your closing lines evoke a sense of mystery and introspection that lingers.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your review ! I love how you worded. Thank you for wondering with me through these words I wrote :)
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Take care and stay safe.
Comment from Bryce 1
This could be psychedelically induced it's that spiritually imbibed. Reminds me of the cycle of self discovery and the play that I create in my own mind that seduces me into searching for the truth that I myself create
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This could be psychedelically induced it's that spiritually imbibed. Reminds me of the cycle of self discovery and the play that I create in my own mind that seduces me into searching for the truth that I myself create
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
Comment from papa55mike
Life usually feels like we're marching in circles to find what we're looking for and then forget when we arrive. Welcome! This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Life usually feels like we're marching in circles to find what we're looking for and then forget when we arrive. Welcome! This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Life is short and we hope to make our mark and be remembered, but the truth is that we are quickly forgotten as our ashes lie in graveyards, forgotten. A poignant write and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x x x
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Life is short and we hope to make our mark and be remembered, but the truth is that we are quickly forgotten as our ashes lie in graveyards, forgotten. A poignant write and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
First and foremost, welcome to Fanstory I think you will like it here. There are a ton of talented authors and poets on here who will help you if you ask. The key to success is becoming a fan and hopefully they will fan you back. The more you have the bigger the reviews
The poem is great and it flows nicely.
I found one small error:
(Im) absent yet found physically here-(I'm) just need an apostrophe.
Cecilia
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First and foremost, welcome to Fanstory I think you will like it here. There are a ton of talented authors and poets on here who will help you if you ask. The key to success is becoming a fan and hopefully they will fan you back. The more you have the bigger the reviews
The poem is great and it flows nicely.
I found one small error:
(Im) absent yet found physically here-(I'm) just need an apostrophe.
Cecilia
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
