The Purifying Flame
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "The Mother of Gaps"Poems about the experience of healing.
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a good free verse poem and would probably sound very good read aloud. I like some phrases very much, such as:
this is the grief of the gaps:
Is it surprising I shrank and withered
like a neglected houseplant
greenery turned sallow and fragile?
and your first line, and your last three lines.
Since it seems like a very personal poem, I think it definitely accomplishes something in the way of describing a relationship. I think it is nearly a six-star poem but might benefit from a couple more sensory images that are more concrete. The houseplant simile was a great touch, though.
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This is a good free verse poem and would probably sound very good read aloud. I like some phrases very much, such as:
this is the grief of the gaps:
Is it surprising I shrank and withered
like a neglected houseplant
greenery turned sallow and fragile?
and your first line, and your last three lines.
Since it seems like a very personal poem, I think it definitely accomplishes something in the way of describing a relationship. I think it is nearly a six-star poem but might benefit from a couple more sensory images that are more concrete. The houseplant simile was a great touch, though.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
Comment from Ronny Guy
I love your creative poetic gift, and you have a great gift in scketching. Do you make scketches and sell them online? You should. AND you're a very beautiful woman.
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I love your creative poetic gift, and you have a great gift in scketching. Do you make scketches and sell them online? You should. AND you're a very beautiful woman.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
Comment from fiona brown
I found it long and dragging. It's okay to glance at and think about some of the words used and phased. Like wishes do not rewrite history part.
Overall good performance and keep it up
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I found it long and dragging. It's okay to glance at and think about some of the words used and phased. Like wishes do not rewrite history part.
Overall good performance and keep it up
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
