Tough Choice
A man*s gotta do***6 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ha ha! I didn't see that coming! Nice build-up when I felt sure this might be the answer to Freda's frustrations. Excellent punch-line! Well done and good luck in the contest! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Ha ha! I didn't see that coming! Nice build-up when I felt sure this might be the answer to Freda's frustrations. Excellent punch-line! Well done and good luck in the contest! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Debbie.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a surprise 80 word story. Poor Freda trying to spark her marriage and get some loving. It's too bad her husband tied her up and left. That's cruel. This story flows nicely from beginning to end.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This is a surprise 80 word story. Poor Freda trying to spark her marriage and get some loving. It's too bad her husband tied her up and left. That's cruel. This story flows nicely from beginning to end.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Cecilia.
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You're welcome
Comment from SimianSavant
Hilarious, author. Perfectly pasted with a killer punchline. This will probably get my vote in the contest, unless I enter it too. My only recommendations for you are formatting related:
1) get rid of the indent on the dialogue on the end,
2) larger text, mainly for the benefit of older readers with weak eyes, and
3) start your text below the image. You can do this under the advanced editing options at the bottom of the editor by setting the image size to small.
Best regards,
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Hilarious, author. Perfectly pasted with a killer punchline. This will probably get my vote in the contest, unless I enter it too. My only recommendations for you are formatting related:
1) get rid of the indent on the dialogue on the end,
2) larger text, mainly for the benefit of older readers with weak eyes, and
3) start your text below the image. You can do this under the advanced editing options at the bottom of the editor by setting the image size to small.
Best regards,
🦍
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Terrific, ss. Gratified!
Comment from RodG
I like the dark humor of this piece. Unfortunately, what we learn about Fred and Freda's relationship is all too commonplace today. A great ending which truly surprised me. Rod
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I like the dark humor of this piece. Unfortunately, what we learn about Fred and Freda's relationship is all too commonplace today. A great ending which truly surprised me. Rod
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Rod.
Comment from Zach Gallows
Very good job. You managed to scrunch a story into so few words. The ending definitely caught me by surprise and made me laugh. The only thing is the name's confused me, Fred and Freda. Otherwise good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Very good job. You managed to scrunch a story into so few words. The ending definitely caught me by surprise and made me laugh. The only thing is the name's confused me, Fred and Freda. Otherwise good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Zach.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
This short story is brilliantly witty and delightfully unexpected! The contrast between Fred's comfort in routine and Freda's desire for excitement is sharply drawn, leading to an amusingly ironic twist. Fred's literal interpretation of her request is a clever play on expectations.
Thank you for sharing this humorous piece!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This short story is brilliantly witty and delightfully unexpected! The contrast between Fred's comfort in routine and Freda's desire for excitement is sharply drawn, leading to an amusingly ironic twist. Fred's literal interpretation of her request is a clever play on expectations.
Thank you for sharing this humorous piece!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Cheers, Peter.