Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

You know I know little of poetry form i go by what I truly enjoy. I love this not only it is so familiar to me with someone who never listens but and I will say it---Men rarely listen to advice.
Mary

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. LoL, some men don't listen to us and regret it.

Gypsy hugs 😊

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

LOL Having raised boy and having been married for 47 years, it always amazed me how men ever live long enough to grow old. It seems they don't always engage brain. LOL Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy hugs

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

lol! love the S alliteration for the first line - and this was a smooth transition to the second line where he should've listened to his wise wife
great continuation of last chapter - cute icicles, too - perfect added touch

thank you for sharing!
shelley :)

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy hugs

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

yes, he should have listened, love the way you get a shot in for the wife here, another wonderful entry for the book of Rengas, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy hugs

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Marival, I have never heard of this
form...but knowing you my sweet friend...
it's perfect...

trust me...the fall he is making...HURTS...
I know it through experience...sigh...

I love your poem sweet girl...I like the form...
very well written...picture speaks for itself...
love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, Linda. How are you? I hope you're well.

Marival

reply by l.raven on 12-Dec-2024

your always so welcome sweet girl...
I am doing good...I hope you are as
well...
I'm at my daughters in Florida for the
holidays...2 weeks until Christmas...
and 2 more people to shop for...tis the season...love xxoo

Comment from RJ Heritage

Excellent

Very well illustrated Renga, I think we all fall at times, paying the price of not listening to the advice of those who are wiser than we are.Thanks for sharing. Hope you're having a great day.
RJ

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, 😊

Gypsy

reply by RJ Heritage on 11-Dec-2024

You're welcome
RJ

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I've been there and done it! His fall looks particularly painful too! Love your alliteration and wise message always to listen to the wife. A great Renga verse! Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, Debbie,😊

Gypsy

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

LOL!! Oh, but don't we all like to say 'should've listened to' in situations! ;) A smile for the day here, Gypsy, thanx for sharing your input to the RENGA! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, Yvette, 😊

Gypsy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great use of alliteration in your seven syllable lines. Yes, one should be extra cautious when the driveway is covered with ice! We know too many who got injured.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thank you, big sister. The book is so popular every time I try to write a stanza linked to the previous one somebody beats me to it. LoL

I am happy you like it.

Love,
marival