It's A Goring Buffalo
I can't believe I didn't know what the word meant.3 total reviews
Comment from Avery Daniel
This is a WILD story. You're so right; you literally were in a life or death situation. As far as writing, I felt the story was paced too fast. It seemed like it went straight to the point without much backstory. But it was a very cute story! Thank goodness you didn't actually cross the street! A bit of a suggestion to help the pacing-- and I may be being snobby, as it said this was for a contest and those often come with word limits-- but if I were you, I think it would be good to delve deeper into the emotions you felt with wanting a selfie with a buffalo. Overall, the story was really good, just made drastic jumps.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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This is a WILD story. You're so right; you literally were in a life or death situation. As far as writing, I felt the story was paced too fast. It seemed like it went straight to the point without much backstory. But it was a very cute story! Thank goodness you didn't actually cross the street! A bit of a suggestion to help the pacing-- and I may be being snobby, as it said this was for a contest and those often come with word limits-- but if I were you, I think it would be good to delve deeper into the emotions you felt with wanting a selfie with a buffalo. Overall, the story was really good, just made drastic jumps.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review and for your comments.I really don't know what they look for or how they critique these contests. It says to use at least 100 words and no poetry. I'm not a super emotional person so trying to give a reason was just that. I just thought it would be cool to get a picture with a bison that was across the street from me. I don't really consider myself a writer when it comes to doing anything outside of trying my hand at these contests. I learn a lot from others. Thank you again. Be Blessed
Comment from royowen
Bless you Lana Marie, I didn't think many adults have that much innocence, it is a pleasure to hear, i sometimes wish I could return to those days when my hopes and dreams were filled with that purity of innocence, no wonder Jesus said, unless you come as a child, you cannot see the kingdom of God. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Bless you Lana Marie, I didn't think many adults have that much innocence, it is a pleasure to hear, i sometimes wish I could return to those days when my hopes and dreams were filled with that purity of innocence, no wonder Jesus said, unless you come as a child, you cannot see the kingdom of God. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thank you Roy. Yes I do end up being a lot more naïve than I care to admit sometimes but I am thankful for my child like way of living. That very scripture gives me the confidence to just keep being who I am lol
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Well done dear girl
Comment from papa55mike
You know husbands, we love to tell the story about how they saved the wife from ultimate danger. It probably gets longer every time he tells it. What a wonderfully written story. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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You know husbands, we love to tell the story about how they saved the wife from ultimate danger. It probably gets longer every time he tells it. What a wonderfully written story. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Mike for your review. I guess I'd rather be married to someone who thinks he can save the day than a couch potato. :)