Babbling Brook
Released energy can lead to frolics3 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lobber,
This is a well done contest entry. I like the metaphor of laughter being a brook the burst its bank. It shows how laughter can raise from a giggle to a roar all at once.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
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Hi Lobber,
This is a well done contest entry. I like the metaphor of laughter being a brook the burst its bank. It shows how laughter can raise from a giggle to a roar all at once.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
Comment from amy barnes1
I like this poem a lot!!!:) ... A positive perspective on something that could be interpreted differently to others. The exclamation mark at the end is fantastic because it emphasizes enthusiasm about something awesome...laughter!:)
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I like this poem a lot!!!:) ... A positive perspective on something that could be interpreted differently to others. The exclamation mark at the end is fantastic because it emphasizes enthusiasm about something awesome...laughter!:)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
Ooh, I like this! You've used an effective personification for the brook. Babbling, bursts, and laughter all set an exuberant tone for this short-form poem.
My only suggestion, and this is just personal preference, would be to not capitalize brook.
Best of luck with your entry...I think you have a great one here.
Julie
:-)
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Ooh, I like this! You've used an effective personification for the brook. Babbling, bursts, and laughter all set an exuberant tone for this short-form poem.
My only suggestion, and this is just personal preference, would be to not capitalize brook.
Best of luck with your entry...I think you have a great one here.
Julie
:-)
** This reviewer has pledged to rate in accordance with site guidelines.**
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024