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free verse poetry on the sorrow winter brings2 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
There's a rich musicality to your poem, with sonic resonance underlying its near alliteration in places, suggesting will sound great when read aloud.
Over Winters frozen lust <= I'm guessing that this is intended to be possessive, rather than plural? (Winter's)
then through raging river's rush <= if you are just reading us aloud, it really doesn't matter, but for readers some clarity would help: is it a river? Or multiple rivers? I would probably leave off the possessive apostrophe, for clarity.
My sense reading this is that you are really focused on the sound of this piece rather than the visual presentation. So there is no need to add a picture. You might try experimenting with fonts and colors though just to make your text stand out a little bit more visually.
This is a good one. Thanks for sharing.
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There's a rich musicality to your poem, with sonic resonance underlying its near alliteration in places, suggesting will sound great when read aloud.
Over Winters frozen lust <= I'm guessing that this is intended to be possessive, rather than plural? (Winter's)
then through raging river's rush <= if you are just reading us aloud, it really doesn't matter, but for readers some clarity would help: is it a river? Or multiple rivers? I would probably leave off the possessive apostrophe, for clarity.
My sense reading this is that you are really focused on the sound of this piece rather than the visual presentation. So there is no need to add a picture. You might try experimenting with fonts and colors though just to make your text stand out a little bit more visually.
This is a good one. Thanks for sharing.
🦍
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
Comment from kahpot
Wow! to me this reads very sad-it is powerful, I love the fact that I am reading about "burning" while concentrating on the cold of winter, and a family's struggle to survive, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Wow! to me this reads very sad-it is powerful, I love the fact that I am reading about "burning" while concentrating on the cold of winter, and a family's struggle to survive, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
