Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your poem is really powerful! The way you describe being burned out like an old cigarette really struck me. I love how the imagery of the ashes falling to the ground makes you feel a sense of loss. Your poem is raw and honest. Congrats on your first post! I enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2024

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Wow -- this certainly paints a very dark place to which a relationship has dragged the 'speaker'... Hopefully, there will be a fresh pack of candy cigs to share with a new partner or simply enjoy for fun's sake! Thanx for sharing that depth of words this morning...

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

First up, Welcome to FS.
Well, this very interesting and intriguing, and so free form should be, you give the reader a couple of scenarios here, that someone's partner is cheating or that someone keeps going back to a relationship they know is burnt, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

First off, welcome to FanStory and congratulations on your first post.

Your poem is unique and the simile very clearly explains a relationship that is all burned out.

Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024