Comment from Mark Schardine

Excellent

Spring means storms, and yet as winter ends, we notice a moment of calm, and a few signs that we will find dangers as the new season arrives. We see how nature gives subtle signs.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This haiku, Be Still, has the proper formatting and captures the quiet between the storm's trumpeting and sees the snapshot of a still world at peace. Nice.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy 😊

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

This was deftly done. It seems though, that some folks aren't reading the other poets, because some of the poems are almost just copies of others, and one even talked about summer with no reference. I am having fun.
Karen

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

Hello, Karen, the book is growing so fast that it's hard to keep track but I am trying. I haven't seen people coping in previous stanzas, can you give me more information? The stanzas have to be linked to the previous stanza but not copying.

Thank you very much 😊

gypsy

Comment from Cindy Decker 3

Excellent

Gypsy,
This is a very beautiful poem for the Renga collection!
My favorite line is the last one; the soft tone of the rain holds still.
Good luck with the book Gypsy!
Best wishes,
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Nice one! I liked how you personified the thunder as it takes a deep breath and the rain holds still. It feels like that stillness in between the rainstorms that happen sometimes.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, big sister 😊

Love,
marival

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

I really do like the way your words enhance the artwork, (I rely on the artwork to help me) I a really looking forward to reading/purchasing this book, so many contributors, so many wonderful entries, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

Thank you very much 😊

gypsy

Comment from RJ Heritage

Excellent

There is a powerful awareness that cones with being still. My grandma often would have be still and silent as we looked on and listened to the sounds that would otherwise be unheard. I still do it to this day.
R J

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024

wise grandma

Thank you very much, RJ

Gypsy 😊

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Lovely! I could practically see feel those raindrops on the leaves and enjoyed that personification of thunder. I thought the verses were coming out of winter into spring but yours suggests winter? Thanks for sharing Debbie

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024

The verse is late winter before spring but I used the wrong kind of presentation. I changed the pictures and added ''late winter'' in my notes. Thank you for letting me know.

Gypsy 😊

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

This looks like a very cool book to do. I enjoyed your Haiku and the personification of the thunder and rain as fall closes and the leaves come down. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, Marilyn

Gypsy 😊

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

love the image of thunder taking a breath and leaves dropping in silence
and the rain holding still is a great concluding line
smooth flow - no spag or typos

thank you for sharing!
shelley :)



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 Comment Written 05-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024

Thank you very much, Shelley

Gypsy 😊